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Clock, Illusion, Imagination, Magic, Magpie Tales, Miracles, Monday Poetry Potluck, Reality, Reversal, Rewind, Time travel, Turn back back, Wave of the wand, Z to A challenge
Late into the night it was
Well beyond midnight I thought
In chaos, some peace I sought
But feared it was a lost cause
So I scampered and scurried
Of fleeting time, I worried
This was my only big chance
Just a few hours until dawn
Then I would be dead and gone
And from a noose, I would dance
So I dug, fast as I could
‘Neath the floor right where I stood
Tired and torn, I sat to rest
Staring at the looming clock
What I saw gave me a shock
Thought it was some crazy test
The hour hand now moved behind
And mode was set to “Rewind”
On this magic, I relied
Cast away dread, and burrowed
Soon I was on open road
With a new time on my side
There, a man waited for me
In my ear, he hissed “you’re free”…
** Posted for:
Willow Manor’s Magpie Tales – Week 41
Leo’s Z to A Challenge – Letter I (for Illusion and In reality)
Monday Poetry Potluck – Magic & Miracles, Wonder & Wizardry
Folks, please do check these out!! Trust me, you’ll be glad you did!!! š **
This is just chilling! Very nicely done.
Mine are here. http://razzamadazzle.wordpress.com/2010/11/20/apprentice/ and http://razzamadazzle.wordpress.com/2010/11/21/poetry-potluck/
Gee..thank a ton Teresa.. I hope it didn’t get you spooked! š Glad you liked it though!!
xoxox
Love the story in this one.
Oh.. thank you so much, Charlie..
Fiction ROCKS! š
Oh my goodness, Kavita, what pacing … just moves, moves, moves. Feeling a bit breathless and then I too feel so free at the end. Faboulous work here. Well done. Fine Potluck choice.
Poem on …
Oooohh..thank you so much, Jamie.. I suppose that breath of freedom at the end saved the day, eh?! I am so glad you enjoyed this racy piece, my dear friend..
And you are always so generous and kind with your words for me… THANK YOU!!!
xoxox
Hello Kavita!!! Very well said blog friend
Heeeyyy Haisley! Thanks for your kind words here, my friend.. glad you enjoyed the read!
xoxoxo
Cool! I think that form of execution is quite morbid (aside from the guillotine, which doesn’t really hurt at all). Very interesting read!
Oh.. I so agree with you, Shigune.. I mean, COME ON!! How CAN you hang someone till their eyes pop?!!> That’s really horrible! I just HAD to set this guy free in my poem! š
Nice to be free, it’s almost magical to achieve it!
You can say that again, Reflections!!! Freedom rocks!!! Glad you enjoyed this one…
xoxo
This was terrific. The pacing suited the escape mode perfectly! I’m so glad that freedom was gained!
Wooohooo!! Glad you enjoyed this racy poem, Talon… I guess I just got into that mood.. and hence such a pace! š Thanks for your kind words here, lady.. you are very sweet…
Take care, and have a fabulous week ahead! xoxo
A nicely done dark piece!
Gee.. thanks a ton, Anthony! Glad you liked it! š
Like Joshua in the bible, time stood still until what needed to be done was done. Woohoo! Freedom!
Awesome poem…
Woohoo indeed!! Thanks for that insight into the Good Book, Ruth… it was very sweet of you! Glad you enjoyed this read…
I guess there is something about freedom that makes one just breathe easy…
Take care, my friend.. xoxox
The hour hand now moved behind
And mode was set to āRewindā
On this magic, I relied
Cast away dread, and burrowed
Soon I was on open road
With a new time on my side…
magic indeed, glad to know that you are free at last…
perfect poem,
superb for potluck and for magpie…
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I am free, Jingle.. free enough to set my muses free too! hehehe
Glad you enjoyed this “magic” filled piece, my friend!!
Hugs and cheers coming your way…
Whoa, amazing poem! It sent shivers down my spine as I read. The rhyme and flow makes it even more wonderful. What joy one must get when being set free, when all they know is that they’ll be hung soon. Great poem!
You said it, DP!! When all you expect is to be hung, but instead, in the next few hours, you actually find yourself free and breathing…what a joy that must be!!
Glad you liked this one, babes! Thank you so much for the super encouragement and appreciation you’ve shown here..
Love ya!
Mystique of your words runs deep to an open road… well done.
Oh.. thank you, Reflections.. your appreciative comments here mean a great deal to me!!
Glad you liked this piece!
Indeed it is a illusion in reality! Perfectly written =P
hahahah.. thanks a ton for the encouraging words here, Riika!! YOU ROCK!! Love ya loads!
xoxox
Whew, made me panic!
heheheh… quickened your pulse, eh? Imagine what might have happened to our prisoner when he saw the clock hand move backwards!! š
great kavi..
Gee.. thanks, FL!! I am flattered!
Real life poetry (before the death penalty)… Pretty amazing effort really… the poem and the tunnel! š
Thanks a bunch, Stafford!! Glad you could appreciate the efforts gone into this poem… xoxox
And the tunnel – hmm.. that was an after-effect of continuous “Prison Break” watching! š
How did I do that??? Should read ‘after the death penalty’ of course! That minor error might not be important to you but it is to anyone on ‘death row’! Ummm… forget it!
Uh ohhh… if that’s the case, then ‘after the death penalty’ goes to the top of my to-read-real-soon list!! DEFINITELY CANNOT FORGET IT!
And trust me, no error is ever minor!! Thanks for reminding me this of little thing.. š
Kavita!
I feel I have been running hard, reading your poetry.
Edgy!
Now now, Nino.. don’t you start panting!! š Glad you enjoyed this poem, girl… and thanks for this sweet and encouraging comment!! Made me smile š
What a poem!
Aww.. thanks a ton, Trisha!! Glad you enjoyed it!! xoxoxo
What a great tale!
Yaaaayyy.. glad you enjoyed it, Panda Wolf!!Thank youuu!!
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cleverly written- great read!
Gee.. thanks a BUNCH, Kathe… your appreciation here means a lot to me… and I so glad you liked this poem!
yaaayyy
Don’t you wish there was a magical “rewind” button for life?
š You can say that again, Willow! I wonder how many times I would use that button! š
free at last!
Phhheewww….
Relieved… no?! š
Wow! I really like it! thanks for sharing… I am a huge Edgar Allen Poe fan and it reminded me of some of his work for a moment there… and the “Twilight Zone” as well! :0)
Wohooow!!! Now THAT is quite a compliment, Monica… THANK YOU!!! I feel so honored… I am gloating actually!! š
Glad you liked this poem so much, my dear friend…. your encouragement here is MOST appreciated!!
Many hugs to you..
We all count our days by the clock. Nice piece, Kavita!
Hah! You can say that again, Eric! If only that darned clock could move both ways! š
Glad you liked this one, E.. thanks for stopping by..
This told an amazing story, it played out so vividly in your words. The panic, the terror, the confusion, the freedom, but at a cost. Wonderfully well crafted, well rhymed and entertaining to read š
Aahaa.. glad you found it entertaining, M! That poor prisoner had a hard time though! Thankfully for him time decided to turn back a few hours š
Thanks for your kind words here, Mark… I always look forward to your comments here…
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Ahhh!… very interesting.. I liked it…
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Oh.. thanks a bunch, Shashi.. I really appreciate your kind words here… I am glad you enjoyed this piece..
Do-over .. rewind .. if only! Nicely written.
Aww.. thanks a ton, Helen.. you are too kind! Glad you liked this read…
WOW…that was close!
hehe..you bet it was, Timoteo!! š
Hope you enjoyed it though! xox
I had to laugh because we’re in the throes of watching “Prison Break” reruns too and that the immediate image that came to mind. Nicely done.
Oh my gosh, Victoria!! That’s crazy… cuz I guess I got the idea for this poem from recently watching “prison break” myself… all seasons!!!! hehehehe
Funny how we could both go back to that with this poem!!!!! Glad you enjoyed the read, Vic…. THANK YOUUUU !!!! š xoxo
thats an amazing write…
the ending was superb…
well penned.
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Aww.. thanks a ton, Raji! I am happy you enjoyed this one…
As for the ending, I just couldn’t help but put some drama into it.. š
xoxo
Glad you let your imagination run free with this one; it took me along for the ride. Enjoyed the ‘Great Escape.’
heheh.. That imagination always seems to be running free.. š Glad you enjoyed this particular escapade though! š Thank you for your sweet words here, Hedgewitch.. you are too kind!! xoxoxo
What a good take on the prompt. Different and delightful. I hop2 he ran and ran and ran!
Eeee… he ran, aright! Else he would get caught (again) š
Glad you enjoyed this poem, Barbara.. it’s so nice of you to stop by here and leave a comment.. I really appreciate it!
wow!!! sad, poetic, makes it enjoyable and painful at the same time š¦
Awww.. don’t be too sad Lynnaima… atleast he was free in the end š
I hope you liked this poem though… thanks for stopping by, my dear..
xoxo
Oh, it made me breathless, till the last line then I could only breath a sigh of relief!
This is heavy! I felt like I was the one in your poem…weird??? really, how could I feel that way Kavita? Maybe it is your magic with words that gives such effect on your readers!
heheheh … I know.. I guess this poem was a bit racy (unnecessarily too perhaps)… But I am glad you enjoyed it, Amity…
And thank you so much for your sweet and kind words of appreciation here.. you are very kind…
Much love to you, my friend.. xoxox
Cool like a magic dream…I loved it Kavita! quite a tale!
Aww.. thanks a bunch, 2Z… had to spin up some fiction here… needed it myself!
Glad you enjoyed it too..
xoxo
This would be a good scene in a book that I would want to read. The ending’s perfect!
Woohooo.. thanks, Reason..you are too sweet!! Glad you enjoyed this poem.. and its ending!! Freedom really rocks.. doesn’t it?! š
Very clever! And then what happened?
hahahahah… impatience is killing… isn’t it?! š Glad you enjoyed this one, DS…
Have a great week!! xoxoxoox
Kavita, now that I know you write these on the spot, I’m amazed. So, I’m wondering, I don’t see it in your “About” page, are currently trying to put a poetry book together? You really need to have one, because I want to buy it and lay it on my nightstand so I can read one every night before I go to bed. I’m not kidding.
Oh my God, Ollin… I am totally flattered! If I ever have a poem book published, I will DEFINITELY let you know!! š Gosh… your words are really encouraging, my friend! Thank you soooooooooooooo much!!
Many many hugs to you!! xoxox
Great poem but a little creepy. Is the narrator truly free? Or has he landed himself in a prison worse than what he escaped?
hehehhe.. isn’t that the real question now, Liz?!?! š Glad you read the poem this way.. I kinda had the same thing in mind while I was writing this one..
Thanks for your precious comments here, my dear..
many hugs!
Oh! this is so lovely… š
nice rhyming scheme…
ww.. thank you so much,Sumit.. you are too sweet! Glad you enjoyed these rhymes.. heheh.. I LOVE writing ’em… š
hissed “you’re free”
these words cannot be written, whispered, hissed…whatever…enough!
I need that mans hiss of freedom this am…thank you Kav
besitos
Annie
You can say that again, Annie! I need that hiss too… maybe that’s just why I wrote this one.. to enjoy that freedom I have.. š
Take care, girl.. and thanks for your sweet words here…
xoxo
A beautiful escape … I like poems where the poet interact with self, and take me along on the ride. Don’t you just love magic?
Ohh…. magic is totally magical! Just WHO doesn’t like magic, I wonder! š
I am glad you enjoyed this piece, Ijm.. thank you so much for your kind words here..
Have a wonderful year ahead!
Great concept. Thanks for sharing.
Gee.. thanks a ton, Poemblaze… glad you liked it!
xoxo
I like poems that tell stories. Keep going Kavita!
Gee.. thanks a bunch, Fyodor!! Very glad you enjoyed this one…
Happy a wonderful year ahead, my friend!
amusing tale… nice one my friend. Hope you are well
Warmest Salad
Luke x
hehhe.. I know.. quite a racy one, this! š Glad you enjoyed the read…
And yes, I am very very well indeed… catch you of FB.. Real soon! š
xoxo
Your efforts of rhyme and meter and subject always work so well together. Great read! :))
Gee..thank you so much for the kind compliment, Eaton…
A very happy new year to youuuu!!!
xooxoxo
WOW!I guess it’s time for me to watch prison break,too.Always tell myself next time.my loss.
had a great read!
hahahah…you’ve GOT TO watch it, June! I kept postponing too.. but when I finally started watching it, I was hooked.. LIKE CRAZY!!
Glad you enjoyed the poem, lady.. and I hope it has motivated you enough to watch PB! š
xoxoox
Kavi, I loved this one…free flowing, smooth to read and assimilate as always š
~suja
Gee. thanks a ton, Suja!! Glad you enjoyed this one so much!! I suppose is always a enjoyable concept š
Nice poem that tells a story! I enjoyed reading it.
Gee.. thanks, John!!! Glad you enjoyed the story-poem here…
A very happy new year to you, my friend…
xoxox
What a nice one here Kavz..
Here I go again..
How I am writing all that I have gone through by collecting those memories again could be the digging and then my victory screams- I’m Free..
Really, couldn’t help relating myself in this manner!!
As always, a nice read and awesome poetry.. š
You rock Gal..
Love xxxxxxxx
YESSS.. .you are freeeeeeeee.. and isn’t that super awesome! Chuck those awful memories aside, and enjoy this bliss…
I love it that you loved this poem, sweetie… Hurray to you, and Hurray to freedom!! Thank you for being so nice to me, darling….
xoxoxooxox
Beautiful poem…haunting.
ooohh.. thank you so much, Linda!!!
xoxox