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Image credits: "My Favorite Things" by ashesoffire00, and "Favorite Things" by phoenix_karenee @ DeviantArt... Superimposition of the images and the cloud effect was later done by yours truly...
White butter clouds
hanging oh so playfully
From silver chords
wound ’round sky’s own old pulley
Azure heavens
crisp and pure as can be
Kissed and nudged
by weightless zephyrs on sea
Caramel swirls
of a sweet salted delight
Set off alarms,
sizzle and make me feel light
Milk chocolate layers
that melt on my tongue
From moody
dungeons back now I have sprung
Voice so rich
like deep bass amidst clamor
Eyes that pierce
right through my heart’s hard armor
Dense shadows
of lashes dark, curled and long
And trembling
transparent like some frail song
If I can do
I sure will do
All that’s in my power…
To blow a few bubbles and indulge myself
In this warm sinful shower…
**I had originally written this poem a couple of weeks back, but had never gotten around to posting it… But today, I happened to see Lynda’s (aka Echostains) fantastic Poetry Challenge @ Bookstains, and I simply HAD to post it in response to the challenge (with a lil bit of editing so as to fit the challenge theme/criteria)… Gosh!! This was a whole lot of fun!!! Check out the challenge yourself, and play along… I bet you’ll LOVE it!! Oh… and try “singing” this poem to the tune of “These are a few of my favorite things” from Sound Of Music … :D**
***And what better place to put up this poem than One Shot Wednesday (week 44)! Maaaannn…. I REALLY missed y’all, my favorite One-Shot-Stars! Well well… now I am back… and all set to read too!! 🙂 See y’all soooon!!***
****And I am now adding this to Poetry Potluck (week 38) as well since I could not come up with anything more suited for the theme (Inspired by a song) 🙂 ****
How I write, is mine...How you read, is yours 
I did have to chuckle as I read the title of the poem and reread the lines of the poem…quite enjoyed this verse!
hehehhe… it was fun to write too, Charles! Glad you enjoyed it!! 🙂
xoxoxo
Your writing is, oh so fattening!
hahahhah.. I have decided to take that as a compliment, Sam.. thank you!!! 😀
First the image then the written spoke to me. I like it
Gee… how kind of you, Kodjo.. thank you for your encouraging words, my friends… it’s been a while since I have “written” … so your comments here CERTAINLY mean a great deal to me!!
That was very clever. Enjoyed it.
hehhe.. thanks a bunch, Anthony!! Glad you enjoyed this one… twas fun writing it too!! 🙂
Had me smiling, Kavita. I’m thinkin it’s a big shower, with lots of room…and the caramel and chocolate were delicious.
You got THAT right, Joy! The caramel and chocolate were to die for (maybe kill too ;))
I am glad you enjoyed this one, sweetie… and about that shower, it’s a SUPER tiny one, and can hold just about me 🙂 hehehhe
ah this is lovely kavita…blow those bubbles…skies pulley…nice touch….
Aww.. thanks, B!! Blowing bubbles is such fun!! And well… those clouds certainly look like they are being controlled by “someone/something”… lolz..
Glad you enjoyed it… hope you sang it to the tune 🙂
from the beginning “white butter clouds” to the ending “in this warm sinful shower”…i’ve been taken on a wonderful ride through your glorious imagery and playful descriptions…as if you were dancing the entire time while your words danced right along with you…you make it look so easy to write so creatively, as if all the words know they belong together…a wonderful, delightful to read poem…thank you for this one…
Ooooohhh… I certainly had a lovely time writing this one, Janice.. and your sweet words here made me beam with pride!! Thank you ever so much, my friend… I really appreciate your appreciation towards this piece of mine… and am ecstatic that you enjoyed it so much!!! Yaaaayyyy
(hugs)
I expected something dark( because of the pic) but it was so fanciful and rich ( and a bit fattening)
so good to have you back Kavita
hugs from the Moon
LOL.. that pic was to spook you out, Moon dear! 🙂 It is a mixture of so many things – music, eyes, clouds…and the list goes on! 🙂
But I am reeeeeeeeeeeeally glad you enjoyed my (slightly fattening) poem.. heheh…
And YES!! It feel great to BE BACK!!! Thanks for the warm welcome, my sweet friend…
xoxoxoxoxo
Nice…and delicious 🙂 shower sometimes is the only peace you can have in the day….
hehhe…you bet, Ayala!!! And all we really need is some peace.. no!? 😉
ooh you’re back! loved this one.. and i did end up singing it like the song.. fun! beautiful imagery as usual.. my favorite line
‘Azure heavens
crisp and pure as can be
Kissed and nudged
by weightless zephyrs on sea’
I love it that even in your fun poems there are lines that make me suck my breath in..
also ..and I know you must have had lots of these, I passed on the Versatile Blogger award to you a couple of days ago : http://dhaami.wordpress.com/2011/04/26/i-take-a-bow/
heheh…so glad you liked this one, Dhaami… and yaaaayy… you sang it too… how sweet!! 😀
Thank you for your kind and encouraging words, sweetie… (hugs)
And …sorry about the delay.. the vacation thing has left a ton of comments in my inbox 😦 Getting to those 1 message at a time… and I AM LAZY!!!!
But yes.. I did accept the award (at long last)… couldn’t let that pass…. heheheh
mwaahh!!
You made a shower seem the ultimate sensory experience!
hahahah… it is, for me, Kim! I get the most creative ideas while in it! 🙂
Hope you enjoyed this poem, my friend…
Wow, this is intricate! It kind of reminds me of a mind trip or a bizarre dream remembered with pleasure. Thanks for sharing.
Awww… thanks for the awesomely dreamy words, Elizabeth… they sure made me feel like this was a super profound poem.. heheh… I am VERY HAPPY you enjoyed this one, dear..
Kavita, sorry, but this was practically orgasmic! The lush descriptions of sensual delights, I tell ya, I think I have to go wake up Lex, LOL.
Truly delightful. Glad you took your time on this one, because it was worth the wait, for all of us! Missed seeing more of you during NaPoWriMo, so hope to read you again soon!
Peace, Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/05/04/road-asides/
HAHAHHAHAH… to each, his (her) own, Amy!! 😉 I am CERTAIN you enjoyed this poem! And I can’t thank you enough for that! hehehhe
You are one rocking lady!!!
Luv ya!!! xoxoxo
I love it! Makes me want chocolate right now… mmm. Your imagery is so delightful Kavs, makes me hunger for all sweet things 😀
And yes warm sinful showers, I definitely know how good they are, though currently it is too hot to indulge in them. Oh well. Glad to read this, great work!
HAHAHHA… don’t even remind me of the Indian “warmth”, Sonam… I am already sweating…ugghhh 😉
As for chocolate and caramel swirls….yummmiieee 🙂
Loved that you liked this one, sweetie… (hugs) and thanks for the ever encouraging words here!!!
xoxox
uuhhhh nice – caramel swirls and white butter clouds…your words melt on my tongue like milk chocolate….hmmmm…..love this kavita…and welcome back!!
Ooohhhh… and I certainly hope you enjoyed it, Claudia dear!! 🙂 Thanks for the lovely words and the warm welcome… I love it here!! 😀
xoxoxo
This is great Kavita – putting it on now 🙂 There are some wonderful lines in there;-
“Voice so rich
like deep bass amidst clamor
Eyes that pierce
right through my heart’s hard armor….”
I love the picture you have chosen too 🙂 Thanks for joining in the challenge with this unique poem – its very appreciated :-0
PS My poetry challenges are still open indefinitely
Woooohoooo!! So happy you liked and enjoyed this one, Lynda!! And really pleased that you liked the image too!! Yaaaaayyy!!! 😀
Thank you so much for the encouragement, and for putting up this fun piece on your challenge post! It’s an honor for me to be up there!
Love you loads, my friend…
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so sweet and tasty..your words could make me drool indeed…and of course food for thought 🙂
teeheehee… glad you enjoyed this fun ride, Shreya! Thank you ever so much for your delicious words here… 🙂
xoxoxoxo
…what a lovely shower…great image too
Nice to see you back 🙂
lolz.. thanks a ton, Eclipse… for the oh-so-awesome words AND for the pleasant welcome…
(hugs)
If I can do
I sure will do
All that’s in my power…
To blow a few bubbles and indulge myself
In this warm sinful shower…
A silly comment for words woven in a very diverse imagery! With temperatures soaring, I could do with a cold shower! Then that won’t be much of shower…eh?
Butter, milk chocolate, caramel- bring it on I say.. errr.. a li’l topping of white cream please..
I told you, you could do without this comment.. wink! 😆
Hugs xox
The image is mind- blowing! Wonder if this would happen to me if I get in that shower. I hope you have a spare cubicle for me!
LOLZ.. me is super happy you liked that image! As for that spare cube, I’ll make room for u, gal! Don’t you worry!! 😀
HAHAHHAHA.. i NEED ALL YOUR COMMENTS, Olivia! They are like a burst of energy! 🙂 In fact, they are fattening! 😉 They make my head bloat with glee… woohoo!
Thank youuuuuuuuu
SO GLAD you enjoyed this one, lady… you are one doll alright!!!
Love the caramel, salt and chocolate!
Yuummmmmm….isn’t it?! 😉
beautiful, beautiful imagery…yes we must do what we can do!
Oh.. absolutely, Laura! And sometimes, we can what we must too.. like ENJOY!!! 🙂
Glad you liked this poem, my dear friend…thanks fro the inspiring words..
Beautifully playful and fun…yet twists of “trembling, transparent like some frail song”…From
“White butter clouds ~ hanging oh so playfully” to “blow[ing] a few bubbles and indulg[ing] myself ~ In this warm sinful shower…” this is fun to read over and over. Your descriptions and imagery are wonderful.
Yiipppppeeee!! Your comment made me dance with joy, Tolbert! Thank you soooo much for the kind and most encouraging words here, my dear friend!! I am EXTREMELY pleased to see that you enjoyed this poem so much! Hurraaaayyy!!
Nice layering…the “warm sinful shower” i see that line got everyone attention…very comforting….bkm
hahahah… you can say that again, Barbara.. that last line sure got people’s imaginations running haywire! 🙂
Glad you too enjoyed the poem, my friend… and thanks for the nice words here… they are always appreciated!!
xoxox
I enjoy how tangible the images are. Good work! 😀
teehee…glad you enjoyed it all here, Matt.. thanks for the encouraging words!! Much appreciated!
😀
You…My Clever little friend are so talented!
You make me smile and shake my head in awe.
What a wonderful gift you are…..G
hahahah… and you make me smile with your flattering words, G-man… all I can say is, THANK YOUUUUU
Keep rocking, my friend!!!
xoxoox
Oh, my such a “delicious” poem, Kavita. Who wouldn’t weaken and give in?
Awww.. thanks, Patti… but really, chocolate and eyelashes do make me weak… teeheehee
What wonderful imagery! I really enjoyed it.
Gee.. thank you, Madeleine!! So glad you enjoyed this poem…
xoxoox
i love so many of the phrases in this poem, Kavita! ♥ “singing” it made me smile!
hehehe…you sang it, eh?! Woowwwiiieeesss!! Thanks, Dani!! Me is soooo happy you could enjoy this one… I just LOVED the challenge!! 😀
Wow.. showers wont be the same anymore thinking of this poem 🙂
loved it
LOLZ… don’t think too much, B… 🙂 Just enjoy the shower!
But really, thanks a ton!! Glad you enjoyed this read!!
I loved the assonance of urr in this, beginning with buttery clouds – it set the tone for something delightful to come, and the poem didn’t disappoint. Playful, yet skillful, you led the reader in a caramel toffee dance. Nice work, Kavita!
Gee.. thanks for the appreciative and encouraging words, Cindy.. they are a treasure to me!!
xoxooxox
bubbles of sinful shower … well, few words, million icons! Lovely read fleur de-lis!
You said it, babes!! 😉 Those bubble, that chocolate, those clouds, that shower… quite a sinful combination!! heeheeheh
Glad you enjoyed it all, dearie… mwaaahhhzz!! Thank youuu
Lovely title…made me pause and think Kavita.. and sinful shower..oops, but it was quite relaxing once I read about the size of shower in one of your replies… enjoyed the write very much.. lovely..
LOLZ… get your imagination going, Rameshji! ) Glad you enjoyed this one…. and thanks ever so much for your visits here… VERY MUCH appreciated, my friend..
Azure heavens
crisp and pure as can be
Kissed and nudged
by weightless zephyrs on sea
>> lovely
one shot wonder! Loves ya Kavs
Salad Boy x
Awww..you signed this one with the name I gave you…. that is sooo sweet, Luke! 😀
Oh, and I hope you “sang” this one to the tune.. 🙂
Have a great weekend, my friend!!
xoxox
Ah yes, truly things to love right there…delectable imagery, both playful and indulgent, from the white butter clouds right down to what is apparently a very interesting and satisfying shower. Ha – good to have you back at One Shot again, Kavita! Your presence was much missed!
LOL… seriously, that shower thing is managing to work up people’s imagination 🙂 All I meant was a delightful shower of all those things that I thrive on.. hehehe.. eg. chocolate.. and the likes… ya know?!
Never mind now… I am thoroughly the places my readers are taking me now… with the plethora of interpretations… heheheh
Oh maaaaaaaaaaannn… I was missing this SO MUCH! I am glad to be back to Poetry and to One Shot! 😀
Thanks for wonderful comments and for the warm welcome, Chris… it’s most appreciated, my friend!!
xoxox
Awesome poem! I love the photo combo you created to go with it too. 🙂
YAaahooo!! Thanks, Rachel!! SO GLAD you liked the photo as well!! Although the original pictures are by some amazing artists at DeviantArt, I kinda did like the superimposition I ended up doing as well.. hehehh
Thanks again, sweetie!!
xoxoxo
A delightful read!
Yaaaaaaaaayyy!! Thanks a bunch, KB!!! So glad you enjoyed this one.. 🙂
Oh, I love these words: “Kissed and nudged by weightless zephyrs on sea” – wow!!
You have such a talent for blending beautiful words together Kavita!
Chloe xx
Wee…you are such a doll, dear… thanks for the shower of lovely words here… mwaaah!! So glad you liked this one, sweetie Chloe!
Great metaphors – Love the image of “white butter clouds”
teheee… thanks, Marousia! 🙂
(hugs!!)
I dig the metaphors, kudos as always 🙂
Enjoy the potluck!
http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/06/05/on-promises/
Yaaaayyy…. thankoooo, Lynnaima!! You are awesome!!
Hope you are having a tra-la-la potluck yourself!! 😀
xoxoox
So fun, Kavita. Another song that goes through my head. This one is tasty.
hehehehhe…. enjoy it all, Victoria! And thanks for the kind comments here…. MUCH LOVE TO YOU!!
I love this song, but I truly love those weakeners too 😉
a very beautiful, sensuous poem Kavita….the chocolates, the caramel swirls…what a delight! perfectly tempting and what with that warm sinful shower? well i couldn’t enjoy that much at this time of year where its soooooooo hot! gotta go for a sinful cold shower na… 😀
HAHAHHAHA.. you are quite right, Amity… a warm shower when it’s already so warm…noooo!! 🙂 But what I meant was a sinful shower of that chocolate and the buttery clouds and all the rest of it.. yummmyy!! 😉
GLAD you enjoyed it, girl! Your comment totally made my warm day so much so sweeter! 🙂
Kavita, this was sinfully delicious!
You are most creative indeed.
Well done!
Whoaa!! That was quite a compliment, Andy!! Thank yo so much… it’s really very generous and kind of you to say that, my friend..
Such lovely favorite things..sky’s own old pulley! Amazing!!
hehehe… you like it too, Lyn?! 🙂 I just LOVE watching those clouds…
Thanks for your sweet comments, my dear…. (hugs)
so creative and delicious! totally enjoyed it 🙂
teeheehee… and your comments are totally yummmyyyy, my friend… thank youuuuu!!
Oh this is really wonderful I really like the second to last stanza. Fantastic imagery
Woohooo!!! Thank you so much, my friend…
wonderful piece of writing. Not anything could have been done better. Absolutely love the vibrant imagery. Caramel and butter, then dungeons and armor. Love it:)
Gee.. thanks a bunch for the “shower” of kind words, Fred… very sweet of you to say that!!
Hugs!!
Lovely imagery, although I’m now craving chocolate!
hahahha… go have some, my friend!! Indulge in that awesomeness! 🙂
And thanks fro stopping by here… your comments are much appreciated!
Clouds showering wonderfully sweet rain – really brought a smile on, and gave away your sweet tooth weakness!
Here is mine: http://jaanpehchaan.wordpress.com/2011/06/07/searching/
thankooz
hahahah… the sweet tooth thing is really crazy, JP.. trust me! It has gotten me in trouble many a time.. LOLZ..
Glad you enjoyed this poem.. thank you!!
Kavita,
Your words are like manna that feed the reader’s soul in delight.
JP
http://tasithoughts.wordpress.com/2011/06/07/i-found-home/
Woohoo!! Quite a compliment, JP.. thanks ever so much!!
xoxo
I like this but I can’t my finger on why and what exactly
heheheh… just go by the words, crayfish… all I am saying is that those are the things I like 🙂
But thank you sooo much for the comments, my friend… and for liking this whimsical one… (hugs)
If I can find words.. I can comment.. here is my song, Somebody’s me
Someone is Special
Awww… I take that as a compliment, my dear SiS… thank you soooo much…