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With facts obliterated,
Truth dissipated
Into frosty air
And Hell’s lair
What is now left
In a world bereft
Is this string of lies
As some coveted prize

This shroud of mistrust
Eyed with disgust
Keen to be lifted
And shifted
Lies unmoved
Firmly grooved
Whose soul is to sell
This, only time shall tell

 


**Posted for G-Man’s Friday Flash 55!! Go check it out for more stories/poems in 55 words!!! :) **

Comments
  1. Wow! What an awesome 55. It describes beautifully the emotional state I’m worried someone close to me is headed towards… thanks to a “string of lies” she thinks will get her the “coveted prize”.

  2. Jingle says:

    so powerful and beautiful 55.
    eloquent words.
    love the rhymes…

    Happy Friday! :)
    have fun today.

  3. brian says:

    wow. tight emotional piece kavita…been there, infortunately…

  4. Monkey Man says:

    Great 55. Love coming here.

  5. slpmartin says:

    Indeed a powerful 55…well siad.

  6. G-Man says:

    Kavita…
    You have a wonderful way with words my friend.
    I Loved your 55.
    Thank you so much for your fantastic support as well.
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End…G

  7. Cindy says:

    Really good, Kavita, well done.

  8. Deep words, and they flowed beautifully.

  9. hpicasso says:

    a soft sell of a hard truth…nice…the 55′s force compression, keep the veggies and taters, give us the MEAT !!!…your example is proof

    thanks for stopping by…if you care to:

    http://hpicasso.blogspot.com/2011/01/may-i.html

  10. Katherine says:

    Wow! A lot in that 55. Sounds like you have been stung. ouch

  11. mstevensson says:

    I really enjoyed the message here. Great ending!

  12. Dulce says:

    great one Kavita…

  13. Felicitas says:

    Nothing in society is as destructive as lies are. This is a really powerful 55!

  14. nessa says:

    Great 55. Sure makes you think.

  15. Whose soul is to sell… with all these rules :)

  16. I dislike lies, thus reading it just got me “sad and angry”. Nicely written! Happy Potluck!

    http://jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/

  17. “With facts obliterated,
    Truth dissipated
    Into frosty air
    And Hell’s lair”

    I really liked these lines.

  18. marousia says:

    Nice write – enjoyed reading it :)

  19. ‘bravo’ i yell
    still under your spell
    i jump at the thrill
    to bow to your skill

  20. Talon says:

    Kavita, this is amazing. Lies do have a way of destroying souls…

  21. Who’s soul is to sell … let’s hope we can keep our souls pure and beautiful … Lovely Kavita! Here is my Potluck http://scentofmyheart.wordpress.com/2011/01/23/standing-tall/

  22. hedgewitch says:

    Nice 55, and a nice potluck selection. The rhymes feed the progression,and the end leaves one with a few questions still.

  23. danroberson says:

    Lies unmoved, firmly grooved. A very awkward place to be, caught in a web of deceit.

  24. budhaaah says:

    ‘This shroud of mistrust
    Eyed with disgust’
    Its so relatable

  25. Excellent example of laconic poetry. Wraps the theme nicely into a small package of observations that all tie in well together. Always good to swing through and see what you’ve been writing. Take care,

    crb.

  26. Michael says:

    “Truth dissipated
    Into frosty air…”

    When I run in cold weather, I can always tell when I pass a spot where someone’s been smoking, even long after they’re gone. The telltale scent hangs in the air…. That’s what came to mind as I read your words. Thank you!

    • Kavita says:

      Now THAT’s what I call ‘power of association’, Michael!!! Amazing how certain words/things remind different people of different situations/incidents!
      Thanks for your sharing your insights here, M… most interesting!

  27. Fib-woven no well-woven, but surely a well-written poem. Enjoyed much … and whose soul to sell. We’ll see …

    Nice, Kavita.

  28. i cant stand lies…and selling ur soul to keep the truth hidden…this was an excellent write..

  29. Great flow here, nice subtle rhym es to accentuate your point.

  30. uma.a says:

    Lovely picture and a thoughtful poem.

  31. Katherine says:

    Your poem speaks of our present time. Lies are everywhere – politics, media, even in our neighborhood. It’s so hard to trust people.

    You wrote a powerful poem in just 55 words. Brilliant! :)

    • Kavita says:

      Aww.. it really is up to us how we handle all those lies.. don’t you think, Katherine?
      I really appreciate your insights here, my friend.. thank you..

  32. tasithoughts says:

    Kavita, perfection and so descriptive of what truthfully happens.

    JP

    http://tasithoughts.wordpress.com/2011/01/24/no-rings/

  33. fiveloaf says:

    only time shall tell- love it kavi!

  34. Eric says:

    Lies beget lies. A tasty Poluck Dish, Kavita!

  35. Beautifully written yet again :)

    Love the flow and the language you use

  36. pamela says:

    Yes, Kavita, so very true.
    Well done.

  37. rmpWritings says:

    I love the feel, the flow, the rhyme, and the visual look. Nice Job.

  38. Artswebshow says:

    Nicely done Kavita.
    Fantastic imagery here

  39. Wonderfully written :P Great work as always :3

  40. Ms. Peaches says:

    I really the the flow of this piece and that last line is a perfect close!!! Awesome!

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