With facts obliterated,
Truth dissipated
Into frosty air
And Hell’s lair
What is now left
In a world bereft
Is this string of lies
As some coveted prize
This shroud of mistrust
Eyed with disgust
Keen to be lifted
And shifted
Lies unmoved
Firmly grooved
Whose soul is to sell
This, only time shall tell
**Posted for G-Man’s Friday Flash 55!! Go check it out for more stories/poems in 55 words!!!
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Wow! What an awesome 55. It describes beautifully the emotional state I’m worried someone close to me is headed towards… thanks to a “string of lies” she thinks will get her the “coveted prize”.
P.S. Did you know your twitter logo links to the home page and not to your profile? I just tried to find you… @RhymeMeASmile
Yikes!!! Really?! Dang!!! Will fix the link as soon as I can!! Thanks for letting me know though, sweetie…
Btw, my twitter id us @kavsrao
Oh shoot!! That must really suck!! I hope you friend comes out of her current state of mind… And soon too!!
Thanks for the kind words here though… You have a gr8 weekend, Rachel.. xoxo
so powerful and beautiful 55.
eloquent words.
love the rhymes…
Happy Friday!
have fun today.
Aww..thanks, Ji… you always have the nicest words for me… and I really appreciate it!!!
wow. tight emotional piece kavita…been there, infortunately…
Ack!! It sucks..doesn’t it, B? Glad you are out in the open now… whheewww
Great 55. Love coming here.
I am flattered, MM.. thank you so much!!!!
Indeed a powerful 55…well siad.
Just a line of thinking on that day, Charles… so glad you liked it!!!
Kavita…
You have a wonderful way with words my friend.
I Loved your 55.
Thank you so much for your fantastic support as well.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End…G
(blushing)..thanks, my dear sweet G-Man!!! you are the best!!!
Really good, Kavita, well done.
Gee… thanks, Cin!!!
OUCH!!!
oh yea, DS.. ouch indeed!! (sigh)
Deep words, and they flowed beautifully.
Thanks for your kind words, Anthony.. they are much appreciated..
a soft sell of a hard truth…nice…the 55′s force compression, keep the veggies and taters, give us the MEAT !!!…your example is proof
thanks for stopping by…if you care to:
http://hpicasso.blogspot.com/2011/01/may-i.html
Oh yea, my friend! 55s make it compact and to the point!! And I like that!!
Glad you enjoyed this one, my friend..
Wow! A lot in that 55. Sounds like you have been stung. ouch
Eee… thankfully, NO!
This was not the result of a recent personal experience… but I gotta admit, I have seen it before.. (sigh)
I really enjoyed the message here. Great ending!
Thanks, Mark… glad you liked this one!!!
great one Kavita…
oohh..thanks, Dulce!!
Nothing in society is as destructive as lies are. This is a really powerful 55!
You bet, Felicitas!! Nothing indeed!
Thanks for your insights here, my friend..
Great 55. Sure makes you think.
Aww.. thanks a ton, Ness!!!
Whose soul is to sell… with all these rules
hahaha… you bet!! tough one, eh?
I dislike lies, thus reading it just got me “sad and angry”. Nicely written! Happy Potluck!
http://jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/
Gee.. Lies are a BIG PAIN!!!! It’s always a wonder why and how we handle them! grrr…
Anyway, thanks for your kind words here, my friend..
“With facts obliterated,
Truth dissipated
Into frosty air
And Hell’s lair”
I really liked these lines.
Oh..thank you so much, David.. I really appreciate your words here!
And that’s the truth.
Sadly, yes..
Nice write – enjoyed reading it
Gee..thanks, M !!!
‘bravo’ i yell
still under your spell
i jump at the thrill
to bow to your skill
Wooohooo!!! I am flattered, my friend!!! THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!!!
Kavita, this is amazing. Lies do have a way of destroying souls…
You can say that again, Talon! They really suck!
This is so nice.
Aww.. thanks a ton!!!
Who’s soul is to sell … let’s hope we can keep our souls pure and beautiful … Lovely Kavita! Here is my Potluck http://scentofmyheart.wordpress.com/2011/01/23/standing-tall/
You bet, Blaga!! I am keeping my fingers crossed too!
Glad you liked this poem, my dear… thank you…
Nice 55, and a nice potluck selection. The rhymes feed the progression,and the end leaves one with a few questions still.
Yaaaay… glad you saw it that way, Joy!!! It’s those lingering questions that eat away at one’s brain…don’t you think!?!? (sigh)
Lies unmoved, firmly grooved. A very awkward place to be, caught in a web of deceit.
Oh absolutely, Dan… a very awkward (and horrible) place to be! It’s like quicksand… ugghhh
‘This shroud of mistrust
Eyed with disgust’
Its so relatable
Uh ohh… relatable…but so darned unpleasant.. no?!
Excellent example of laconic poetry. Wraps the theme nicely into a small package of observations that all tie in well together. Always good to swing through and see what you’ve been writing. Take care,
crb.
Gee..thanks for the kind and appreciative words, CRB… they are invaluable to me!!
“Truth dissipated
Into frosty air…”
When I run in cold weather, I can always tell when I pass a spot where someone’s been smoking, even long after they’re gone. The telltale scent hangs in the air…. That’s what came to mind as I read your words. Thank you!
Now THAT’s what I call ‘power of association’, Michael!!! Amazing how certain words/things remind different people of different situations/incidents!
Thanks for your sharing your insights here, M… most interesting!
Fib-woven no well-woven, but surely a well-written poem. Enjoyed much … and whose soul to sell. We’ll see …
Nice, Kavita.
(sigh)… the global rise in corruption we see these days is quite alarming…don’t you think?! Makes me wonder how many souls are being sold (and to whom) each day!
Too many souls … even one: too many.
Well said, Jamie… too many indeed!
(sigh)
i cant stand lies…and selling ur soul to keep the truth hidden…this was an excellent write..
Thanks for views and kind words, Chim… most appreciated!
And yes.. lies really suck!
Great flow here, nice subtle rhym es to accentuate your point.
Aww..thanks a bunch for the kind words, Shan sweetie..
Lovely picture and a thoughtful poem.
Thank you so much, Uma..
Your poem speaks of our present time. Lies are everywhere – politics, media, even in our neighborhood. It’s so hard to trust people.
You wrote a powerful poem in just 55 words. Brilliant!
Aww.. it really is up to us how we handle all those lies.. don’t you think, Katherine?
I really appreciate your insights here, my friend.. thank you..
Kavita, perfection and so descriptive of what truthfully happens.
JP
http://tasithoughts.wordpress.com/2011/01/24/no-rings/
I knoww…such a sad truth, isn’t it, JP? Glad you liked the poem, my friend..
only time shall tell- love it kavi!
Aww…thanks, Kris.. you are too kind..
Lies beget lies. A tasty Poluck Dish, Kavita!
You can say that again, Eric.. lies only lead to more lies… grr!
Hope you enjoyed this dish, my friend..
Beautifully written yet again
Love the flow and the language you use
Aww… thank you so much, my dear!!!
Yes, Kavita, so very true.
Well done.
A sad truth… isn’t it, Pam?
Glad you liked the poem, my dear… thanks..
I love the feel, the flow, the rhyme, and the visual look. Nice Job.
Thank you so much, my friend..
Nicely done Kavita.
Fantastic imagery here
Gee..thanks a bunch, Richard.. very kind of you to say that!
Wonderfully written
Great work as always :3
Ooohh..thankoo, Riika…
Loviieezz!!
I really the the flow of this piece and that last line is a perfect close!!! Awesome!
Gee..thanks, Ms. Peaches.. you are very kind..