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Obscured
by laced veils
of broken thought
I wonder if I want
to really be seen
Tethered
to these pillars
of unyielding resolve
I suspect the strength
of my pliant will
Shadowed
by a shroud
of crystal emotions
I search the depths
of my hardened heart
Strangled
by tentacles
of unwelcome dreams
I gasp for a breath
of some noxious chance
And yet
Here I am…
Enamored
by the aura
of a glowing spirit
Ready to soar
into the vastness
of unending skies
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Obscured, tethered, shadowed, shackled, strangled (I just liked ‘shackled’! OK?–grin!)
“And yet
Here I amโฆEnamored…glowing spirit
Ready to soar..”..
Again! Again…once more. OMG!
Really nice, Kavita. thanks
Sometimes, even I don’t understand what is it that I am thinking/trying to say.. I guess that’s what happened in this poem… it just “happened” in a jiffy..
I am just glad I wrote it… my moment of whats-and-hows all jumbled up here! whew!
Thanks for appreciating that too, Steve dear! ๐
THANK YOU!!! SO glad I don’t have to fill out stupid fkg anagrams just to comment here. WHY don’t the Peeps stop that nonsense. Sorry, Kav–my rant for the month!!! Muahhh!
The peeps will do as they please… just like we do! ๐ Rant on, Steve… we all have our days… hehehhe
Really love the strength and tone of the final few lines…very fine poem IMHO.
Very kind of you to say that, Charles… Needed a powerful push to get myself to write today! Hence this poem! ๐
Lots of spaces in here to read and ponder–and some excellent language: “Shadowed
by a shroud/ of crystal emotions…”really appealed to me, because it combines so many different feels–crystal is clear, yet you’re shadowed, crystal is hard, yet you’re shrouded, a feel of cloth–just lovely mind candy Kavita. Enjoyed it much and your effort to push yourself paid off.
It’s so very nice of you to say that, Joy… thank you !!!
Really, I was at a total loss of ideas and words today! I just wrote what and how it came to my mind..
They say if you keep thinking happy, you will feel happy too.. similarly, I kept WRITING today.. so I feel inspired to write more.. ๐
And thanks so much for liking it, my friend… and for the appreciation you’ve shown here… it does mean a great deal to me!
You write like the angels… if they exist, well here you are so… I see that sadness vanish as you reach that last stanza
Just B E A U T I F U L !
๐
Hugs
Oh my my my!! Thank YOU, Dulce!! WOWWWW…that REALLY made me feel like a fairy ๐ soaring skies too maybe.. hehehhehe
Glad you liked the positive end here, my dear… xoxoxo
Sad, intricate, a wanting to break free. Lovely
YESSSS!! This is exactly what it was, DayDreamer… an attempt to break freeeeeeeeeeeeeeee…
Glad you liked it, dearie…
xoxoxo
out of the darkness is born a great light…i am glad strength was found to persevere and fly once more…
thank you, Brian… I have often heard that perseverance brings success… I am trying to live it now.. ๐
I liked the form; it seemed with each set you went on to deeper explorations which indeed are often understood in life’s contradictions. Yours is not the first write I’ve read today of the fear of flying and the need to break free. Indeed it is those very issues which I believe drive us as artists. Those spurs that allow poetry to open doors in once impenetrable walls. Thank you, Gay
Thank you so much, Gay… you are a constant source of inspiration to me… and I am glad you are patient enough to continuously offer me the encouragement I sooo need!! Yea, you are right.. thankfully, for us artists, our empty minds drive us towards art, and not devilishness ๐
i’m ready to soar into the vastness of unending skies with you kavita…you always find the most amazing pics and the words seem to fit like gloves…wondering if the words or the image was first here.. beautiful write
Aww… you are the sweetest, Claudia!! And yes! You are more than welcome to soar with me… please! ๐ As they say, 2 is company… And with awesome company such as yours, that flight will be oh so poetic and wow!
I am glad you enjoyed this piece, my friend… and to answer your question about who came first – the poem or the pic.. well, it’s always the poem for me, except in the case of picture prompt memes, where the picture comes first… hehehhe
Sending you Loads of Love!!! xoxoxo
Beautiful words specially these:
“Enamored
by the aura
of a glowing spirit
Ready to soar
into the vastness
of unending skies”
I think your muse is back in kicking form ~
Aww…really, Heaven? You think so? Amen to that, my dear… cuz I DEFINITELY hope my muses are back… and not ready to KICK ME! ๐
When we get hurt, we don’t want to get hurt again, we harden, then fight that hardening. Each time, as we get older, though, we fight it better. At the end, when we are very old, perhaps we will stay hardened.
Yea.. I guess that’s how it works.. but I hope I don’t harden when I get old.. I hope my heart is fullied with happy memories and thoughts then as well.. ๐ what say, Zongrik ?
lovely, Kavita. Nice share.
ooohh.. thanks a heap, Ayala… ๐
My dear Kavita, I have so missed the flow of your words! Excellente! I don’t knw your voice, but it read like a friend in kind tones in truth in though the words and tone were strong. Very, very, good.
http://henryclemmonspoet.blogspot.com/2011/08/look-away-please.html
Aww.. so kind of you to say that, Henry… this poem was a result of me patting myself on the back, giving ME a “Go, girl !!” speech ๐ I am glad you liked this poem, my friend.. you saying so itself gives me a lot to be motivated about…thank you… HEAPS!!
Well, I remember having put on my post some time back… from my book:
Beckoned the sky,
so vast and blue,
I wanted to fly
…………so I flew..
I loved the ending of your poem here which in fact is a beginning..na…
Kavita, my Haikus wish to say hi to you..could you visit them.. here:
http://rameshsood.blogspot.com/2011/08/night-embroiders-stars-for-hmh.html
and here: http://rameshsood.blogspot.com/2011/08/yes-dreams-come-for-free.html
Thanks!!!!
Wowwwiieess… glad to see that you too have posted something on similar lines, Rameshji… and yes, the end of my poem here is indeed the dawn of a new beginning .. ๐
I am happy you saw it that way, and liked it too… thanks so much!!
nice form,
well you are ready as in last stanza, and then there’s your start, no more dilemma I guess for you, straight up you go!
hahaha.. I wish it really IS that easy.. don’t you, Harish? ๐
Well, anyway, thanks for the encouraging words… glad you liked this form and the poem, in general..
beautiful ending .. YES lets soar up into the sky fulfilling all our dreams and passions on the way …
Loved it
Aww….. amen to that, Bikram… ๐
and yes, thank you so much for your ever encouraging words here… you are a real dear!
Me to.
hahahha… I can guess, Sam!! ๐
You create such beautiful imagery!
Aww…. now now, Mama Z… (blushing).. thank youuuuu
Tethered
to these pillars
of unyielding resolve
I suspect the strength
of my pliant will
This verse especially rang true for me. Thank you for sharing your potent exploration.
Glaaaaaaaaad you liked it, Anna.. yes, there’s something somewhere that really speaks to us.. no?
Hi
I love your work and the picture is a perfect piece to accompany it
Woohoo!! Thanks, Arron! So very nice of you to say that, my friend…
While we longed for the ultimate,supported by the yearnings, there’s always that feeling of being held back. There is hope yet, though! Beautiful piece!
Indeed, Kaykuala… and till we decide and make up our minds to break free, a part of us will always feel tied down… no?
Glad you liked this poem, my friend…. thank you…
I love the combination of sadness and hope. Such a beautiful and haunting poem ๐
Thank you sooooo muc, Janna darling… mwaahhh!!
Love it. Great imagery.
Kelly
http://simplydeeppoetry.blogspot.com/
Aww…yaaaaaayyy.. thanks a heap, Kelly!!
xoxox
Just as a poets heart
haha.. you can say that again, Ajit.. ๐
“Shadowed by a shroud of crystal emotions..”
Awesome lonesome words. Some retrospection she is drawing.. I would love to think she is she.. haha.
Very beautiful representation of a heart that has lost it all n yet wanting to live.. I tell ya- she will..
hugs for this powerful one who understands herself so very well!!
xoxoxox
Oh yea babe! That’s a powerful entity, the heart I mean… it has a mind of its own, I’m telling ya! No?!
Hugs right back at you, sweetie… xoxooxoxoxox