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Caution, Cold hearted, Dangerous, Love, Mixed emotion, One Shot Wednesday, One Stop Poetry, Relationship, Side effects, Warning, Week 26
Image Credits: CrackBag @ DeviantArt.com
Please stay away from me
I can hurt your feelings
…real bad…
I can play with your mind
like it were a yo-yo
I can make you do things
that’ll make you plead and cry
I can crumple you like paper
and toss you aeons away
Please don’t come any closer
I am a ball of fire
ready to scorch you down
at the slightest fuel you provide
I am a billowing storm
of clouds you can’t see through
no matter how hard you try
I am a wall of ice
stinging, biting into your skin
and refusing to melt
I am an ocean of darkness
abysmal in its form
whose end you cannot reach
Please maintain your distance
I did what I could
in your best interest
to keep you from me
I tried all I could
to coerce you into
building hatred for me
I managed all I could
in burning all bridges
ever built between you and me
If now you get burned
or destroyed or drowned
Please don’t ever dare
to tell me I didn’t warn
I’ll just laugh my wildest laughs
Cast at you my flaming look
Lift you by your stringy throat
Watch you blink your bulgy eyes
And say, “I told you so…”
Then… I’ll just let you go…
**Submitted for One Shot Wednesday (the last one for the year 2010)… Do check out the stunning collection of poems here… **
Maybe so, but it would be worth it. 😉
Nice one, Kavita!
haha… and for some odd reason, I feel like taking this one as a compliment, Eric.. 🙂
Thank you!!!!
And a very happy new year to you, my good friend..
xoxo
Now there’s a warning that should be heeded….very strong poem.
You can say that again, Charles!! And sometimes, we are so naive that we tend to overlook the boldest of signs…. wheeww!! 🙂
A very happy new year to you, my friend!!!
WOW
This burns, ice burns like fire here1
A piece of warning ‘magnifique’ which we all must use as a contract to accept and sign before any new relationship starts- for there is always a risk we run. In your case so baaaad- And I mean this is GREAT
niice to read you
Dulce
hehehe..thank you, Dulce!! Yes yes, baaaad = good here! So I take it as a compliment 🙂 Glad you enjoyed this one, sweetie..
I only wish all bad things came with a warning… don’t you think so too?!
Take care, dear… and a very very happy new year to you!!!
xoxo
agh – danger in sight – good to listen to the warning then and stay away… some people should have such a warning printed on their forehead…
Yea.. it would be REAL good to get such warnings (where needed), and even better if we heed to them! 🙂 Else it would just be foolish of us… no?!
Thanks for your kind words here, Claudia… A very happy new year to you!!!
LOVE YA!!!!
xoxox
We do hold so much power, don’t we?
This reminds me a bit of Gordon Lightfoot’s “That’s What You Get For Loving Me.” But yours is much more firey. Well done!
xo
You bet, Jannie!! We humans can be so powerful if and when we really want to! I wish we use this power for better reasons though.. 🙂 What says you?!
Glad you enjoyed this read, my dear… thank you for your kind words here… you are too kind…
Happy New Year, J !!!!
(hugs)
Kavita, what an awesome poem. I love the fantasy play and word play of the narrator!
Gee.. thanks a ton, Shan!!! Am so glad you liked this dark piece!!
A very happy new year, my friend!!
Note to self… Never anger Kavita! lol Seriously though, very powerful poem. Amazing the power some individuals can exact over others— heartlessly, controlling. Fine poem, my friend 🙂 cheers
hahahah… you are too sweet for ANYONE to wanna hurt you, Adam! Thanks for the insightful (maybe out of fear) words here… I really appreciate it!
It’s quite horrible to see one person influencing another to this extent… phheeww…scary too!! I hope we never have to face such a situation…
HAPPY NEW YEAR, my friend!!!
xoxox
one who has been wounded?
Me??? Naaaa… And not the one causing the wounds either! This was just a piece of fiction, Laura 🙂
LOVED THE DARING LINES..you are just amazing kavita! what a poem..i enjoyed this read so much..;)
Oooooooooooohhhh…thank you SO MUCH, my darling Desert Rose!!! You are too too kind!! I am very happy you enjoyed this poem…yaaayyyy!!!
A very happy new year to you, sweetie..
Another killer one, Kavita. I know someone who can be just that way, but fortunately I never crossed her but once. The victim in this poem, though, I get the feeling he’s been a major pain. But not worth strangling. I really enjoyed this one.
Oh my gosh, Joy!!! You actually KNOW someone like this??!?! Phheewww…please be careful, sweetie!!! 🙂 And you are soooo right… no matter how irritating one is, it’s never worth anything strangling this person! whhewww..
Glad you enjoyed the read, my friend.. and THANK YOU ever so much for your kind and insightful words here… you are way too sweet!
HAPPY NEW YEAR, darling!!!
Much love to you…
I know how to do that to…but I don’t know how to write it so well. Brilliant write, my dear. Thanks, Gay
Aww… thank you so much, Gay!! That was really nice of you to say… I am much honored!!
A very happy new year to you, my dear friend.. xoxoxo
I corrected that “to” to “too” but I guess it’d already gone. Ooooops
heheh… gotcha!!
whew…ok, so leaving you alone…i am a little scared now…smiles. but what is love but risk?
hahahah… you have nothing to worry about, Brian… You guys at One Shot are simply TOO AWESOME to fend off 🙂
Take care, my friend…
Happy New Year!!
Wow! That just leaves me speechless. Such imagery and detail is great. That ending just stuns! Great One Shot! Mine is here. http://razzamadazzle.wordpress.com/2010/12/28/snow-bird/
Gee.. thank you so much, Teresa… Usually, rhyme poetry is my thing.. but somehow, this one came quite easily to me.. It’s the darker side of me I suppose 🙂
Glad you liked the read, my friend…
Jeepers, you quite scare me 😉
hahha…that’s probably the approaching birthday effect, Cin 😉
Good heavens! I may have to tread carefully around here then… 😛
heheheh… caution helps, Tony.. many a time! 😉
Missing you, my friend…
xoxo
But who can save the one who is ready to bet it all.
aaaahhh.. the risk taker, eh Anshul? Well… can’t say I didn’t warn 🙂
Ah, this is a good one. Distribute it all around. No one would heed it though.
Well done as always. Can depend on a good read here, Kavita.
Poem on …
hahahahah… no one will heed it, eh?! Well.. that’s true of most of us.. we have a tendency to ignore more warning signs 🙂
You keep goading me with your encouraging words, Jamie.. and I just can’t thank you enough for that!!
xoxoxooxox
Sometimes we are entranced and captivated by even those things that we know will end in harm, end in heartbreak and in destruction…caught in a spiral, caught up in the allure.
On a side note: don’t hurt me, Kavita! Ha – or at the very least, goodness girl, what sort of people do you know? 😛 Lovely piece.
hahahah… thankfully, I don’t know very many such people, Chris… 🙂 Nor is this a warning for anyone I know.. 🙂
But you are sooo right!! Many a time, we just walk into dange, despite all the warnings… I wonder how and WHY we do that.. (suckers that we are… well, many of us!)
Glad you liked this realistic piece, Chris… you are such a sweetheart… thanks a bunch for your continued support here..
xoxoo
A beautiful pain indeed….love this Kavita! 🙂
Ooohh.. gee..thanks so much, Carrie!! Sp glad you liked this slightly dark one… 🙂
xoxoxo
Wow! Thisi is strong. I heed the warning. Really. Hope everyone does.
Kavita, hope you have a very happy new year.
heheheh you heed the warning..ok.. but please don’t stay away from ME, Myrna… this is pure fiction.. 🙂
Thanks a ton for the wishes, my friend… hope are having an awesome year yourself!!
xoxoxo
Love the opening disclaimer – How I write is mine…how you read is yours. This is so true. I read the bitterness of a beauty who no longer seeks joy in relationships, but revenge. Great One Shot.
Fate created my One Shot.
Well…what can I say, MM… you read it exactly how I wrote it… thank you so much, my friend.. that’s the best compliment a writer can ever hope for!!
Glad you liked this dark piece of fiction…
Always great to find out I ain’t the only one out there taking this approach. You did put it into better words than I could, and for that I am much impressed. Loved the poem, I wanna staple it to my front door. Great 1S,
crb.
Woww!!! Feel free to staple it to your front door, CRB (if you think it suits you so well ;)) Geee… I am glad you liked this one so much… hehehe.. thanks a bunch for the kind words of appreciation…
Have a fantastic new year, my friend..
Ain’t that is always fits my style (though at times…lol) just that when I write love poetry it seems to come out as more of a warning than an invitation. Some of us wear our scars inside out, some of us outside in. That’s all. Though stapling it to the front door might help drive off the unworthy before they start thinking my nails scratch less red than the last time. You know how it goes, like a cold bleeding heart instead of a warm one :’) Happy NY to you as well!
crb.
hahahaha… whatever your style, CRB.. it certainly ain’t a warning to me! If anything, it’s an inspiration! 🙂
And yea, some of us post warning signs.. while some of us brood with darkness 🙂 Either ways, I ain’t the avenging type… nor the lashing out type.. whheew! (yet.. )
I am hoping you enjoyed this, my friend.. and thanks for your much appreciated words here…
oxox
This is my favorite of everything of yours I’ve read. I love it!
Oooooohh..thank you sooo much, Patti!!
You are a real sweetheart, my friend…
LOTSA love hugs coming your way!!!
xoxox
Solid use of metaphorical disasters. Good work, good flow.
Aaahhh..thanks, Steve.. your comments are greatly appreciated!!
xoxoxoox
“You talkin to me?” ..smiles..
hahahah.. NO WAY, Michael, my friend… 🙂
xoxooxox
when you want to show power, you can really show it..
amazing flow, you draw one in instantly with the image.
http://jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/2010/12/meet-poet-on-wednesdays.html
happy birthday ahead…
Happy Thursday.
Awww….thanks for your kind wishes and appreciative words, Ji… you are very sweet…
xoxoox
Good one! And a terrific picture!
Gee..thanks a bunch, Thys… and the picture, yes!! I LOVE IT TOO!! Kudos to DeviantArt!! 🙂
dear kavita,
gorgeous poetry and impressive poetic touch! i like the cautionary tone of this poem, frank and honest, challenging the readers to think at their own risk. creatively powerful write indeed.
have a blessed new year.
Gee.. thanks for your invaluable words here, my friend… I am honored! In more that not, I like to think that this poem goes well with the title of my blog.. hehe
Glad you liked this dark read, H…
(much love)
Nice work..
“I am an ocean of darkness
abysmal in its form
whose end you cannot reach”…
Loved these lines alot…
Happy New Year 🙂
Oooohhh.. somebody likes the dark…eh Sumit!?! Well, I kinda enjoy writing dark poetry 🙂
Thanks for your encouraging words, S..
Know I already commented but…Happy New Year’s Eve to you, Kavita! May the new year treat you well – and keep up the great writing! It’s always a pleasure swinging by and seeing what new little treat you’ve brought to the table.
Aww.. you ROCK, Chris!! And your words of encouragement always give me the boost I need!! Thanks for everything, my dear friend…
And I hope this years brings you the best with it…
xoxoxo
Look out scorned lover – the power of woman!! This was great – full of your wonderful energy and passion. I still think you need to write for kids as well as for us.
Having spent the last six weeks writing (half so far) my book, I’ve been checked and re-checked by a copy editor, so I’m probably over-sensitive to grammatical errors right now. Please excuse me for saying, but your verb in the yo-yo line should be “was” not “were.” Okay, grammar aside, I loved this. I felt my teeth gritting together as I read it, and now I’m going to go out and tell my sweet man “Grrrrrrr. Look out, for I am Woman.”
Ooohh.. glad you liked the essence of the poem, my dear Cindy.. I really value your words of appreciation and encouragement… As for writing for kids, I am now thinking of participating in a Disney story-writing competition.. let’s see how far that goes.. wish me luck.. will ya?! 🙂
hahahah… I see the editor in you speak, Cindy!! And I really appreciate it… but the “were” in the said line is on purpose.. just for the poetic effect… “was” would be too prose-correct there…I hope you understand… 🙂
Lotsa love to you, dearie…
xoxox
Very Powerful.. Kavz as always!!
This one is exactly my mind.. raw, intense and fierce..
Burning and attacking.. couldn’t be any better!!
Wishing you a wonderful year ahead.. Sending you loads of Love n wishes.. xox
Awww… now you got me thinking, girl.. how “warned” should I be?! 😉
hehehe.. kidding!!
Love you looooooads, girl… you are one rocking woman!!
xoxoox
i really enjoyed this, very strong poem! you go Kavita! and i hear from jingle that it is your birthday? hope you had a good one!
Gee.. thanks for the kind words and the lovely birthday wishes, Tanya.. it’s very sweet of you! Oh yes, I had an awesome time, alright!! 😀
I am really glad you liked this poem so much…
Have a wonderful year head, my dear..
xoxoxo
Warning labels lie this even come on cigarettes yet people still use them attracted like moths to flame. Truly a very sinister warning…May you not burn me from this distance. 🙂 Peace be with you Kavita
hahahha.. no way, 2z! I have no intention whatsoever of burning you… 🙂
And as for hypocritical warning signs…well… what can I say?! 😀
Hugs to you, my friend…
xoxo
WOW. this is so much fun and goodness.
yay! rocking powerful poem!
hahahah..thanks, my friend… bewaaaaare.. I can go daaaark… bwahahahah!! 😉
Glad you liked this one…
xoxoxo
ooohhh…love it, but this one is dark. Playing with fire can get anyone burnt, though. Is there an underlying revenge here, a smoldering anger underneath, fueled by pain and anguish from the past? The playing of your words led me to think that. If it is about revenge, it reminds me of one of my favorite quotes:
Before you embark on a journey of revenge, dig two graves. ~Confucius.
oh yeaaaa, baby!! Dark it is!! bwaahahahahah
And naaa…this wasn’t from experience or anything like that… this was pure fiction, although I daresay I do know some people who deserve such “attention” from me.. heheheh
But the quote you’ve quoted — AWESOME!! And sooooo true too!! Revenge is an ugly little thing… whew!!!
Thanks for your wonderful comments, dear sweet friend.. you totally rock!!