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Before he leaves for work each day, Dawn, Dreamy, Half asleep, Kiss, Magpie Tales, Mushy, Romantic, Shape poem, Story of each morning
Sheets seem to ruffle
And bodies shuffle
Moments pass
Dreams amass
A peck on my cheek
And I feel soft and weak
I open an eye, I’m groggy
My thoughts blurred and foggy
Am I just in another dream, I ask
While in his warm gaze, I fondly bask
A relaxed smile, and I am back to sleep
This wondrous memory is for me to keep
And here, I silently hope he plants it again
While for this second kiss, I wait and I yen
And lo and behold, to me he has returned
And a sweet kiss on my nose I’ve earned
“See you soon, my sleepy sweetheart”
Are words I hear, before we part
And now I lay, my only sorrow
A day long wait until ‘morrow
Lazy, I roll, snuggle, turn
Fit passions in my urn
Until again that kiss
Oh! What a bliss
** My entry for this week’s Magpie Tales. Do find time to check it out the other stories… **
***The style here is an inspiration from Brian Miller‘s awesome 160, called Roots of my Poet~tree. When I had first seen/read it (a couple of weeks ago), I was so taken by it that I thought of doing something similar myself. Later, the thought completely eluded my mind. And then, yesterday, I saw the Magpie prompt, and as I was framing the poem in my mind, I saw a picture – that of an urn… and finally decided to take a shot at the style.. I am not sure if it’s turned out alright, but I am glad I tried. Thanks Brian!!! 🙂 ***
Excellent,,, sooo romantic
Oh…thank you soo much.. Glad you liked it…
It’s how I feel every morning 🙂
Have a lovely week ahead!
Beautiful and sweet!
Regards … Jhannet
Oh…thanks a bunch, lady!!! 🙂 Glad you liked it.. It is a heartfelt every morning thingie 🙂
Have a fabulous week ahead!
Holy macaroni!! This is simply fantastic. The words of the poem are sweet in themselves, but the fact that you have been able to work them/mold them into such visual perfection blows my mind. WOW!!! It’s perfection almost brought tears to my eyes I was so impressed. Enough! I think you get the message! This is brilliant! Chloe 😀 xx
Yaaaayyyy… you made me real happy, Chloe! This is my first attempt at something like this 🙂 Although I am not sure if I should be too happy about getting tears to your eyes…
Nevertheless, I’m EXTREMELY glad you liked it! I too like the look of it, and I’m thankful to Brian for inspiring me with his work!
Thank you so much for the appreciation, Chloe… it means a TON to me!!! This was like a truck load of encouragement.. and I sure need it!! 🙂
Have a BEAUTIFUL week!!!
Hey, you’re welcome…and you definately deserve the praise! I come from a marketing background and also have a love of words so I think that’s why I adored this so much…because of how it looks, as well as how it reads.
Okay…go on then…I’ll forgive you for almost bringing tears to my eyes…they would have been of appreciation and would not have hurt! haha
Chloe 😀 xx
Thank you thank you thank you Chloe… 🙂 And appreciation accepted 😉
Mwahh
OMG….I am speechless…I have goose bumps all over and can feel the passion and emotion pouring off my screen. Kavita, there is nothing you can’t do when it comes to poetry and this is without any doubt in my mind your purpose in life!! The way you have created the urn into perfection, is in one word….A W E S O M E!! OMG…I have no words….I think you are the best girl!! You rock my dear girlfriend and I admire your talent and am so inspired by you. For that, I thank you. Love you oxox
WOOOOHOOOO!!!! Thank you sweetheart!! I am flying real high, after reading your comments!!! heehehe… me is sooooo happy!
Okay okay… coming back to this sweet earth right away!
Thank you (a zillion times) for your kindness, and all the encouragement! I definitely need loads of it! It helps me try out new stuff in poetry .. heheheh
I am so glad you are here, to egg me on… and I absolutely LOVE YOU for that, Amanda!!!
You words are very precious to me, sweet lady… I treasure them!!! So once again, a huge THANK YOU !!!! 😀 😀
I am happy you liked the outcome of my efforts.. 🙂 I know I can bug you with you ideas 🙂 MWAH MWAH for that!!!
Have a lovely week, girlie… write on, and have fun!! (relax too… )
wonderful…love that you shaped it…and the words themselves…playful and romantic…and i dont like leaving for work either…
heheheh.. I am thoroughly glad you liked it! I am not sure if you read my little message at the bottom of the post, but I’ll repeat it here as well! 🙂 You (and your poet-tree) totally inspired me to get my poem into shape ;-)(giggles)
Thanks for the kind words and the wonderful idea, Brian… hats off to you… I am still in awe of your poet-tree.. I remember showing to to my husband too, and then again gawking at it, wondering HOW! 🙂
As for leaving for work, it really sucks!! It’s time for him to get back now… phew! At long last! 🙂
Have a lovely week yourself, Brian!!
it is fun to play and add elements like that…i did miss the post script the first time…thank you for the mention and glad to inspire. hope you are having a great week as well…
Thanks again for inspiring me, Brian.. Had I not mentioned you in the post, I would’ve been lying to myself!! 🙂
I am having a great week thus far.. hope you are as well….
Take care.. (many hugs)
You have sculpted a lovely urn … and a lovely Magpie!!!
Thank you so much for your kind words, Helen… I am very happy to see you liked the poem shaped into a vase… It’s my first attempt at this sort of a thing 🙂
Have a gorgeous week ahead!
You are such a newlywed. (i am assuming).
Really it is a lovely poem, and I was trying to figure out the connection of the shape. I had to get totally to the bottom and then you spelled it out! Turn, urn, YEARN! It was unspoken, yet there.
By the way, what goes around, comes around as they say.You’ve been nomitated! The Pink Award. Take it or leave it, it’s yours.
http://joycefied.wordpress.com/2010/07/27/seven-things-about-me-and-the-pink-award/
heheheh,,… sure, we’ve been newlyweds for 6 years now 🙂 But I am so happy to see you felt that way… Brought a huge grin on my hubby’s face too..thank you so much Joyce…
And I am very glad that you enjoyed the poem.. I figured that different web browsers might/could display the supposed-to-be-urn quite differently, and so I clarified it towards the end of the poem 🙂
Ooohh.. Pink Award!!! Thank you for that.. I am delighted!! 😀 See that grin there? Says it all… I am taking it alright!!
Have a lovely week, Joyce (many hugs).. and thank you for the lovely wishes
You’ve done a lovely job of capturing a simple moment with words and making it into an excellent poem.
Thank you so much, girl! I am happy to see you enjoyed the poem…
And yes, that simple moment converted itself into poem.. 🙂 I just put some words into it… thankfully, they turned out okay..
Have a beautiful week ahead!!
That is a beautiful poem
Oh..thank you kseverny… Glad you enjoyed it…
Have a great week ahead!!! Hope your show’s going well…
Amazing poem as always. You capture the moment so well in your words. I may have to pass your blog along to a friend who I think would really appreciate your work 🙂
Gee…thank you so much for your kind words, Mark!! I am flattered! And I am very glad you enjoyed this poem…
Please feel free to pass along this link to your friend as well… I would be more than happy to have it read by them…
Have a great week ahead!
Sweet poem! the shape you form it into is very soft and sensuous. Reminds me of mornings with my love, when I would have to leave and get home to get to work, and she would sleepy mumble and roll herself burying into the sheets…
Thank you for your kind words and appreciation, Lawrence.. It is really very sweet of you! I am happy to see that the poem brought back lovely memories to you…
Such memories, although tiny, have a special place of their own… 🙂
Have a beautiful week ahead!
And good luck with the Angio.. (hope all goes well)
Best Regards..
Just plain incredible! LOVE this. I too read Brian’s poetry tree. Great way to use his idea in your own way. I’m still struggling with this magpie (only my second…) And I want to say thanks so much for coming by at Life is Good and for your great compliment. Nice to meet you!
Tina, thank you so much for stopping by my blog and commenting too… it was really very sweet of you.
Brian’s poem was a total inspiration! And I am glad this one turned out okay 🙂 and happy to see that you enjoyed it too!!! Yaaayyy
Ohh… today’s was just my 2nd Magpie.. and I am beginning to love it!! And now, after reading that awesome story by you, I am really looking forward to reading your Mag as well!! 🙂
Have a gorgeous week… and it was really nice meeting you too… Looks like I’m gonna be a regular at your site! 🙂 I loved your style, girl…
what a perfect shape,
admirable skill,
I am impressed by your ability in doing this, in a beautiful way!
😉
Oh..thank you so much for your kind words and encouragement, Jingle! I am both flattered and honored that a lovely poet and artist such as you has appreciated my work … I am glad the shape and the poem turned out okay… and am happy to see that you liked it too… 🙂
Have a beautiful and bright week ahead! (many hugs)
I love your poem and am amazed that you could shape it as you did. Definitely memorable!
Awww… thank you so much, lady!!! Am thoroughly glad you liked this poem… and the vase thingie too 🙂 It’s the first time I tried such a thing (inspired by a fellow-blogger whose poem I had read about 2 weeks back)
Have a lovely week ahead, and happy writing !!! 🙂
Beautifully shaped poem and beautifully expressed word of love… It’s such a perfect vase/urn shape…I loved the visual. Well done:) 🙂 heartspell
Thank you so much, Heartspell.. this is the first time I ever tried such a thing! I had once seen Brian’s poem, and had gotten this idea, but could not implement it until yesterday 🙂 Am very glad you liked it… the poem and the vase 🙂
I much appreciate your kind comments and encouragement…
Have a lovely week!!
Beautifully and cleverly structured Kavita, well done.
Thank you so much, Cindy… I am very happy you liked the idea and implementation… your encouragement is much needed and appreciated!
Have a lovely week ahead! 🙂
wow!…very creativity!
Whoaa..thank you Naveen… I am glad you liked it…and I much appreciate your visit and comments 🙂
Have a wonderful week ahead!
I read this not seeing the urn but enjoying the changes in rhythm. I noticed the shaping but the words were what kept me engaged. The urn was a bonus.
Awww… I’m glad you enjoyed the read… the urn was a bonus for me too 😉
Thank you for your kind comments.. they are really appreciated!
Have a lovely week ahead!
oh man…once again awesome. I can hardly find the creativity to write a few words, let alone shape it into something. Maybe I should write a poem and call the shape as abstract art.
I’ll make sure I remember this poem for my sweetheart 😉
Geee…thanks a ton, buddy! Your words are like music to me.. hehhehe.. Glad you enjoyed the read..
Abstract art huh? I like that idea 😉
This poem for a sweetheart is just wow!! I am honored that you considered this poem worth that moment!
I am sure you can put in better words (from your heart) for her…
Happy Week, Keshav!
brilliant! So refreshing and romantic
Aww.. thank you so much for your lovely kind words, Gabriela… I am very pleased that you liked the poem…
Have a lovely week ahead!
Kavita, this thoroughly wins over the romantic in me, and the fact that your words take the shape of an urn is just fitting. Very nice! 🙂
hehhee…thanks a bunch Tony!!! I am kinda excited that I was able to pull this one off.. I had not expected it to turn out the way it did..
The feelings in it were so real, that I simply HAD to contain them in that urn 🙂 Glad you enjoyed the read…
Have a super duper week ahead!
Playful poem! Love-love the urn! (thanks for your kind words over at my place)
Aww.. thank you so much, Willow.. I am so happy to see that you enjoyed this poem.. Yes, that urn did indeed turn out pretty neat.. (if I may say so myself).. heheh
Oh.. and btw, I love your work.. so, please don’t be surprised to find me leaving comments on your posts!! 🙂
Have a gorgeous week ahead!
Wonderful poem.. too romantic.. and I guess you must have worked hard on it to get the perfect shape 😉 its awesomeee 🙂
Thank you for your kind words, Ilakya.. I knoooww.. it really was romantic, wasn’ it ? 🙂 But then again, it is personal experience, and very very heartfelt..
Maybe that’s the reason it didn’t really take me all that long to get the shape either.. all of 30 minutes to have the poem ready (with the shape).. heheh.. Love can do strange things… and can inspire like crazy! I am sure you feel that too 😉
Am glad you enjoyed this one… it is very close to my heart…
Thanks again for your encouraging words..they are much appreciated!
Have a gorgeous week ahead!
awww thats mushy stuff .. he hehe bless you and the one who gives those kisses 🙂
nice one again .. take care
Ohh… thank you so much for the kind words and lovely wishes, Bikram…
I am very glad you enjoyed the poem.. (although it IS kinda mushy) 🙂
Have a great week ahead!
God, this was so romantic! It was so dreamy and beautiful, I read it twice just to stay inside that ‘sleepy state of mind’ a while longer! Simply beautiful Kavita… 🙂
Awww… I am very pleased to see that you enjoyed it so much, Lua.. This poem is very close to my heart 🙂
Thank you sooo much for your sweet words.. I am thrilled!!! And you read it twice?!?! Wow.. I feel elated !
Have a BEAUTIFUL week ahead, girl…
this is really awesome, kavita! what a lovely piece!
Geee.. thank you SO MUCH for your kind and encouraging words…they mean a lot to me!!!
I am very glad that you enjoyed this poem…
Have a gorgeous week ahead, lovely lady.. 🙂
Nice! I love “Fit passions in my urn…”
*blush blush* Am glad you liked the poem… and thank you for your kind words.. 🙂
Have a lovely week ahead!
That’s really clever. It would drive me mad trying to create the shape AND the words!
hehehe.. Thanks, Jess!! Glad you enjoyed the poem..
You know, it ain’t all that tough to put words into a shape 🙂 I too had thought I would never be able to do it.. but when I did, I was kinda surprised AND pleased with the result… phewww..
Have a gorgeous week, girl.. I’m looking forward to more of your stiletto tales.. 🙂
how impressive!!!!! like it
Gee…thanks a bunch!!!! Glad you enjoyed the poem.. I loved writing it too!
Have a great week!
Sweet and romantic!
Awww…thank you so much Susan… I am so happy to see you enjoyed reading the poem as much as I did writing it 🙂
Have a beautiful week ahead!
This is the first time I read poetry in “shapes” (don’t really know the styles name). It’s great, love it! Keep up the good work!
heheheh.. I too am not sure if the style even HAS a name 🙂 But I’m glad it turned out the way it did. I was inspired by Brian’s poem a couple weeks back 🙂
Thank you for your kind words of appreciation towards my efforts.. I am really glad you liked it…
Have a gorgeous week ahead!
this is such a beautiful and wonderous poem. I love the moment. It’s so serene and filled with love. I love it! Great poem Kavita.
Gee… thank you so much for your sweet and kind words, Tekia… The poem came from my heart, as I felt it 🙂
And I am really happy to see that you enjoyed it as much as I did.. that means a lot to me!
Have a fabulous week ahead!
Kavita, how refreshing to read a loving and positive poem! And the urn shape, though…it’s clear that you DON,T keep your feelings “bottled up”. Your writing is honest and sincere. Clever blending of visual and written word!
Hey, thank you for visiting me and for your kind comments! Will be reading you often!!
Rick
Oh golly… thanks a ton for all those kind words, Rick.. I am zapped and flattered! 🙂
I am very glad you enjoyed this poem and the visual.. It was lovely writing it too, especially cuz it was an actual experience…
Poetry (well, writing, in general) is a very graceful way of releasing some of those pent up feelings, and yet maintain some control over them… it’s an excellent medium!!! To each, his own I guess 🙂
Once again, I really appreciate your visit and your feedback.. It means a lot to me!
Have a great week ahead!
P.S: I totally enjoyed your work… reading it was my pleasure..
You fit your shape beautifully with line and rhyme. And the “story” of the poem is lovely, too. Thank you for your visit.
I am glad you liked the poem and the visual… And thank you so much for your lovely words of appreciation towards my work… It felt awesome writing this poem too, cuz this is the first time I tried giving it “shape”, literally!!! 🙂
Have a fantastic week ahead!
By the way, visiting your blog and reading your Magpie was a treat to my senses! Happy writing!
This is amazing!
Oooohhh….thank you soo much!! I am very glad you enjoyed the read… 🙂
Have a fantabulous week ahead!
Lovely , so romantic! You brought out that sadness too which one feels at being parted even a day. I love the shape of your poem (the urn shape was intentional, right?), I don’t think I could ever be disciplined enough to write like that. 🙂
Great work!
hehehe…you are too sweet, girl!! And you are first one who brought up that momentary feeling of sadness! 🙂 You bet it is the longest moment in the entire day!
I am very glad to see that you enjoyed this poem (and the urn too).. and thank you so much for your encouragement, cuz I need tons of it!!! 🙂
I had never really tried the shape thingie before, and thought of giving it a shot this time. And surprisingly, it didn’t take all that long to get the words fit into the desired shape either! So I too am quite satisfied at how it turned out 🙂
Anyway, you have a LOVELY week ahead, sweet lady! I totally look forward to your comments!! It’s an addiction now! 🙂
Happy writing! (love and hugs..)
That’s so sweet and romantic.
Gee… thank you so much for your kind words… 🙂 I am really glad you enjoyed the read…
Have a great week !!!
Ah, beautiful and sweet :3
Aawww… thanks a bunch, girl!!! I am glad you enjoyed it… I loved writing it too… It was kinda special 😉
Have a lovely week!! (many hugs)
This piece made me smile! You have captured this moment and feeling very well.
Keep it coming! 😀
heheh.. I am very happy to see that you liked and enjoyed this poem… and thank you for the kind and encouraging words… they mean a lot to me!
Have a fabulous week ahead!
lovely in word and form…..nice magpie…bkm
I am very glad you enjoyed it, bkm… It really was very close to my heart…
Thank you for your kind and encouraging words…
Have a lovely week ahead!
http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/07/28/happy-25th-anniversary-to-alan-a-poet-we-respect/
help say hello to a fellow poet if you have a moment,
thanks!
😉
Thanks for passing on this information, Ji!! 🙂 It’s very kind and caring of you…
I did visit Alan’s site and wished him and Deborah…. wow! 25 years! Awesome 🙂
Whoa! Dig that structure! I’m a structure-freak and that is awesome… nice to be getting t know you and your blog… I’ll be back
Warmest Salad
Luke
Wooww! That’s a huge compliment, Luke !!! Thank a bunch!!! And I am very glad you enjoyed the poem with its structure 🙂
I too kinda liked the way it turned out…
Your appreciation and encouragement mean a lot to me !!
Have a great week ahead!
Phew!!! Its a long time after I read such a romantic poem!!! gr8 words… And yeah, appreciate the visual appeal of the poem structure…
heheheh… and it’s been a while since I’ve written SUCH a romantic poem too… But I thoroughly enjoyed the moment, and writing it down as well 🙂
I am glad you enjoyed this piece.. yes, the visual did turn out pretty okay too ..
Thank you for your appreciation towards my work and efforts… It’s very kind of you…
Have a pleasant week !
for me u r poet
i inspired alot from u how u write such lovely poem?
Awwww… thank you so much for your lovely and encouraging words, Rida… They mean a lot to me!!!
The shape and the words just happened… And I am glad it did too!!
I am happy to see you liked the poem, girl…
Have a bright and shiny week ahead…full of love!! (many hugs and kisses)
this is brilliant!
oh gee…thanks a ton!! Glad you liked this one… 🙂
My friend, this is a beautiful poem…romantic and peaceful, one can easily imagine this scenario. Well written, and the format…how hard was that to do? Measuring measures and making such an aesthetically pleasing visual…I just love it:)
Thanks for your visits and comments 🙂
Your friend,
Tracy H
I am very pleased to see you liked the poem, Tracy… Thank you so much for your appreciation towards my work as well 🙂
It really wasn’t too hard to do… the entire poem from inception to posting took me all of 40 minutes at most.. I guess, that’s cuz it was a real experience, and hence the words just came to my mind, and seemed to fit well (and automatically) into that shape there 🙂
I thoroughly enjoyed writing it too!!
Your comments and feedback mean a lot to me!
Hope you are having a lovely weekend!! (many hugs)
This is a truly beautiful poem! I also really like the layout, and how it resembles a vase. Thanks for this, you really have a lovely blog 😉
Oh…thank you so so much philosopherpoet!!! I am very glad to see that you liked this poem and the visual as well! 🙂
And thanks for appreciating my work… your feedback is very valuable to me!
Have a great week ahead!
Very beautiful…read it twice and can read many more times…
Heehehhe.. thanks a bunch, Surbhi… Glad you liked it 🙂
I LOVED living and writing it as well 🙂
Have a beautiful week ahead!!!
oh, another vase, albeit a broken one 😉 😀
nice thoughts..very beautiful indeed..
i like how you’ve rhymed the lines too..
that makes a very nice flow..
🙂
Ouch! It appears broken to you huh?? Uh uhhh… Cuz it appears perfectly normal and intact when I view it on my laptop :)… I guess it’s a web-browser thingie.. how tiresome technology can get at times!!!
Anyway, you got the idea.. Glad you liked the poem… and thanks for pointing out the “broken” nature of the vase..need to “fix” it ASAP! 🙂
ur words have shaped the morning very beautifully… BRAVO BRAVO !!!
wish all me mornings are like these too 😀
Cheers!!!
Thanks man! You can make your mornings like this one you know…
Cheers to you as well!! 🙂 Happy weekend!
ur not just a poet also a visual artist here :p
Awwww… thankfully for me, the words came to me in such a way that I could arrange them in that shape… glad you liked it!