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Betrayal, Blame game, Bottled disgust, Envy, Fiction, Friend or Foe?, Imagination, Jealousy, Just another story, Mad rage, Madness, Manifestation, Results of envy, UDPS, Undead Poets Society
What once was your voice that sounded so gentle
Now feels like the rattling of a million bones
Our picture that once proudly adorned the mantle
Now lies in disarray, mutilated with stones
You are a fiend. You betrayed me!
What once used to be a song for you of praise
Now spews out of my mouth like some putrid bile
Your smile that once gave my hopes a raise
Now sits as an open slash, and to me appears vile
You are cruel. You deserve this!
What used to once flow like a stream of love
Now spurts from my red vein, as green blood
My heart that once soared like a peaceful dove
Now flails, chokes and drowns in envy’s flood
You broke my heart. You slayed my emotions!
How once on a flowery path with you I walked
Now a blanket of thorns over it is thrown
Where once, we unfurled our souls and talked
Alas.. now the seeds of distrust are sown
It was all my fault. Only I am to blame…
divine……ease humanity from the disease insensitiveness……
please…..listen with heart…..men and women walking on relationships like musical chairs……..still searching love shaking right hands……not knowing love is holding right with left…..
left brain which is body and logical intelligence and masculine in nature controls right hand……right brain which is soul and emotional intelligence and feminine in nature controls left hand ….. .mirror is togetherness of left and right…..purpose to mirror god in us …..love is god….
breath in…..love…
breath out …..happiness…
true ends of life…….
alive….breath to breath..
bless you …
p.s. ..life is a examination of self and love is the answer if one fails come next time in this world with tail ….. love all…
ABSOLUTELY, Ram!! That was a lovely comment! Thank you so much…
This was a piece of my imagination, and just fiction.. But envy is a strong emotion, which I wanted to bring out via a poem… hence this.
But thank you so much for your inspiring message… I really appreciate it!
Peace and love…
Wow Kavita..this is awesome but different from your normal happy poems. It is always such a shame when friendships goes sour, but that is a fact of life and we have to go on. I always say that people come into our lives for a reason, a season or a lifetime…ALWAYS for us to learn and take something from whatever the relationship is.
I love this line…now the seeds of distrust are sown…THAT is a no-no in my book too!! I am sorry you lost this friendship. Another wonderful creatiion out of the mind of my wonderful friend!! Keep writing girl…you rock!!! (And I love you!!)
Awww… that was really very sweet of you Amanda… I am touched.. I am thankful to WordPress and Jingle, for having brought us together.. you are a sweet, sharing, caring, generous and an amazing friend! 🙂
And just to let you know, this poem was total fiction , and a figment of my imagination! Thankfully, I haven’t gone thru’ this myself.. but have seen thins happening around me… So, for some reason, it just popped to my mind as a poem. Yea, it’s different from my usual poems/style.. but I believe jealousy too is a state of mind – an emotion. And I just felt like writing about it… Who knows, maybe by reading it/writing it, my readers and I can can have a better control over it in future..
Thanks for being there for me, sweetheart… Love you too!!!
A VERY HAPPY BRIGHT AND CHEERY WEEKEND TO YOU!!! (mwaaaaahhhhh…)
Whew!!! I was really scared that you were in the middle of a heart break. Excellent poem, totally freaked me out compared to your usual up beat style.
All in all, loved it though 😉
Regards…
hehehe… this poem was total fiction and imagination ONLY!!!
No heartbreak at my end, just plain fun these days, what with the recent anniversary celebration et al…
It’s just that I felt like writing about something not-so-pleasant… cuz, lets face it! It happens..and to the best of us! And jealousy.. as much as I would hate for it to happen to me or anyone, I am in awe of it, cuz it has the capacity to take over my minds and souls COMPLETELY! It’s quite fierce an emotion.. just as fierce as love, I would think..
But thanks for your concern, and as always, I really appreciate your visits and thoughtful comments.. helps me imagine more! 🙂
Hope you are having a fab weekend!!!
Cutting animosity! Passion can be so intense, it can turn from deep love to deep hate at any time.
PRECISELY what I wanted to bring out, Gally! Glad you saw it that way..
Hope you liked the poem..
Have a gorgeous weekend!! 🙂 (**hugs**)
I wish that people would all realize the gift of friendship. Love should be unconditional. Love your poem. 🙂 Makes me really appreciate my friends and family. 🙂
That was the idea! Reading the poem, I just wanted to reinforce my own gratitude towards my friends family for the bond we share..
Glad you liked the poem, Doraz.. Thank you for your kind observation and thoughts…
Have a wonderful weekend! 🙂
rock on…quite the intesity to the emotion…i am glad i saw the flag for fiction…i was feeling the betrayal…then you clipped us with a twist in the end…nice. great write…
Thank you, Brian 🙂 Yea, you are right.. this was just another figment of my imagination, and NOT my experience :)..
I am glad you liked the read.. Envy, I believe, is quite a powerful emotion, especially once you let it get to you… so I just felt like writing about it…
Hope it doesn’t both anyone any more than just a bit
Have a lovely weekend, and now, I am looking forward to reading the 160s ! 🙂
well stated,
you are such an innocent and loving soul, but as time passes, you will learn, blogging could be hurting or dangerous, people do what they love to do, unintentionally, others get hurt or discouraged….it is hard to be fair, but we try our best…
a different perspective,
hope that it is fiction.
very masterful writing!
😉
Ohh Jingle.. you are sooo sweet! Thank you for your concern, and your kindest words!
This poem was TOTAL FICTION!! 🙂 No betrayal here…and all’s good 🙂 I don’t bother myself with jealousy…just enough to write a poem on it 😉
This blogging world has been awesome to me so far.. thanks to you, and all my readers!
Once again, thanks for caring.. and your thoughtful comments..
Have a Sunny Sunday! 🙂
Hmmm very interesting blog 🙂 Liked this entry, great job! God bless
Thank you Dua.. glad you liked this one..
And hope you are having en excellent weekend! 🙂
Amazing Kavita, so much pain, it hurts so much to be hurt and betrayed by someone you love, someone you thought loved you back. Your “green blood” metaphor was very clever, I liked it a lot. Most of all I like the last line, it sums it up. One can go on blaming the other, but at the end they do realize it was their fault (too). I can relate so well to your poem here. Thank you for putting it up.
Aww.. thank you for your kind words, girl… I am always looking forward to your comments 🙂
We sometimes forget that relationships is not about reminding the other what they did wrong, but about accepting it, and moving on while making amends…
Although this poem was complete fiction to me, I have so often seen the blame game around me.. work and elsewhere as well! Have seen too many friendships going sour with just a small seed of doubt.. And hence felt like writing about envy..
I cannot really say I am “glad” you could relate to this one… but I hope it keeps us from making similar mistakes further.. after all, constructive thinking could also spur from some negative stuff.. right? 😉
Anyway, have a lovely weekend, sweetheart.. and take care… (many hugs)
This poem seems very sad. It always hurts when you split away from those who are close. I think your last line sums up most people’s feelings in these situations. It isn’t always best to blame ourselves.
I am in total agreement with your comment and surmise, Mark! It really isn’t good to always blame ourselves. Doesn’t do any good to the self-esteem 🙂
And blaming others gets nothing either. I would prefer something constructive.. rather than this blame game… but alas.. it doesn’t always work that way..
Thankfully, this poem was just a piece of my imagination, and NOT experience…
The poem is sad, but hopefully, with all its negativity, it forces the reader to think, and reconsider…
Anyway, thanks once again for your insightful comments.. I really appreciate you taking the time..
Hope you are enjoying a fantastic Sunday! 🙂
Kavita you are outdoing yourself. Awesome poem. For a moment the intensity of the words scared me (for you).
The idea was drilled into my head with this poem.
But I vehemently protest, how can deep love turn into deep hatred? In my world (as perfect as can be) this is impossible. love is too powerful or too pure to be just another side of the coin for a person.
I would have to say that it was not love in the first place. Love could go away or die, but can never turn into hatred.
Our world appears to misinterpret love, and everyone assumes that start and end happen with I Love You.Wrong! There is much more to it…
That is why I wrote that line at the end of my poem “Just 3 words”
Nevertheless, kavita, this is one the most powerful poems I have read. You deserve an award
hehehe… thanks for you thoughtful comments, Keshav! They matter a heck lot to me!
I agree with whatever you’ve said about love.. TOTALLY! We humans have attached a real obscene meaning to it. It’s much more than saying ‘ i love you’, getting mushy, and dying for the other, or whatever… If LOVE exists between 2 persons, hatred doesn’t really stand a chance!
But… this poem was more directed at more platonic relationships, friendships (in the loosest of sense) .. I have seen 2 “friends” suddenly become almost-enemies..I know, it’s crazy! But there! It happens! And what causes it? A teeny weeny doubt.. it blows up al over the place, and then these friends don’t even wanna face the other!
Annnnnyway…hope you got my message 🙂
Besides, this poem was not my experience (thankfully!)..and was PURE FICTION! phheeewww
Once again, thank you for the insightful comments.. I really appreciate it.. And the award eligibility remark — Awwww — Too kind of you! Thanks!! 🙂
Take care, and have a fabulous Sunday! 🙂 (many hugs)
A heartbroken,s heart out….:)
Awww… and PURE FICTION ! 🙂
Thanks for stopping by, girl… hope you liked this one (although it’s so negative and dark) 🙂
HAPPY WEEKEND!!!
very very powerful- your poem told it all.
Thank you Trisha.. glad you liked the content of this poem..
Pure imagination ofcourse.. but it is a possibility with anyone, and hence I felt like writing this one..
Have a great weekend!
very beautifully written
kavita ur poem always made me sppecless
u are superb
go on with the same spirit
So very sweet of you, Rida…you always have the kindest words for me…thank you so much!!!
Have a happy week ahead! (many hugs)
Well, that seals it. I’ve subscribed to you, and now you’re on my blogroll too! How can I not stay abreast of your newest poems, Kavita? And this one conveys the deep gash of hurt so acutely that I felt it myself. Marvellous. 🙂
Oh wowww…thank you so much, Tony!! I am totally zapped, flattered, thrilled and honored… all at the same time! 😀
Well, thankfully for me, this poem was all fiction and imagination! Yet, the feeling of envy is so strong that I really felt like versing it out! Glad you liked the poem…
Thank you once again for your much appreciated comments…
And have a fantastic and exciting week ahead! 🙂
Wow… I think this is the darkest poem I’ve ever read by you and I have to say I quiet like it. It appeals to me, in a way it’s very humane (and real) to say, “You are cruel. You deserve this!” I know I’ve said it many times before…
It’s humane alright!!! I am glad you liked this one, Lua… But I hope you only “say” those things, and don’t mean them ;-)…else… I’m scared 🙂
Jus kidding… we all do that so often!
Yes..a dark poem indeed.. but this time, I did feel like bring forth those unpleasant feelings we store within ourselves.. ugghh ..
Thanks for your comments, friend… they are always appreciated!!!
Anyway, have a fabulous week ahead!! 🙂
You have penned down such strong words to reflect your emotions. Sometimes, I feel suffocated not to get words that would reflect what I want to say. But I must say, you did justice. Great Write! Keep it up Gurl! 🙂
Ohhh.. thank you soo soo much, purple! Well, the emotions came from thinking of some of my friends that have experienced this damned jealousy..
We go thru’ it too, but we need to make sure that after some point, we don’t let it take over us and our minds completely! We’ve got to keep checking the envy and egometers constantly I guess.. 🙂
Anyway, thanks a ton for your kind comments and encouragement.. I am flattered and thrilled! And I very much appreciate them..
Hope you have a gorgeous week ahead!!!
looking towards your own fault is an exercise of an unegoistic person, good for you. cheers!
Ahaa.. there comes that BIG three letter word again!
I don’t often blame myself for stuff though 🙂 I also try to not blame others either 😉
Thanks for your much appreciated comments, fiveloaf…hope you enjoyed the read…
Have a fun-filled week ahead!
Elements of anger and compunction. Deep poem full of emotion. Great work, Kavita.
Thankfully, it was just fiction for me when I wrote it Adam…
Am glad you liked this one… thanks for your continued support!!
Have a super week ahead!
very heavy, but fantastic! any chance of reconciliation?
Awww.. thanks, Kelley… but thankfully for me, this was pure fiction! pure heavy fiction … phheewww
Hope you had a lovely weekend! Now, enjoy a brilliant week ahead! 🙂
Kavita, I loved this…the imagery was marvelous and the message so strong; also the title…very well done, my friend. You are so good! Heartspell
Thank you so much, Heartspell… I am very happy to see that you liked this kinda dark poem..
I am always looking forward to your comments… appreciation from you is invaluable!!
Once again, thanks a bunch! You are too kind…
Have a gorgeous week ahead! 🙂
You are partiicularly good at exposing the thoughts/emotions of women before they discover that men/lovers are never the answer, but always the question,
and who take the blame for not knowing, thinking innocense and youth are something to apologise for. You have what so many writers haven’t found and envy – you have voice.
You have made me feel very proud right now, Cindy… 🙂 Thank for your kind words… I am totally flattered..honestly!!
I eagerly look forward to your comments… and I really appreciate your continued encouragement!!
If my writing can give a reader something to think about, and has a positive effect on them, then I think I am doing a decent enough job after all .. 🙂
Thank you once again… I feel very honored indeed!
Have a FANTASTIC and GORGEOUS week ahead, girl.. 🙂
the person you most love can quickly become your most hated foe and all it takes is an act of betrayal… and those emotions can all become tainted
Oh… totally!!! But this poem was all imagination and fiction to me when I wrote it (thank God for that!!)… no bitter experience speaking.
But I’ve seen this happen around, with friends and close ones.. and it’s not a happy feeling! 😦 Hence, I just wanted to bring it across in a poem…
Hope you liked it and didn’t find it overly gruesome… And thanks for your visits and insightful comments.. they are most appreciated!!!
Have a fantastic week ahead!
Nice work Kavita–extremely powerful, and painful. Well crafted piece and heartfelt.
J
Thank you for your kind words, Jack… they are much appreciated!!!
Although I didn’t experience this myself (well, at least not to such an extreme degree), I just felt like giving envy some thought.. after all, it too has changed so many peoples’ lives forever (albeit always for the worse)! I only hope I don’t have to live through such an experience/situation … nor should anyone else!!!
Having said this, I hope you have a fabulous week ahead! 🙂
amazing that you can pull such genuine, gut-wrenching, heart-smashing emotion out of total fiction. the mark of a true poet, i suppose. 🙂 love the “green blood” bit.
Awww.. thanks for those lovely words.. I am flattered! phheewww
I know… the green blood thingie did turn out pretty neat! 🙂 Glad you liked it too…
Have a fabulous week!
as always nice work! very appropriate title for the poem…. take care.
Thank you for your continued visits and encouragement… And I’m glad you liked this piece…
You have a great week yourself!!
Best Regards..
Oh wow Kavita! This is beautifully written even though it’s sad. There is such emotion here as well. You did wrote a wonderful piece of poetry here. Enjoyed me read very much!
Ahaaa..thank you so much for your kind words, Tekia… And I’m glad you liked the read..
Yea, it’s a sad one.. but it happens to quite a few of us … thankfully for me, it was just fiction though.. phheewww
Anyway, thanks once again.. and your comments are most appreciated!
Have a beautiful week ahead!!
You are one amazing poet! I love reading your work. It always inspires me to try and write better myself. Chloe 😀 xx
Oh my my my !!! I am totally flattered! And am somewhere on cloud 9… get me down…like right now!! 🙂
Thank you sooo much for your kind and encouraging words, girl… They mean a LOT to me!!! WOWWWW.. I’m still gloating 😀
You are a lovely writer yourself, sweet lady! Your poems have such a tender touch to them… I’m a fan! Have blogrolled you already.. (without even bothering to ask you ;))!! Hope you don’t mind…
Have a LOVELY day and a even more fabulous week ! 🙂
Glad you like my poems and am happy, happy, happy that you blogrolled me too 😀 You’re on my Circle of Friends…
You have a fabulous week too my friend…it’s bed time for me here in the UK…
Happy Days! Chloe 🙂 xx
yaaayyy thankooooz… sleep tight girlie… 😀
Thank god I read the earlier comments and saw its Kav’s imagination playing out a different tune 🙂 well put Kavs… hope this stays in the world of imagination forever… now to happier lines and times that you usually weave 🙂
heheheh.. I knew you would read my tags, Navs… That’s why I put keywords in there, so that you have a clear idea!! 🙂
And oh yea, I too hope that this stays as imagination, and never materializes into a harsh reality… ouch! chilling!
But I hope you “enjoyed” the read (not the right word to use, considering the nature of the poem :))… and thank you for your thoughtful comments and kind wishes… they are MOST appreciated!
Have a fantastic week ahead!
What used to once flow like a stream of love
Now spurts from my red vein, as green blood
My heart that once soared like a peaceful dove
Now flails, chokes and drowns in envy’s flood
Seriously such a beautiful and visceral poem. I loved these four lines especially. It’s beautiful with it’s underlying pain.
Gee.. thank you so much, girl!! I am very happy to see that you liked this poem…
Envy is such a strong emotion that although negative, I thought it deserved a poem 🙂
Yes, those lines did scream pain! Maybe a bit too much.. phew..
Anyway, have a happy and lovely week ahead!!!
True grit exploration of the pain of betrayal, the word, friendship, cheapened and tarnished and suddenly the moment when anger erupts or we’re just a decorative doormat. Love how smile becomes an ‘open slash’.
Oh…thank you SO MUCH for your thoughtful comments… they are much valued!
I am glad (wrong word maybe… ) and I appreciate the fact that you saw the emotion in these lines… and I loved your description of friendship-turned-animosity! It is sad, but true in many cases I’ve come across…
Have a great and pleasant week ahead!