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Clueless, Colorful dilemma, Confused, d'Verse Poets Pub, Directionless, Endless search, Futile, Hazy picture, Looking for a way, Lost, Maze, Open Link Night, Puzzle, Unclear
In this universe
drizzled with black and white
My mind twirls unsteadily
– lost–
Looking for something
– someone –
A tap on the shoulder perhaps…
But all I see
is a maze before me
spiraling inwards
Dotted with mixed emotion
I continue to fumble
– watery eyed –
Hoping for a green patch
A straighter path perhaps…
But all I keep finding
is point after red point
like stains of my wasted blood…
**Posted for Week 29 of Open Link Night @ d’VersePoets Pub – the ultimate hangout for poets!! **
Haven[t been here in a while Kavita. Glad I did today. Your poem is powerful. Made me a little sad, but your words are so human, sensitive. i liked this.
Thanks for stopping by, Myrna …very kind of you…
And despite its grim nature, you liked this poem…I am thankful to you for that, my dear friend…
Hugs!!!
Oh this could so easily be the definition of “despair” with what life has offered up…a fine write.
Thanks, charles… And yes, this indeed is despair defined…whew!!! Not a good place to be in…no?!
Beautiful poem! Very powerful indeed. Looking for your green patch, straighter path, sunny sky… it’s a hard spot to be. I hope you are doing well! Long time no “see”. xo
You bet it’s a hard spot to find, babe! And guess what!! I have been super busy lately (from a blogging perspective)… But I promise I will be at your place any moment now!!
Love n hugs, babe!!!! Mwah!
Strong, with vivid imagery. Keep moving forward, there are most certainly less bloody days ahead.
Amen to that, Buddah… Thanks for stopping by, and for your invaluable words of appreciation here!!!
whew like stains of my wasted blood…i feel the desire for something so much more in this kavita…nicely done and great pic to go with it as well…
Hehhehe …. You and your vivid imagination totally rock, Brian!!! Glad you enjoyed the picture poem combination here… For once I can say it is all my work…yaaaaaayyyyyy!!!! 😀
Nice write!
Thanks, Ayala !!! 🙂 ❤
Beautiful writing, but it truly leaves me sad.
Awww…don’t be sad, my dear friend… Poetry is a very nice way of washing your hands off that sadness, don’t you think ? 🙂
But I truly am very happy and honored that you liked this poem….thank you so much..
Your image, and Your script! And BOTH worthy, good! I appreciate a good ‘downer’ once in a wile, especially if I’m NOT down–and I’m pretty sure the writer is not also.Since I have known depression (maybe you also?) I see you know what you writing about.
SHORT AND SWEET! Thank you.
PEACE!
Thanks a heap, Steve !!! I really appreciate your insights here..
And yes, you are quite right about the not being down while writing this bit.. 🙂 It was quite the opposite for me really… But I guess pain holds a fascination that a poet/writer cannot ignore.. What say ?! 😉
I am glad you liked this short piece….thanks again…
Tap 🙂
*gloating* :d
Oh my darling! This was powerful! I still call you the poet goddes !! 😉
Seriously L, you make me blush…
Your encouragement and appreciation towards my work keeps me motivated, sweetheart…and I cannot thank you enough for that.. Mwaaaahhhzzz and hugs to you!!!!!
well, here’s your pat on the back. Smiles and a great write
Whoooaaaa!!! THANK YOU, Leah …. (feeling super proud this very moment) 😀
hmmmm well I am sure soon the green path will turn up … all the best
made me sad though.. loved the way you have used the words
Oh Bikram my dear dear friend….this poem was just an expression of sadness.. Of the doubt we tend to live in at times… I wasn’t really feeling so at that very moment though…
So worry not…keep smiling…
And as for the green patch..,you are ON it!! 🙂
Hugs!
Hey there! Sad sad one…but quite a write….!!!
yep im on facebook…Ive sent u a request(hope its u..hehe)…Look for Vandana Parapurath…..:) cya soon
Facebook friend Confirmed !!! 🙂
And don’t go by the sadness in this poem…pure fiction 🙂
triple wow !
1 for the poem,
2 for the image you made ..
3 for the last line of the poem that will haunt me for long time …
how much i missed reading you …
realized i was missing ur email notifications 😐
well .. this was a amazing read .. could feel lyself walking with you n this maze …
Nimue darling, you will get email notifications only if I publish posts now…right?!? Seriously, I haven’t been writing as much as I would have liked to of late…duhhhh
Anyway, I’m glad you liked what you read here now…and I sincerely hope you don’t have to ever walk in that horrid twisted maze…EVER!!
Hugs n love…
beauty thoughts!
Thank you sooo much, Wafa…
Lovely thoughts!
Thanks, my friend … I really appreciate your stopping by here…
Absolutely!
There you go…magic from nothing. Suddenly nothing transforms to beauty.
There’s an integrity to the whole piece that’s astonishing.
It’s lovely to come back and read you again.
Lovely.