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Image credits: Tess@Magpie Tales (with some editing by me)
I heard your voice
fade into a lingering shadow
of a hoarse whisper
I felt your presence
melt into a stagnant puddle
of diluted memories
I watched you
slip into the recesses
of a pale obscurity
Wells have run dry
Trails have gone cold
Your teacup lay untouched
Your chair by the window rocked…
– empty –
And yet today,
when every sign of you
is ready to evaporate,
There awakens a sleeping candle
in a guarded corner of my heart
And I see your name
dancing in the flame
Teasing me
Nudging me
Telling me you aren’t
too far from my staccato thoughts
Telling me you are
wherever I choose you to be
I’m vacillating hopelessly between
an eclipse of the forgotten
and a penumbra of potent tomorrows…
*** Posted for Week HUNDRED of Magpie Tales at the Willow Manor, and for this week’s Open Link Night at d’Verse Poets Pub! These are 2 of my favorite haunts, and they ought to be yours too!! ***
** Oh, and heartiest CONGRATULATIONS to Tess on a CLASSIC CENTURY of Magpies!!! YOU ROCK!!!! Wooohoooo…**
Oh, Kavita! I cannot tell you how much I appreciate this poem. It is a gem.
“Your teacup lay untouched
Your chair by the window rocked…
– empty -”
Such a lovely expression of lonely longing!
Thanks also for the two sites you listed. I have been looking for alternate sites to post some of my poetry. I will be reading and commenting on your blog more regularly now that I am getting back up to speed physically. I look forward to reading such wonderful poems as this one on a regular basis! (No pressure or anything. . . 😆 )
I wish you enough. . .
Ooohhh… It makes me super happy to see that you liked this poem so much, Paula… Thank you for your appreciative words here… (tight hug)
And as for those favorite sites of mine, you’ve GOT TO check ’em out!!! They are inspiring and very motivating!!! I am certain you will enjoy posting there!
Best wishes to you too, sweet lady… And I hope I can live up to your lovely thoughts on my work…
Sigh…….this is simply beautiful Kavita!!!!
I just love the phrase …”my staccato thoughts…” just seems to capture how I think sometimes….very fine poem IMHO.
“I’m vacillating hopelessly between
an eclipse of the forgotten
and a penumbra of potent tomorrows…” love it!
Kavita, this is amazing. The way you reach into loneliness and pull out beauty is astounding. I aspire… 🙂
my latest:
http://magicinthebackyard.wordpress.com/2012/01/17/we-make-love/
I loved this piece! Just gorgeous, luminous writing!
@AudreyHowitt
That last verse just blew me away!
even when someone we love evaporates, they are always there
This is really gorgeous!
“I watched you
slip into the recesses
of a pale obscurity”
Marvelous writing!
Great response to the prompt 🙂
haunt all you want kavita…smiles….this is heavy with loss but also the little reminders we sometimes get of those that have passed on to the other side…well written kavita…
funny i was reading a comic book the other day and apparently there is a character in the xmen now with your name…i guess i found it interesting enough to share…hope you are well…
Wow that last stanze really eclipsed the whole verse, if I may steal your word..haha, wonderfully done!
This poem was moving, drifting in your words. I love the picture by the way
What a beautiful poem of loneliness. I love your take on the prompt.
I feel the longing. So beautifully expressed!
I am bowled over by the beauty and intensity of this!! Your writing has matured so much and your words reflect a depth of soul and a new understanding of yur craft – you have become a poet well worth following.
Dear Kavita
Its lovely post… I enjoyed reading your ‘staccato’ thoughts… I could relate to this very much…
Shashi
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2012/01/whispers-haiku-on-how-i-write-poetry.html
At twitter @VerseEveryDay
A beautiful and brilliant write. The image is just fantastic! LOVE it, Kavita….
You make me feel from the depths of my soul with your words that are so beautiful. I know I tell you this often… you are my inspiration when it comes to writers… you blow my mind away. I miss you and feel that I have not been stopping by like I want to… (your new poems to go in my inbox any more)?
I guess I just need to remember to stop by and read the words from the beautiful Kavita! 🙂
~L
Yes it feels like that. In the summer when I lose myself from 40C heat in the pool. And emerge refreshed.
wonderful use of words…true smith shows with how you cultivated this piece. It carries in a lovely pace and evokes the emotion of the expression so well. ~ Rose
Hey:) did you edit this with an iPad by chance:) … just wondering:)
~L
Yessss!!! iPad editing indeed! Why? Was it done poorly ? Heheheh…I am learning ..yet! :))
As always beautifully written!! 🙂 Happy Winter 🙂
Thanks, Elyas… You are too kind…
A wonderful winter to you toooooo!!! 😀
Woah girl!u never fail to amaze me wit ur talent…. !!!Brilliant poetry!!!lov these lines…There awakens a sleeping candle
in a guarded corner of my heart…………. how u been???
Aaaah….here you are, at long last!!! Thanks for dropping by, sweets… Am glad you liked the poem too… My writi’s been super infrequent lately…ughhhh…
Anyway, I am doing good…how have u been ? Writing, I hope! I promise I will be by ur place soon!!!
Till then, hugggzzzzz!!!!
Btw, u on Facebook ? Would love to add u there…
I agree with Paula, it’s a gem! Glad to see you drawing with words again. I hope to see a new poem from you soon!
Ooohhh…thanks, summer babe!!! And your wish is my command… I just posted another poem today…hehhehe
Hugs!!!!
Kavita, this is supremely beautiful…just a perfect display of lonesomeness along with the power our minds hold..*hugs*
My gosh!!! Thank you soooo much for such wonderful words on this poem, Safya!!! I am all pink now!!
Glad you liked the read…
Hugs right back at ya, girl !! 😀