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Calm, Colored aura, Coming to rest, Finding peace in chaos, Free from clanging noise, Ink splatter, Lilting tunes of peaceful music, One Shot Wednesday, One Stop Poetry, Peace, Pollution-free, Silence, Tumult
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A syllable calm
Like oceans in your palm
Spelling tranquil
From life’s chaotic quill
It left in immense fury
in tiny beads of bold red
Spraying peace
Like a blanket of fleece
Quiet splatter
On soul’s bronzed platter
It hung low in mid-air
as if in deep grey thought
A serene blot
In an awkward spot
Resting placid
On brown papered acid
It fell on a wall of hope
purple in its efforts to cling
Soothed again
From a tortuous rain
Absorbed in lull
By mind’s robust hull
It gave in to its own will
now sitting proud in navy blue
**Posting this poem at One Shot Wednesday (week 47)… This is THE place for some amazing poetry, peeps! Take a peek, and stay stunned!! ๐ **
Kavita…
Colorful, beautiful, and brilliant.
I just Love your Poetry….G
Wooohooo…. thank you, G-Man! I can almost see a brilliant aura around you now.. ๐
nice use of color through out kavita…and some nice rhymes as well…sometimes i find it best just to give in to it..
You can say that again, Brian! Giving in is not necessarily giving up.. sometimes, it really is the best thing to do.. ๐
Thanks for the nice words here, my friend..
Giving in … to go with the flow, as your poem did! I really enjoyed it, thank you.. : )
Thank YOU, my friend…. your words really made me feel very good about this poem!
A calligraphic experience in rainbows of invention. Your images flow through thoughts that feel as abstract as Lilac Mist and other Jackson Pollock masterpieces and the metaphor links thought to paper, ink, and the manifestation of “the word”. Such a finely wrought piece!
Excellent.
WOWWW!! Your shower of wonderful words for this poem has made me beam and jump in joy and gratitude, Gay.. thank you ever so much!
I am extremely happy you liked this poem so much!!
Much love to you, my friend..
“Purple in its efforts to cling,” lovely phrase. And I agree with the idea that giving in is not unhealthy, and long as it’s not giving in to something unhealthy!! (Navel gazer quote of the day, right?) But giving in to the good means not putting up needless resistance to what creation is calling you to do… that’s my take on this lovely poem. Thanks, Kavita! Amy (and the feminist in you will chuckle at my poem)
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/05/24/creation-from-a-womans-p-o-v/
You said it, Amy! Giving in is indeed quite different from giving up! Besides, if the cause is good enough, giving in is not at all bad.. ๐
Thanks for your fantastic insights here, sweetie… perspective is the name of this poetry game.. isn’t it!? That’s what’s life all about!
Mwaahhzz to you, girl!!
You are the rhyme queen, Kavita. I love how this journey begins as “oceans in your palm” and ends “sitting proud in navy blue”.
Wooohoooooo … THANK YOUUUUUUUUUUUU so much, Belinda!! I am flyyyyyyinnggggggggggggggggg… ๐
Lovely imagery and a nice rhyme scheme. Really enjoyed the two line interludes between the rhyming stanzas. Cool style.
heheh..thanks, Mark! You know what? I thought the rhymes were getting too much…so I added the 2 line spacers in between… besides, I felt like adding a touch of tangibility to this otherwise abstract piece… very glad you enjoyed it, my friend… your comments and feedback are extremely important to me!!
It fell on a wall of hope
purple in its efforts to cling
Beautifully written Kavita. The two lines i selected are ones that i can take with me and twist and turn, wring them out and extract all that you have given me here. To envision this…it fell on a wall of hope. Wonderfully written!
All I can manage in return for this wonderful comment is a meek inaudible “thank you”, Tolbert…
You have no idea how pleased I am to know that those lines had that much of an impact on you… and your saying so means a lot to me, my friend! Once again, THANK YOU!!!
Enjoyed the array of colors you used in the poem.
Gee.. thank you, Charlie!! You inspire me!
Its beautiful kavita
I liked your lines
‘It fell on a wall of hope
purple in its efforts to cling’
a lot. Thanks for sharing…
Shashi
เฅ เคจเคฎเค เคถเคฟเคตเคพเคฏ
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/05/whispers-buddha-and-life.html
At Twitter @VerseEveryDay
I had to think a lot before I was certain I got the “right” feeling in those lines, Shashi… and with those lines, I was actually happy the way they tuned out ๐ And very very happy that you liked them too.. thank you so much, my dear friend..
(hugs)
Nice poem… Nice use of color ๐
Aww.. thank you so much, Ayala dear!!
…on a wall of hope – love that
Another brilliant one Kavita!
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Oh.. you got me blushing, Eclipse… thank you so much for your kind words… means the world to me, my dear friend!!
It is such a misery that the darkest of lies are to our own self by us, in our life, amidst the chaos, all required is to figure it out, then only one can find peace.
Beautiful poetry!
Well said, Harish! We are our very own troublemakers.. and our very own soothsayers as well! When we clear our minds of all the unwanted stuff, suddenly, everything seems like smooth poetry.. doesn’t it?
I am very happy you liked this poem, my friend.. thanks a ton for your words of insight and appreciation here..
enjoyed the rhyme you put to this piece, flows very well. Beautifully done ~ Rose
Aww.. thanks a heap, Rose dear.. you are so sweet!!!
This is fun, interesting and also works well on a deeper level, where it asks quite a few questions. Nicely done indeed, Kavita, with a great contrast between the rhymed and unrhymed words.
Yaaayyy.. glad you saw it that way, Joy! I felt like adding some “grounds” to the abstraction I laid out here… I am really happy you READ it all .. thank you so much, my talented friend…
xooxox
Writing in color….this was so beautiful…. I loved each verse!
Yaaaaayy…thank you so much, dearest Heartspell!! When you say such good things about my poems, I feel so honored and ..well… SPECIAL! Thanks again!!!
xoxoox
Like it!
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Thanks, Gautami!
It hung low in mid-air, as if in deep grey thought..
some imagery there girl!!
It’s good to give in instead of sitting tight and holding on to it! Like I read somewhere.. Giving in (up) doesn’t mean that I maybe weak; sometimes it means I am too strong to let go of it! Likewise, it takes a huge humbling response to give in!
I loved the rhymes and how the image complimented the words.. ๐
Hugs xox
Aww.. thanks, gurl!! And you didn’t read that line just “somewhere”… it was in one of your own poems! I remember! ๐
Glad you liked the rhymes though.. I was beginning to think I might have gone a little overboard there.. so I added those non-rhyming “spacer lines” ๐ .. just to give the poem more perspective… heheh
i feel like a drop of ink now after reading your beautiful poem kavita…not yet decided which color and where to fall to rest…will just give in to where ever the wind carries me…smiles
Awww… so sweet of you to say that, Claudia!
May the wind carry you to the best of places.. ๐
xoxoxo
love this metaphorical piece:)
Wowwiiieezzz.. thank you so much Jess dear!! Mwaahh!
Beautifully done.
Thank you, Anthony!!
Visually expressive! Loved it very much!
Woohoo!! Thanks so much, poetryroad!!!
It always feels like pencils/pens/keyboards/fingers have a mind of their own whenever a neat bit of writing escapes my brain. You captured that feeling perfectly with this poem. Dig it! ๐
Gee… glad you feel the same, Matt… thanks!! When a poetic thought crosses my mind, all I can do is watch is glide by, while I scramble to etch it in somewhere!!!
A syllable calm
Like oceans in your palm
Kavita, I love your imagry and the first two lines say so much even if isolated. The journey of a droplet on its way to navy blue! Beautifully done.
hehehe.. I had to start somehow.. didn’t I now!? And I am REALLY glad you liked the way I did here, Janice.. thank you sooooo much, my dear!!!
Good work with the rhyming, Kay. Well done overall. What style of poetry is this, btw?
Bless!
Oh.. thank you so much, Em! As for the style of poetry, gee, I haven’t the faintest clue, my friend! I just wrote it my way sorta.. ๐ I am not sure if this is any form in particular.. heheh
LOVE the opening lines! Thanks for visiting my blog. It’s always nice to “see” you. ๐
hehehe… and I always like stopping by your place, sweetie.. just that, I have been a bit lazy lately ๐
Thanks for the kind words, Rache… you are AWESOME!!!
It’s amazing and each word kind of makes me long for the other..It such a beautiful and subtle description..as is the title and the image and the poem..these three compliment each other in the best possible way.
P.S.-I read your comment on my poem here and must say careful and keen observation girl but i would not like to publish it as you may see even the tags don’t contain the word you mentioned..you might know the reason right? ๐ ..have never got such a wonderful person to read my blog..thanks! highly obliged..
Oh my my!! Thank you sooooo much for the shower of such kind words here, Tripta… I am soaring over the highest possible cloud… really!! Yaaaayyyy!!! ๐
And as for not publishing my comment for the reason you mentioned… ahem ahem… I TOTALLY get it!! ๐ No worries at all! It was for your eyes anyway… heheh
hey Kavita…I really dig the imagery of it not being contained…held by nothing but its’ own time and will
awesome writing, didn’t expect it to end that way
Ohh…thanks, Woih! And yes, you said it perfectly!! The fluid nature of “things” is exactly what I had in mind when I was writing this one… Glad you could appreciate it, my friend..
xoxo
Wow, I love the descriptions and metaphors! Your words just flow so beautifully!
Gee.. thanks a bunch, my dear… you are too kind…
I love metaphor! Smiles!
Thank you for visiting my humble blog and yours comments are certainly appreciated…
Yaaaayyy.. thankoo, Helena dear.. ๐
And as for visits to your blog, ANYTIME!!! ๐
Inspiring, and the wordplay fabulous as always ๐
Thanks for your kind words, Leo… much appreciated!
I so enjoyed the smooth flow, the easy rhyme of this and above all, how you incorporated color. I love color-poetry! True art.
I really appreciate your kind words and encouraging feedback, Victoria… thank you sooo much!!!
xooxox
amazing entry for one shot ๐
beautifully written
Aww.. thanks a heap, dear!! I am glad you liked this one….
xoxooxox
Wonderful poem, the imagery is so vivid! Well done Kavs, you are really a great writer ๐
Now now, girl.. I am flattered here! Soaring on some cloud too… ๐
Thank you so much for your appreciation towards my work, Sonam.. it really means a lot to me, dearie…
xoxoxooxox
Life does write itself from choas. I hope we process it in peace. Nice work, Kavita, as always.
Hugs from blamy Califronia …
heheheheh… from chaos, sprouts peace indeed…
Thanks for the lovely and insightful words, Jamie… you are such a treasure !!
Loads of love from a very warm New York ! ๐
Beautiful…. Purple hope… Love it:)
hehehhe… crazily poetic.. no?! But I am very happy you liked it, L … thankoooo
So beautifully written ๐
Enjoyed it!
Gee… thank you, Umesh… you are such a staunch supporter of my work… and I really appreciate that!