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Cosmic, Eternal, Everlasting, Longing, Love, One Shot Wednesday, One Stop Poetry, Patience, True love, Undying love, Waiting, Yearning
Image credits: amiens@DeviantArt
Ten aeons
Nine dreams
Eight notes
Seven seas
Six degrees
Five senses
Four knocks
Three sighs
Two hearts
But only one breath
To say I love you…
And while a shy moonbeam
caresses my windowsill,
I am still lying in wait
for that one breath
from your lips
meant only
for my
skin
**Written for One Shot Wednesday (week 46)… Check out this wonderland of poetry… and ENJOY!!! 🙂 **
***Oh, and only a few minutes back, I realized that this happens to be my 200th poem posted here … yaaayy!! And in an odd sorta way, this poem seems kinda appropriate for the “occasion”… lolz ***
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Is my comment the first??? Well, it is. 🙂
So, Well, Ummm, Okay, Ah, Really, Awwww.
hahha…all those exclamations said it all, Mihir… gee, thanks~ 😀
Wow Kavita!!! This is so touching…
Gee.. thank you, Inelle.. you are such a sweetheart..
Now some poems capture a moment of passion…others engender the desire for it…just love your poem.
hehehe… and I really wonder where this one would fit.. 🙂
Thanks for your MOST encouraging words, my dearest poetic friend!!! You are simply amazing!
Beautiful and passionate.
Gee.. thank you, Anthony..
mmm the perfect moment – that sometimes only comes once in an eon
beautiful Kavita as always
love from the Moon
You bet, Moonie.. sometimes, it take eons for a perfect moment to “happen”… 🙂
Glad you liked and agreed with the sentiment in this poem, my dearest… thank you …
xoxoxo
Kavita…
I could say that this is Brilliantly Beautiful 100 Times.
And it wouldn’t even scratch the surface!
My my!! Galen, you have me floored with your comment! Thank YOU (multiplied by infinity) for that huge shower of kindness here, my dear friend…
YOU ROCK this earth..trust me!!!
mmm…love the countdown and then the point of your arrow brings it home…the longing nice kavita
heheheh.. well, the countdown WAS especially significant for me, Brian..cuz this was also my 200th poem.. and for me, that’s a doubly huuuuuuuuuuge deal! 🙂
Thanks for the kind and appreciative words, my friend…
xx
Ah, I know it well. Is there anything longer than that moment?
hahahhha… you bet, Patti!! There is nothing quite like it!! 🙂
“Only one breath to say…” – lovely!
*sigh*.. thank you so much, Susan dear… 🙂
Nice and passionate 🙂
Aaahh… I like those words, Ayala.. THANK YOU!!! 😀
Yowser. A pretty grown-up word, eh? But one of the best I’ve read recently. I love reading your work.
hehheheh…. thanks, Henry! And I absolutely loved your grown-up word “yowser” …so charming!! 😀
xoxooxox
Original and sensuous love poem. Liked the arrangement, liked the words. Well done. Gay
Gee.. thank you so much, Gay…. I am glad you liked this one… your encouraging words mean a great deal to me, my friend..
The intensely personal nature of love and longing is so beautifully captured! Totally loved it.
Yippeee…thank you so much, Mystic Margarita…. I really appreciate your words here….
Much love to you, my friend..
A charming countdown to romance, my friend – and congrats to you on your 200th poem! Thanks for continually brightening up the blogosphere with your lovely works.
You are very kind and generous with your words for me, Chris…. THANK YOU!!!
Best wishes to you, my friend…
Clever layout. I really liked this line though: “a shy moonbeam
caresses my windowsill.” That’s just yummy.
Woowwwiiieezz…thanks a heap, Randy!! 😀 😀
Dig this! I too feel that moonbeam, and the countdown that never reaches zero. I understand your comment on my blog now. Excellent poem! 😀
hehehhe .. glad you enjoyed it too, Matt.. thank you ever so much for your kind and empathizing words…
ten smiles, nine hugs, eight clapping hands, seven delightful moments, six deep breaths, five stars, four “well done” notes, three times “hooray”, two astonished eyes and only one word “PERFECT” 🙂
Aww… YOU ARE THE BESTEST, Summer Gal!! 😀 😀 😀
LOADS of love New York warmth coming your way!!
XOXOOXOXOXOOX
pointed and sharp in longing. wow 🙂
Aahh.. longing sucks… No?! 🙂
Glad you liked the form of this poem, Baishali… thank youuu..
Lovely and the style is very cool =)
Aww.. thanks, my friend.. I really appreciate your words here….
xooxox
Beautifully written. . .passionate and beautiful.
Thanks a heay for the kind words, Cecilia.. you are very sweet..
aww…this is truly beautiful!
i love this countdown and the arrow bringing it all down to a moment of passion which you have captured so beautifully:))
guess what,i could be your blog stalker because i love your work,
loads of love
tarunima
hehehhe…my blog stalker, eh?!? I actually would LOVE that, Tarunima… in fact, I would be honored! 🙂 Thank you so much, my dear….
lovely, such a longing at the end. I enjoyed the count down – very creative.
Woohoo! Thanks for the kind words, Sheila… the wait can sometimes be inspiring I guess 🙂
excellent and loved the shape of the poem too…well done…pete
Gee.. thank you so much, my friend… you are very kind..
Lovely, Kavita. The form and the function all nicely tied together in a piercing arrow. And congrats on reaching number 200 with such style. 🙂
With good wishes and nice words from awesome poets like yourself, this certainly has been a great ride for me, Joy.. thanks fro everything! 😀
i thought the intense longing for spoken confirmation of love was a little sad, that it has been withheld i suppose is where the sadness came in… hope that makes sense 🙂
heheheh…yes, it des make a lot of sense, Lori.. I guess longing is always sad… but when it is met by that one word we are sooo waiting for, we feel it was all worth it.. what say?! 🙂
“I am still lying in wait
for that one breath
from your lips
meant only
for my
skin”
Kavita, your countdown is stunning, sensuous and exciting…and that does indeed leave me with one breath, and that one has now been rendered breathlesss! Beautifully done, my friend…but pf course, your poems always are just that…beautifully sculptered, with care.
I am humbled by your comment , tolbert… thanks for your wonderful words and generous appreciation for my work here… they are absolutely precious to me!
As is always the case Kavita, you have caused a stirring within my heart that is soothing, like quiet waters stirred and warm. Your poetry is so filled with inspiration and I love the ending, the romance, the touch softer than soft. Beautiful and so very real, I know that somehow the angels are whispering these lovely thoughts to you.
Oh wowww, Janice… your lovely comment here made me feel GREAT about this poem… it already meant a lot to me, but with your words, it became a little more special …. thank you soooo much, my dear friend…
xxx
I loved the countdown to one breath, and that breath’s expression; and then, the holding, waiting for that one other breath… The whole is beautiful, exquisite.
Aww.. thanks, Ruth..
Me is very happy you liked this little poem so much!!
xxx
you’ve woven these words with mastery and tenderness..beautiful!
Oh.. thanks a ton, Laura… it’s very sweet and kind of you to say that, my friend..
Wow!!!!
hehehhe… thank you so much, Layla dear…
xoxoox
Hello Kavita, hope you won’t have to wait in vain.
So much depth and feeling in this poem…I love it!
Congratulations on your 200th poem post! I’m sure there’ll be many more just as beautiful.
Oh.. I didn’t have to wait too long, Andy… 🙂 My hubby made sure of that.. hehhehe
Thanks for your kind wishes and lovely words here, my friend… it’s really very sweet of you…
I pop back into the blogosphere and read this.
Excellent, hopefully noone will have to wait too long
hahahha… amen to that, Richard! 🙂
And thanks for stopping by, my friend.. I am honored that you liked it so much…
Oooh, another shape poem…I love those! The countdown leading up to “But only one breath to say I love you” is perfect.
Awww… thank YOU so much, Janna dear! A visit (or more) to your site is really pending now… will be there soon, girl! 🙂
aaha! Pointing downwards.. that made an impact for sure!
“meant only for my skin”… ahem.. ahem!!
I am singed already (reading your words and the passion expressed).. 😀
I hope the wait won’t be longer or perhaps already scaled- wink!!
Hugs xoxox
MY MY MY!! You’ve struck me with your words now, Olivia! 😀 I am fainting… out of sheer disbelief.. 🙂
Seriously.. I am glad you liked this one so much, darling.. thank youuuu…
Gee.. I’m missing you these days.. 😦
Hope to chat with you sooonnzzzz!
WOW is the word .. simple awesome .. i dont know how you do it but its bloody marvellous…
the countdown.. the words used … and then the arrow 🙂
and I just read 200th post CONGRATULATIONS on that …
hehehhe… you are really making me blush, Bikram… thank youuuuuuu!!! FOR EVERYTHING!! 😀
xoxoox
hi kavita
tried to leave a comment the other day about your beautiful poem and it has been lost in the mist…so i will try again…your boundless creativity and visual excitement, the words spiraling down, melting away into one last word…it gave me the imagery in my mind as one would be touching the skin, caressing the poem the way i log to caress the one i love…my favorite line “and while a shy moonbeam caresses my windowsill…tres tres belle…i twirled down this poem in sheer awe and tenderness…i cannot say enough…this was more than just a wonderful poem it was a wonderful experience…sweet, gentle, elegant…honest…
First of all, sorry about that lost comment, Janie.. WordPress does indeed go crazy at times.. no!? Duhhh
And thanks for your wonderfully sweet comment here, my dear… it brought tears to my eyes, cuz it felt sooooo good to know that someone appreciates your poem so much! I am very happy this poem brought such lovely images and thoughts to your mind, my friend…
Merci beaucoup, m’amie…
(hugs and kisses)
Beautiful architecture and flow. Fantastic One Shot write! ~ Rose
Gee.. thank you so much, Rose dear… your words here mean a lot to me, my friend…
I really like this Kavita…”lying in wait”….waiting for that gentle passion.
Nicely done 🙂
A lazy person like me can but lie in wait… teehehhehe…
But seriously, thanks for the sweet words, Reggie… I am glad you liked this poem…
so clever, spot on. xx
Wooohoooo… thank you so much, Catie…
BEAUTIFUL! Love the form and the amazing words. 🙂
Gee… thank you, Rachel dear… me is SUPER glad you enjoyed this one!!
Hope you are having an awesome Summer, sweetie… 🙂
I have come back to this a few times ..so enchanting.
Aahh.. thank you so much, Isabella… very sweet of you to do that… I am really glad you liked this poem so much!
What a countdown Kavita!
“…but only one breath to say I love you…” – so beautifully expressed
Hugs to you 🙂
http://eclipseofthemoon.wordpress.com/selected-poetry/
hehehe… I went beserk in romanticism here, Eclipse… but I am glad I did 🙂 And I am even happier that you liked it too!! Thank youuuuu!! 😀
Hugs right back at ya!!!
Kavita! It has been far too long since I have ventured over to your little corner of wordpress. This poem is amazing!! I find it very romantic and extremely powerful. Really glad to see you are still writing. I have been only able to access internet on my phone for last three weeks so I have some catching up to do. Really enjoyed this one though!
All the best,
MS
Aww.. thank you so much, Mark… I have been too lazy myself… trying my hand at too many things now, and that seems to be taking my time more than I would have liked it to.. hence the shortage of visits from me too.. 😦 But I will make up for it…soon!
Anyway, thanks for your ever encouraging words, my friend… it makes me very happy to know that you enjoyed this poem sooo much…. yaaaayyyy!!!
Just lovely!
teeheehee.. thanks, Madeleine!! 🙂
Simple beauty. Simply lovely. Thank you for this one especially.
Awww… thank YOU, Jamie… I am totally humbled by this comment of yours… *sigh*
Superb poetry 🙂
Awww… thanks again, Umesh!!
xoxooxox
this is my favorite from you …
Oooohh my my!! Thanks a heap, summer gal… mwaahh!!