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Analogy, Blue blood, Castle, Characteristics, Depiction of self, Fortress, Good and Bad, Grand, Luxury, Metaphorical, Palace, Poetry Potluck, Protected, Qualities, Regal, Royal, Royal blood, Self image, Self portrayal, Week 35
Image credits: turtle_rn@DeviantArt
Where tall doorways open to
a plethora of unspoken powers
Where winding stairs lead to
a patio of the wildest flowers
Where chandeliers of tears
hang from arched high ceilings
Where closed chests hold
a treasure of hidden feelings
Where impenetrable ramparts
guard all chambers of integrity
Where refined tastes coexist
with a fine dose of alacrity
Where portraits of memories
carefully adorn long corridors
Where mysteries wait to be
unearthed from marbled floors
Where fountains of thought
flow beside the bravest knights
Where the moon spares a beam
on the most darkest of nights
This is my body
– my armed fortress –
This is my soul
– my whimsical mansion –
This
…is I…
**Written for Poetry Potluck (Week 35 – Theme: Fortresses, Castles, Palaces and Royal houses).. Check it out, and enjoy this tour de royalty!! You will be amazed at the treasures you’ll find here… **
chandeliers of tears…such a beautiful image. I loved visiting your magical castle 🙂
Thank you so very much, David… your kind words here definitely made me feel very VERY good about this poem…
xoxoox
It is beautiful. Nice imagery also. Here is my Potluck: http://verseinanutshell.wordpress.com/2011/05/16/protect/
Gee… thanks a ton, my friend… your comments are much appreciated! xoox
“portraits of memories” – wow……
🙂 Aww.. thanks, Anthony!! You are a gem!
“Where the moon spares a beam on the most darkest of nights.”
Love, love it.
Woohooo…thanks a bunch, Thingy!! 🙂 You are very sweet…
don’t know where to start, simply fabulous. Where portraits of memories
carefully adorn long corridors – love this.
Oh… thank you so much, Susan dear… your kind words here are much appreciated!!
xoxo
Beautiful image and lovely words that accompany it Kavita and hello sweetie! Longtime 🙂 x
Ohhh…it’s youuuuuuuuuuuu!! Jeez! I missed you so much, dear lady! And just y’day, I was thinking about you (among the million other times I thought about you)! Whhheeeww… glad to see you’re okay, sweetie…
And thanks for stopping by this place…. you are a doll!!! xoxooxo
My whimsical mansion, mysteries wait to be unearthed…powerful images all through the poem. Excellent! Thank you!
Thank YOU for such lovely words, Dan… I am really happy you enjoyed this poem here…
xoxo
Stunning imagery as always – thank you – this really brightened my Monday 🙂
oh wowww…!! thanks a ton, Marousia dear… your kind words here certainly made my evening WONDERFUL!!!
xoxooxxo
I am impressed by your ability to write poetry about external topics.
🙂 Thanks a bunch, JP… I appreciate your saying such nice things here… means a great deal to me!
wow kavita,
your poem is brilliantly written…the rhyming works its way in so naturally and adds a richness which brings out the blue-blooded world and elegance which comes to life…love the words you’ve carefully chosen, so appropriate to bring your readers into the realm of royalty…lovely photos to enhance your poem…a magnificent self-portrayal, utilizing all the tags beautifully…again, truly magnificent writing and you’ve unveiled your soul and what a soul it is!!!
My my my!! Thanks a ton for the shower of kindness here, Janie…it’s very sweet of you! I am honored! I am delighted that you enjoyed this poem so much… I’m a lover of rhymes sorta, and am really happy to see that you liked what I did in this poem… your appreciation and encouragement here matters a great to me, sweetie… once again, a huuuuuge thanks for everything!!!
(hugs and love)
From the chandeliers of tears to the marbled floors hiding who knows what mysteries, thank you for inviting us in to your “whimsical mansion”–such a great metaphor for the soul. I enjoyed this greatly.
Aww…anytime, DS… wonderful persons such as yourself are always welcome into the realms of my being and soul.. cuz it’s your presence that makes this soul richer than ever! Thanks for being there, dear friend.. your words mean a LOT to me!!!
xoxooxox
Gorgeous, this poem alone could win my heart, if all the others hadn’t done it before this. I kept trying to pick one, just one verse in this that was my favorite but alas, I find them all passionate and enthralling. Why must you make life so difficult? 🙂
hehehe… you tickle my “modesty” nerve, John… Glad you liked this poem so much!! I am truly honored!
Thanks a HEAP for your generously kind words here…. they are most appreciated, my friend…
(hugs)
This special connection you have with words … it’s always an adventure to come here and read your poems! Keep those mysteries coming and the marble floors polished for a dance of lovely expressions! Happy Monday fleur de-lis!
Aww… gee, Summer Gal, you just made me blush.. and pink too… Thank you so much, sweet lady!! I really appreciate your encouraging drizzle here… makes me feel proud of the stuff I write… yooohoooo!!! 😀
xoxooxoox
You should be proud! Always! 🙂
Aww… (TIGHT HUGS!!!!!) 😀
The trouble with going out for dinner is that by the time you come back all the good comments have been offered…so okay ditto to all the good stuff said! 😉
hehehe…you are just too much, Charles!! I am flattered…REALLY!! But then again, I hope the dinner was worth it 😉
xoxoxox
Beautiful poem. I liked all of it, but especially liked, “Where fountains of thought
flow beside the bravest knights.” I like the idea of fountains of thought and flowing ideas.
Yaaayyy…..thank you, Janna! I simply HAD to write something about the mind and its thoughts and ideas… so just couldn’t stop myself from writing that particular verse… SO GLAD you liked it in particular, sweetie… thanks you EVER SO MUCH for saying so… it really means a whole lot to me!!
xoxoox
This is my body
– my armed fortress –
This is my soul
– my whimsical mansion –
This
…is I…
this is so powerful! i really love it!
well done!
Gee.. thanks a ton, dear… your kind words are most appreciated!
Wow, you leave me stunned once again! Love the poem! The last part seems to linger on in the air, ringing in the ears. Wonderful poem
Weee… with your lovely and encouraging words, you sure keep my spirits alive, girl! Can’t thank you enough for that!
So GLAD you enjoyed this whimsical bit from me… mwaaahh! xoxoxo
At first I believed you just have the ability to garnish your words. Now I am convinced that you just have the ability to enrich the reader’s soul. It was such an electrifying experience, all the way from the title to the very last comment. How vividly you capture the various emotions on fortitude and weaknesses in a single stanza with perfect analogies to chests and chandeliers! You are truly a gifted poet.
Aww.. gee.. now that’s very sweet of you, hubby! As for those words, NOW I know how you “fell” within my grasp 😉 And boy!! Am I glad or what!!!
You are a wonderful poet. You have a way with words that is spell binding! Have you published a book of poetry yet? or am I behind the times? I would gladly purchase your work for my library. 🙂
Oooohhh.. Cecilia dear, I am thoroughly flattered! And totally enjoying this shower of loveliness!! Thank you ever so much, my friend..
Noooo.. no books published.. YET! But I aspire to…some day.. (sigh) 🙂
I’m just in love with your words Kavita……….
🙂
Weee…thanks a bunch, Eclipse!! I consider myself blessed to have readers like you!!
xoxox
Imagery was lovely. Analogies…breathtaking!
My my..thank you so much, honeyhaiku!!! LOVE your name!!! I can picture a sweet face behind it too…
Love this, Kavita. You took what could be a superficial subject and made it something to really ponder. Terrific, my friend.
You are very kind, Victoria.. thank you so much for your appreciation towards my poem here.. coming from excellent poets/writers like yourself, it really means a lot to me, my friend… Once again, my sincerest thanks!!
xoxo
For a moment I was beginning to wonder how sad it is inside that castle for the inhabitants as they lived a fake life then the end brought it home that the castle wasn’t a structural edifice but rather a being, which makes the picture painted by the words in this poem even sadder. Life must live…truly, according to the script the blueprint was written on. Good work here, Kay.
Bless!
You bet, Em! Life is but a script…it keeps written and rewritten.. and the players have to follow… but how well they play their part, well, that’s ALL UP TO THEM! 🙂
Loved your insight here, my friend.. you are a true gem in my world of poetry.. your words and truly invaluable to me! Thanks a bunch for being there, dear pal!
xoxoxoox
This is my body
– my armed fortress –
This is my soul
– my whimsical mansion –
This
…is I…
Behold all ye lesser mortals..!
**Holy Bow**
Kavs, the image took my breath away! The words are rarest of gems from her treasury.. 🙂
Hugs xox
You liked it huh? Yaaaaaaaaaaaaaayyy…thankoo so much, sweet Livvy… xoxoxox
Keep rocking my world with your lovely comments, dearie… (hugggiiieeezzz) 😀
Such a beautiful write Kavita! I love your use of language and the amazing scene you create with your words. Again you leave me in awe! 😀 xx
it’s funny you used the word “awe”, Chloe! Cuz less than a minute ago, I commented on Olivia’s status (on facebook), and it was all about awesomeness and awfulness! heheheh
Anyway, thanks for your ever encouraging words, darling.. I want you to know that your comments here really mean a lot to me, sweetie.. thank you so much!!!
As for the use of language in my poems, well, what can I say.. I totally LOVE English and try to use it the best I possibly can.. 😀
xoxoxoxo
A beautiful piece Kavita! Love the last part- “this is I”- love it!
Ohhhh..thank you so much, Tekia dear… I am VERY HAPPY you liked that last bit so much… I personally felt it added some substance to the poem (but that’s just me saying so..) But now that you like it too, it makes me feel even better about it.. thanks again, sweetheart…
xoxoxo
Captivating, beautifully expressed. I loved this!
Aww.. thanks a ton, Nicole… I am very glad you liked this one!
xoxo
Wow! exquisite expressionism.
You heart seems to be in right place, guarded and comforted!
WOWWW!! Now that’s a huge thing to say, Harish.. thank you… I am totally flattered!
Glad you liked this poem, my newfound friend..
I love it 🙂
Happy Potluck!
http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/05/15/restored-the-jubilee/
Ohhh..thank you so much, Lynnaima… A very happy potluck to you toooooo!! 😀
xoox
I love the twist at the end! Here I was, picturing each place inside this mansion or castle as you described the “wheres” only to find out you were talking about YOU! Love it! 😀
Ooohhh… you seriously WERE thinking about different aspects of a mansion, eh!?!? teeheeheh… WOW! Then I definitely had you! Yaaaayyy!
Thank you so much for your appreciate words, Dragonkatet… means the world to me, sweetie!!
xxxx
beautiful!!
i just love your words,especially the last two lines….W.O.W!!
loads of love
tarunima
Awww..thank you so much, Tarunima… it’s very sweet of you to say that, dearie…
xoxoox
Outstanding. You floor me every time. One of my favs so far.
Woohooo!! I am flattered, Henry!! 😀 Thank you so much!!!!
xoxoxo
You are amazing. Love it 🙂
my my!! I am really flattered, my dear friend.. thank you so much!!!!
xoxoxoox
Kavita, elegantly played! The rhymes were perfect, not forced, and the message was clear. You are all that AND a bag of chips, as we say in my neck of the woods!! Peace, Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/05/16/the-pine-box-and-news-from-amy/
Mmm…chips!! Yummmyy!!! Me likeys, Amy!! Thank youuu!!! (hugs) 🙂
Glad you enjoyed this poem too, my dear…
Lotsa love coming your way!!!
nice words kavi- thanks for coming by.. on sabbatical for awhile..
Oh yes, Kris.. I noticed your absence, Kris dear.. so just wanted to make sure if all’s okay with you..
Thanks for the visit, my friend… and take care… 🙂
Lovely…loved the femme fatale words going with the picture. You rock!
cheers
Suja
Gee… thanks a bunch, Suja dear… you just made my day even brighter by saying so!!!
xoxoxoox
I can’t believe I’m not the first one who dropped a comment here. I really love this poem Kavita… And the photo, too! It matches the poem very well…
You never failed to inspire me to be a great poet.
Thank you! 🙂
Awww… never mind, dearie.. You have been the first to comment here SO many times before… and I shall always be thankful to for that!! 🙂
Lots of love coming your way, Inelle..
A fortress and a mansion, a very inspired poem… Just wonderful, Kavita!
Thank you sooo much, seabell.. I am so glad you enjoyed this poem!!!
xoxox
I would like to add my appreciation to all the wonderful comments here. I really loved the poem, I could see your mansion and feel its aura. Magical words.
It’s very kind of you to say that, Tigerbrite.. thank you so much!!!! I really appreciate your your words here..
xoxoox
Simply beautiful!!!!!! Kavita, keep inspiring…
Oh..thank you, Rameshji… your words always keep me motivated!!!
xoxo
The repetition of ‘where’ is what really makes this poem, Kavita. It reinforces your imagery very powerfully. Excellent!!
Gee… thanks for the appreciation, Jessica… I’m glad you enjoyed the form and structure of this poem… your words here mean a great deal to me!!
xoxo
So many colorful wonderful lines… I like the last stanza best 🙂
Wowwiieess… thanks a ton, my friend!! Me is very glad you enjoyed this one!!! 🙂
“Where chandeliers of tears”
The internal rhyme here is neato. Dig the motif for some reason. (Check my poem: Great minds think alike.) 😀
Excellent work!
Woohhooo!! Thanks for the appreciation, Matt!! Frankly, i hadnt noticed the internal rhyme in that particular line…duhhh!! Wow! It does sound/look pretty cool now that you mention it 🙂 Well, I am off to read your poem right away!! The title itself most interesting…hehehe
Back after long long time, Kavita. what an amazing write it was…Beautiful…Let it be…
Regards~ Sayandeep
Oh thank you ever so much, Sayan!!! I really appreciate your words here, my friend….
You are thee most amazing poet I know…. Your work takes me into your story and every time I read I am more amazed. You my dear need to publish a book! I would love to learn how you became so amazing! … And also what is jingle poetry?
You’re lovely!
My my my!!! L, I am thoroughly flattered, darling! Whheeewww….
Thank YOU for this rainstorm of compliments… (graceful bow)… 😀
Oh… and Jingle Poetry is an online poetry community… it has many facets to it… poetry news and tidbits, poetry potluck (based on some weekly theme), poet interviews, reviews… basically, fun stuff! 🙂 Check it out some time…
“Where closed chests hold
a treasure of hidden feelings” – I liked the double meaning within. The items within linked to a tinge of humanity. Absolutely stunning – providing a new glimpse to a castle! 🙂
You are the first and ONLY one to point out those line in particular, Clariice… and I THANK YOU for that!! Cuz I really had both the meanings in mind when I wrote those lines…
I’m really really glad you enjoyed this piece, my dear..
I so love your poems. :] I am envious,, but in a happy for you way, If words paint pictures, this is a masterpiece. xx
Weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee… that’s the best compliment ever, Catie!! Thank you soooo much, sweetheart!! Yaaaahoooo!! 😀 😀 😀
a beautiful image, great placement of words, and a lovely flow. a simple enchanting journey and unique take on the prompt.
🙂 Very kind of you to say that, Jess… I am humbled…
Thanks a ton, my dear!!
I must say this is a beautiful and powerful piece K!
Oh.. thank you so much, Mark!!