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Playful
That whip flying from her feet
lashing at strange empty faces,
She moved on
undaunted
by the impending dark cloud
Unpretentious
The mahogany dyed odd strands
tickling at her naked smooth nape ,
She moved on
swaying
to the muted symphony in the air
Relentless
Those torrential bursts of rain
pounding against the tip of her nose,
She moved on
accompanied
by a quaint umbrella of hope
Frivolous
That soaked little paisley dress
clinging to her sun kissed skin,
She moved on
mesmerized
by her sapphire lined horizons
She’s still marching
Free-spirited
and free…
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How I write, is mine...How you read, is yours 
“by a quaint umbrella of hope” love that line. Your poetic piece reveals a great sense of a free spirited individual, but more as one enjoying nature rather than being rebellious just for the sake of being so. The speaker expresses the enjoyment of momentary freedom among a storm through the image of the girl. Wonderful poem, Kavita. Hopeful.
Oh wow, Adam!It feels REALLY great when a piece is read and interpreted just the way the writer wished for it to be understood.. thank you so much fr seeing this poem this way, my friend… I really appreciate your eye keen of observation…
Yes, this poem was intended to be all about experiencing and relishing freedom in each moment as it comes by… with hope and with an open mind…
So glad you liked it, Adam!! Thanks again!!!
As long as we can keep marching we’re succeeding. great words.
Well said, Anthony.. the key is to keep marching on… hope and “luck” will find their way too 🙂
Glad you liked this one, my friend..
Ah Kavita, you have written like a true free spirit with the passion boiling in your blood sister! I can feel the heat rising through the poem as it gains momentum. Great write, and I know where she’s coming from!
Wooohoooo…you heard me, Shan!! And understood me well thru’ my words here.. a sincere thank you (from the deepest corners of my heart) for that! And HURRRAY! for your liking it so much! Your words mean the world to me, dearie!!! xoxoox
She is beautiful, dangerously content to be all that she chooses to be. I like this; the person most of us are afraid for her to be but so elated if she would bless us with acknowledgement and a moment or two of her time.
Oh wow…. I could have never said so well, Sam… you have used the perfect words to describe her, and the feelings people have towards her!
Thank you so much for “understanding” the thought behind this poem, my friend… it’s most appreciated!!!
wow kavita,
your poem literally flows…i love the freedom i feel when gliding through it as if i’m on ice skates, as if i become the wind…what beautiful imagery and passionate writing…wonderful words to dance with…”she moved on swaying to the muted symphony in the air”…and a symphony it is, your poem!!!!
heheh… it’s so nice to see someone enjoy reading this poem as much as I enjoyed writing it… thanks a bunch, Janice…
Your ebullient words here CERTAINLY made my day even more perfect than it already was! Am really happy you liked this poem so much, my dear friend.. your kind words of appreciation and encouragement here are indeed a treasure to me!
xoxoxo
The playfulness and joy of the subject is beautifully expressed in the form you’ve chosen, Kavita. So lovely – a dance in the rain – especially liked “swaying
to the muted symphony in the air” – music is all around us waiting for us to experience it!
You can say that again, Gay.. Music is all around us, just waiting to be heard…
Glad you enjoyed tis poem, my creative friend… thanks a ton for your kind words…
I love the paradox in this…”that soaked little paisley dress”…yet it clings “to her sun kissed skin”…moving on yet mesmerized “by her sapphire lined horizons”
From start to finish it is a pleasure to read…and your selection of artwork is commendable too!
Gee..thanks for those amazing words, Tolbert.. after every OSW, I keep waiting to hear what you have to say… cuz your comments and appreciative feedback really make my day, my friend… thanks again for everything!
Absolutely adore this ..the spirit of the poem is wonderful..love “she moved on mesmerized” *smiles* really great. This artwork is awesome.
Ooohh…thanks a bunch, Isabella…so sweet of you say such nice things about this poem.. I am really happy you enjoyed it! And yes, all credits for the artwork go to that amazing artist I mentioned in my post… that was really neat, and so so sooooo apt for this poem! Thanks goodness I found it n DeviantArt! 🙂
nice…i love that despite the rain and storms she marches on and does not allow it to steal her freedom…very nice.
Oh yea, Brian! Long live our enthusiasm and that fighting spirit that we (well, at least most of us) possess… keeps us going, doesn’t it?! 🙂
Glad you liked this positive piece, my friend..
I esp. love ‘her sapphire lined horizons’ ~ beautiful! Great write, full of spirit.. : )
Wowwiieesss.. I too particularly liked that line a lot… thanks a ton for your sweet words on that specific line, dearie… it means a lot to me!!
xoxo
Kavita….the stride in your words rocks!! I love this one! 🙂
Yaaahooo…thanks a ton, Carrie!!! YOU rock, my dear!!! 😀
xoxoxoxo
Beautifully described! I like her!
hehehehhe…me tooooo… I wish just writing about her rubs off some of her zesty spirits on me as well.. 😉
And thanks for the kind words, mama zen.. much appreciated!
This reminds me of a time when I was 15 and I danced along the street in the rain with my friend. It was absolutely torrential, but we sand and danced and laughed. It was exhilleratingly brilliant! I enjoyed the picture and the poem. :]
AWw….how absolutely sweet and nostalgic is that!! I hope you get to enjoy many such dances in the rain even in the future, Catie…. and thank you ever so much for your sweeeeet words here… made me feel like a child myself…yipppeeeee
xoxoxo
:] You seem lovely. :] xx I’m coming back here in future. :] haha xx
Aww…how sweet of you to say that, Catie… mwaaahhhh and hugs!!!
And yes, you are MORE THAN WELCOME here, sweetie! 😀
xoxoxoxo
Great visuals! I get the sense of a young girl playing in the rain. I like very much 🙂
hehehe…and I like your imagination, Tekia… as ever, you rock!! Thanks a bunch for your support and kind words here, sweetie…
xoxoxoox
I love your poem, Kavita. Makes me want to slosh and dance in the puddles.
Oooohh…that’s great, Joanna… in that case, YOU should slosh and dance in those puddles…. and relive childhood days maybe…wouldn’t that just be awesome!?!??!
Glad you enjoyed this read, my dear…thank you so much for your delightful words here..
This was a lot of fun, and I loved the picture, too. very playful with great word pictures 🙂
AWw..thank you so much, Lori… glad you enjoyed this poem-picture combination… yes, that image that I found after a mad hunt on DeviantArt, was, in my opinion, absolutely PERFECT for this poem! Glad I found it…it’s lovely indeed! And am SUPER glad that you enjoyed it too… yaaayyy!
This is fairy-like, as if written about a child. I think it’s also about a certain attitude also, someone who will not be trodden on or held back. Lovely poem, thank you for sharing!
Astute observations, Elizabeth…yes, it is about those the aspects as you have mentioned..the childlike frivolousness, and that keen determination to be positive, no matter what!
So Glad you enjoyed it my dear..thanks a bunch for your insightful comments and kind words.. it really means a great deal to me!
The umbrella of hope….I love that. Beautiful poem.
Somehoe, Ayala, that particular phrase just seemed to pop to my mind..and then I ended up building that entire verse around it…and I kinda liked the way it turned out too.. and doubly glad that you liked it too!! Thanks a ton, my dear… I really appreciate your words here..
xoxo
Oh..as I read this out loud…I could feel the playful emotions of walking in the spring rain again…loved it!
heheheh… and I could imagine you smiling along as you read this one, Charles… and for that, all I can say is a heartfelt THANKS!!!! You rock, my friend… And I hope your days are filled with such smiles and good times…
For the love of rain and the love of life 🙂 Thanks for this.
hahahah… anytime, my friend… your FABULOUS comment totally made me grin wide! 🙂 Wish there was a puddle near my place..would have sploshed in it like crazy! hehehhe
One of my favs of the day. I believe this is the first I’ve read of yours. Inspiring. Great lines, word choices, love your voice, passion and SKILL!!! Like this MUCH!!!!!!!!!!
Woohoo! Thanks a bunch, Henry! I am glad that you liked what you read here… I mean, you visiting me for the first time, and liking it…that’s AWESOME!!
Your encouraging words here mean a whole lot to me, my friend.. and trust me… you are gonna be getting many a visit from me as well!! 😀
lovely, I like the first words in the stanzas and how you’ve used them as titles of a sort, and the rhythm, very nice, well written 🙂
Thanks for that observation, Apryl dear… that’s how I wanted the poem to “sound like” really 🙂 And I am so glad you did…
See ya soon at your blog, my friend…
Lotsa love to you!! !
xoxo
Kavita, I just posted for the first time at One Shot! Loved this poem’s form, especially the solitary adjective beginning each stanza, very effective. This girl has a sense of purpose; there is nothing random about her free-wheeling nature. It seems the only way she can live. Great work! Amy
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Geee… soooo glad you enjoyed this poem, Amy… thank youuuuuu for your kind words! And I read your first One Shot…it’s AWESOME!! This poem here and yours go perfectly with each other too… hehehhe
I hope you make OSP a regular, sweetie.. I am sure you will love it as much as I do!
This totally blew me away! Awesome!
Wooohooo…thanks a TON, Mystic Margarita!! So glad you enjoyed it!!
Oh, and by the way, I absolutely LOVE your screen name!! 😀
xoxoox
Hehe…thanks much. I love my screen name, too! 🙂
Yaaaayyyy…
(hugs)
Very well done; I think you’ve been true to your title, clearly describing your fierce, defiant, whip-wielding stride in spite of the dark threats confronting you. I almost dare not say so as I read the other comments about the freedom of your spirit. I reserve judgement and say Hmm, for now. Excellent poem, Kavita.
hehehhe…thanks for that keen observation and those honest and kind words, Ann… they mean a lot to me! And as for judgement, “hmm” is good eough for now.. hehehe
Glad you enjoyed this fierce-yet-light read 🙂
Some time since I visited to leave a comment – sorry! I really like this poem, with its repetition. It matches perfectly with the image.
And thanks for Facebook friendship too!
Aww.. no worries at all, Jess! And as for Facebook, the moment I saw your naem there, I simply HAD to add you!! heheheh…
Thanks for accepting my request, sweetie ..
Glad you enjoyed this poem-pic combo, babes!! mwahh!
xoxo
The artwork and the poem, beautiful.
“She moved on undaunted” and “She’s still marching Free-spirited and free…”
Oh to be free to be, I love it!
Awww…thanks a bunch for the encouraging words here, Cecelia… Glad you enjoyed the poem…
And yea, freedom totally rocks!! 😀
xoox
Delightfully undaunted by the downpour. This one tickled me, Kavita!
heheheh…glad you enjoyed this one, Eric dear… your words always leave me smiling and content with my writes..
your words and the image seem just to melt together kavita…beautiful…loved it
Wooowww…thanks, Claudia! Yes, I am thankful to the person who made that image… cuz it was totally MEANT for this poem (or so I think).. I am glad you enjoyed this combo, sweetie…
xoxoxo
The stamina of the human soul to keep moving and seeking…very nice…bkm
You bet, Barbara! We humans are quite persistent that way.. hehehe.. and I am glad we are! 🙂
Thanks for your nice and insightful comments, my friend…they are much appreciated!
No matter the obstacles freedom always succeeds! Beautifully written, KAvita!
Amen to that, Dulce…. and thanks for the encouraging words here, babe!
Luv ya!!
xxx
The image and the poem was a satisfying total package!
Loved both of them….but I think I loved the poem even more.
Sensual, too.
Lady Nyo
Aww.. thank you so much, Lady Nyo… it’s very kind of you to say that!
xoxo
A beautiful tale of a free spirit. You composed a delicate flow that lingered along the walk, lovely piece ~ Rose
Oh my! Thanks a ton, Rose… you are very kind… and I’m really glad you enjoyed this free-spirited ride 🙂
Lots of great images in this one Kavita. I can’t get over how much your poetry keeps improving and growing. A jaunty, hopeful poem, fresh as spring rain on the cheek.
WOWWWW!!! Thanks for those encouraging words, Joy!! Trust me, such nice words coming from a poet as awesome as you, it really means a great to me, my dear!! xoxoxo
i really like this and a great visual as well. I can almost feel want you wrote. care free is something.
You bet, Leah! Carefree is quite something! I wish we could all be just as carefree as this woman here..always… Cheers to that!! 🙂
Thanks for your lovely comments, my friend.. xoxoox
Lovely poem..liked the tone and the way you made her move forward.. God bless, her.. Kavita..your visit to my page is awaited.. good day today… for a trip..
heheheh… thanks a bunch for your patience and for your appreciative comments here, Rameshji.. you truly are a very kind soul I am really proud to be associated with!!
Take care, my poetic friend…
Beautifully told…
Here is my One Shot: beguiling time
Aww.. thanks a bunch, Gautami..
fine words and you sure can string ’em together my friend! Great piece
Warmest Salad
Luke
Gee.. it’s so sweet of you to say that, Luke…thankoooo, my friend! Glaaaaaaaad you enjoyed this one..
xoxox
Your imagery is simply stunning Kavs! I really love this poem, gives me that feeling of dancing in the rain, that feeling of carefree freedom! Very well done!
Aww..thankoo, Sonam…
You liked this so much huh? Woohooooo…. Tell you what! Let’s just keep our fingers crossed that it rains soon, and then we run outside and playyyyyyyyy.. what say?!?!
Love you loads for everything, sweetie… xooxoxox
Kavita, your poem is so moving that I so much want to be this woman in your poem, this brave woman, facing her world so gallantly, yet there is also something innocent and playful in her. She’s strong. She finds strength from her surroundings. Don’t anyone ever underestimate her. Gentle yet strong.
Oh, and did I mention how I love this poem so much?
Aww.. there’s nothing stopping you from being this woman, Olive.. step outside, stride along..and guess what! YOU ARE HER!!! 🙂
I am so happy that you liked this poem, my dear friend.. .yours words here made me feel AWESOME about it !! Thank youuuuuuuu…
xoxoxo
Oh kavita, this one is so hopeful….like nothing is going to get this girl down…. I love “quaint umbrella of hope and sapphire lined horizons”…. great desciptive qualities…. Hope all is well with you, my friend. 🙂
hehehe… I am so glad you enjoyed this poem, heartspell.. may those umbrellas of hope and sapphire lined horizons always be by your side, dear sweet friend…
Thanks ever so much for your kind words here… they are MOST appreciated!
xoxox
Proves that life is a journey.
I love your poems, Kavita! 🙂 I hope to be a great poet like you when I grow older. 😀
Awww… how sweet of you, Inelle… thank you sooooo much! As for being great, I am just a learner myself, sweetie.. you are awesome now itself!!!
xoxoxox
“She moved on
accompanied
by a quaint umbrella of hope”
Umbrella of hope is what keeps one moving even when things are going wrong torrentially.Nice poem and nice picture.
Thanks for the kind and insightful words, Nithin… Yes, that umbrella of hope protects us from the harmful UV rays of doubt and fear.. Glad we have it for ourselves.. 🙂
A masterpiece with some epic metaphorical input and simple yet effective genius.
Woohooo!! That is quite a compliment, Andy!! THANK YOU!!! (with a graceful bow)
Undoubtedly one of your finest works!
The wordplay is amazing and the image- I have said it before.. you do an awesome job of a poetic treat..
She’s still marching
Free-spirited
and free…
Very identifiable.. 🙂
Many wishes xoxox
This one totally applies to you, lady!! Glad you enjoyed it just as much as I did! 🙂
Cheers to all us free-spirits 😉 mwwwaahhhzz!!!
You always have such a way with words, and I love your themes! Great work, Kavita!
Yaaaaayy…thanks for that, Christine…
Gee.. I have missed your writing for a while now… will be there very soon, Gally!! 🙂