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Betrayal, Cheated, Clover, Delusion, Face, False hope, Fiction, Flower, Hoping, Illusion, Imagination, Jilted, Lost love, Lover, Magpie Tales, Memories, Mirage, Trust, Unconditional love, Undying love, Wait, Waiting
Image Credits: Tess Kincaid@Magpie Tales
Despite all the promises made
Of never leaving the other
To him a farewell she bade
For her, he was just another
With his desire torn and ground
And a heart like crusted earth
He chose to listen to the sound
Of his whims for what it’s worth
Beside a blooming clover’s toe
Now patiently he waits
Eyes full of jilted lover’s woe
And fenced in memories’ gates
With purplish oceans of belief
A flower he softly holds
Hoping to heave sighs of relief
As love in time unfolds
But as the tides of seasons ebb
And strength begins to fray
In his mind, grows a thin cobweb
Of dreams and faces gray
**Posted for the wonderful Magpie Tales (week 57), hosted by Willow Manor.. Check it out for other lovely takes on this prompt.. **
Love, delusion, hope, longing- perhaps a little bit of deceit?
So many shades put together in one poem. A lovely tale told- a little sad maybe.. But then Happily Ever Afters are so rare and misplaced..
I enjoyed moving up n around with the words.. Oh so dreamily expressed 🙂
Love for you Dear One xoxoxox
Oh yes, Olivia.. this poor guy has seen various shades of life… Sometimes, we really do get carried away with the idea of hope …don’t we?
Glad you liked this sad little poem, my dear…
Love and hugs to you too !!!
xoxoxo
“just another”…does not speak well of her, perhaps he’s better off
Peace, hp
thank you for stopping by
hahaha… that’s what I think too, hp… If only he had understood that… whheewww
Thanks for your kind comments, my friend..
I know this place and such fearful dread that I may need visit it again.
Uh ohhh.. I hope you don’t have to revisit it, Sam…
(hugs)
Purple for sadness, flowers for love. Enjoyed your poem!
Aahh… thanks, Harvee.. glad you liked this poem… colors can be decoded in soooo many ways… no?
xoxox
Sadness in love… timeless emotions.
(sigh)… and so cyclical too…don’t you think, Gerry? Thanks for your kind words here, my friend… much appreciated!!
xoxox
A lovely – and somewhat unexpected – response to the prompt. I have read it a couple of times and will ead it again.
Aaahh… Glad you liked this poem, David.. I am honored… your words and insights here are most appreciated, my friend… thank you ever so much!
I love “a blooming clover’s toe”.
Oh.. thank you so much, Tess… 🙂 You are very kind..
xoxoxo
Love the rhyme/rhythm and this line:
“And fenced in memories’ gates”
The feeling of giving up is profound here.
Well.. he tried drift along those streams of hope.. but then, eventually, his memory got the better of him… poor guy
Thanks for your kind words on this poem, Raven… you are very sweet..
xooxox
Kavita, this is so beautifully written. What a spectacular response to this prompt. I loved the words you used, it just brought me right into this poor guy’s experience.
Oh.. thank you so much for your kindest and thoughtful words, Myrna.. I really appreciate it.. you made me very nice about this fictional piece I wrote.. thank you, my dear..
Poor guy, waiting for better luck by that “…blooming clover’s toe…” So right for St. Patrick’s Day.
You bet, Violet.. he waited and waited, till his memory failed him.. poor guy indeed!
Glad you liked this one, my friend.. thanks for your appreciative words here…
So many of the complexities of love all in one poem…well done!
Aaahhh.. love can be so complex when one makes it so… (sigh)…
Tanks for your kind words, Charles..
xoxo
softly painted tragedy, and a lovely lovely use of the colors to convey mood. brava!
🙂
Ohh..thanks a TON, Siubhan… you are very kind…
Colors do indeed have a way of telling us stories…don’t they? Glad you liked this one, my friend…
xoxoox
Sad letters … Sometimes hope only is not enough!
Fleur de lis! This will be your nickname 🙂
You are right, babe.. sometimes, hope’s just not enough… (sigh)
And guess what?!
I LOVE YOU, summer gal… for this AWESOMEST nickname… you know, I have ALWAYS loved the symbol of fleur de lis…. ALWAYS!!! Even in school, as a girl scout, I used feel so nice looking at the scout symbol.. cuz it used to resemble the fleur de lis! Seriously, you made my day, sweetie!!
THANK YOU!!! (from the deepest corners of my heart)… 😀
xoxoxoox
Well I didn’t know you liked that symbol, but I’m glad I centered the nickname. Enjoy your day Fleur-de-lis 🙂
Yippeee!! Thank youuu…
And you, my dearest summer gal, have a lovely “warm” evening!! 🙂
Sunny hugs coming your way!!!
Wow, what an ending. Wonderful metaphorical work, Kavita.
Oh.. thank you so much, Victoria… Am very glad you liked this poem so much…
Wonderful work.
Ooh.. thanks a ton, KB.. 🙂
xoxo
But as the tides of seasons ebb
And strength begins to fray
In his mind, grows a thin cobweb
Of dreams and faces gray..
the word flow is gentle, profound, and vivid. nothing is perfect, loss and gain are all piece of life…
very magical take on the prompt.
Cheers,
🙂
Well said, Jingle.. it’s all a part of life.. the good and the bad…
Thanks for your thoughtful comments here, my friend… much appreciated!!
Happy Spring Break to ya!! 🙂
What a lovely multi faceted message! Beautiful response to the prompt! 🙂
P.S. You are late for leprochaun searching… did you find the maps? 🙂 🙂 🙂
Aww… thank you, Rachel… so glad you enjoyed this poem…
As for the map, it’s all ready, girl…come on, let’s go!! We are almost there!! 😉
Various shades of life so tightly and aptly knitted in a few picturesque words. 🙂
Oh.. thank youuu, Baishali… Glad you liked this poem, my dear..
Lots of love…
xoxox
Sadness so well expressed.
(sigh)..thank you so much, Madeleine…
xoxo
The complexities of love, in eloquent verse.
Poetry24…where news is the Muse
Aahh.. glad you could appreciate this one, MArtin.. thank you for your kind words…
Oh! How sad. Well expressed.
oh…thanks for the appreciation, Gaurang…
superb write 🙂
a story well told 😀
Aww… thank you so much, Harshika… very kind of you to say that, my dear.. xoxo
nicely done- I especially like the last two lines. and thanks for leaving such nice comments on my blog.
Aww.. thank you so much, Kathe.. so glad you liked this poem…
So sad. Love can be such pain, beautifully expressed.
Lovely photo isn’t it ? That purple is so hypnotic.
You can say that again, tigerbrite… love really has too many facets to it.. (sigh)..and the not-so-good-ones are REALLY bad!
Thanks for your kind and thoughtful words here, friend..
And yes..that picture is simply BRILLIANT!!!
I see ample personification in this poem, and this could be the story of any heart broken…be it the branch, the tedril itself or the whole tree.
Very nice lines.
Oh yea, Anshul.. this could be anyone’s story indeed.. I only hope it isn’t though! Cuz it’s a sad story 😦
Thanks for your appreciative words here…
xoxo
‘for her, he was just another’ …. don’t think he deserved that – or her! Nicely written.
You bet, Helen!! He certainly didn’t deserve it.. poor guy…
Thanks for your kind words here, my dear..you are very sweet…
Your line “And fenced in memories’ gates” is amazing!! And the ending is also sadly beautiful. I really enjoy the idea of things graying out. It can be taken a couple ways (as in loosing its actuality in memory or as the people grow older he changes his perception but doesn’t loose the love). Great work!
You know, Mark.. each time you give me an indepth interpretation on any of my poems, I become more and more certain that if is anyone who truly understands what I write, you are DEFINITELY one of them… And I humbly and sincerely thank you for that..really!
When I wrote that last line in the poem, I really wanted to leave it vague… well, just as the word suggest, I wanted to leave it “gray”… not suggesting he forgot about her…not suggesting he became a lunatic.. but just some fuzzy/changed image… and you read it EXACTLY that way!! GOSH! THANK YOU…
You have no idea how happy this makes me!! 😀 (see that grin? Yea…well.. take a guess)
Oooo this one reads like a song… lovely and heartbreaking. such nice writing!
Aww..thank you so much, Audrey…you are so kind, my dear… I am very happy you liked this poem …
xoxoxo
from the second verse you concentrate only on the man…loved that…excellent imagery!!
p.s. poor guy!
It’s actually all about the guy’s hopeless case of love really, Sarath… the first verse was only to give some background into it 🙂
Glad you liked the poem, S.. thanks for your appreciative words here…
Sometimes it is better to let go… Poor guy!
I knoowww!! I wish someone had told him that… poor chap indeed.. 😦
Hope you are an Indian by origin. I have read a lot of poems in many Indian languages that rhyme perfectly, adheres strictly to some meter and are stunning in their themes. But I have not seen many English poems like that, as it is tougher to make verses here, when compared to Indian languages. Yours is one of the kind. I read your poem once, then again and again. Your lines are still resonating in my mind.
Would like to say this ‘A thing of beauty is a joy for ever’. Your name ‘Kavita (poem)’ suits you well!
This really is a huge compliment, Nith… thank you ever so much..
I don’t think I have ever tried writing a poem in Hindi.. maybe some day, I will try that as well.. would LOVE to!
And as for this poem, I am SUPER happy you liked it so much… thanks again, my friend… I really appreciate your words here…
xoxo
Depth of emotion mixed with hope and hopelessness..yet still holding a wisp of hope while waiting across time..
I loved it! 🙂
Aww… thanks, Clariice… so glad you liked this sad little tale.. I wish someone had told this man to get real… whheeww!
Magical metaphors. Poem lays down the stages well, the complexities. Engaging. Enticing. Love it. Nice work, dear Kavita.
Oooohh…your words make me soar up to cloud nine, Jamie dear..thank you SO MUCH!!
This is invaluable!!
xoxoxo
Wow. Excellent poem. I’ll have to check out the rest of your site…
Ooohh… thank you, bluemustang! Love your blogname!! Totally cool! 🙂 Glad you enjoyed this poem, my friend…
very lovely piece of poetry on your front page i enjoyed it .from kevin.
It’s very kind of you to say that, Kevin.. thank you so much… I am really glad you liked this poem…