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American-Gothic, Dull life, Echostains, Echostains Poetry Challenge, He said She said, Life, Living, Opposites, Optimism, Palatial house, Pessimism, Thursday Poets Rally, TPR Week 39
Image Credits: Lynda@Echostains
He: Change is a good thing
when it is for the better
She: What use is this quiet
if it becomes another fetter
He: Our boring lives will now
take on a brand new color
She: If blue turns to grey,
things can only get duller
He: Wind plays many tricks
on creaky wooden stairways
She: There’s more than just wind
in the deceptive empty hallways
He: For my safety, I have
a pitchfork turned candle holder
She: But it’s always safe
to look behind your shoulder
He: It is now all ours;
this giant old house
She: But here’s known to live
the ghost of a vicious mouse
**Written in response to the Bookstains American-Gothic Poetry Challenge**
***Also posted for Thursday Poets Rally (Week 39) ***
I would also like to thank everyone at Thursday Poets Rally for your votes and participation, and for honoring me with this lovely award…
rays of brilliant sun
with hints of a fading moon
signs of lovely day
A very witty poem…enjoyed the back and forth dialogue.:-)
hahahha…you won’t believe this Charles, but I was just thinking now if I’ve read your most recent poem, and then here I see YOUR comment on mine!! 🙂
Some telepathy that was!!
Glad you enjoyed this fun piece, my friend.. 🙂 That was my intent anyway.. teehee
Entertaining repartee, here, Kavita!
heheh…thanks a ton, Kim… glad you enjoyed this fun Gothic piece.. 😉
Fun & Gothic in the same sentence almost makes it sound like a paradox 🙂
Brilliant, Witty and very clever Kavita! This is a gem and I’m adding it now! Many thanks for joining in – always appreciated 🙂
PS A very innovative use for the pitch fork I thought 😀
LOL…thanks a bunch, Lynda!! You liking this poem means a LOT to me, my friend…. I truly feel honored!!
As for that pitchfork, I too kinda liked what I came up with.. I guess the expression on his face made me write what I did… 😀
So happy you enjoyed this one, L…
xoxoxo
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love your humor…
very fine tuned entry, thanks for sharing…
😉
Gee,… thank you, Jingle… I appreciate your kind words here…
Have a great weekend!!
I love the simultaneously grave and chiding discussion ending in the tiny reeking of the ghost mouse in the old and waiting home.
Fantastic!
LOL.. glad you enjoyed this one, JD.. that ghost of the mouse needed some company… finally, it found some… 2 actually! 🙂
Thanks for your kind comments here, my friend…
This is fun.
teehee.. .glad you enjoyed this one, Sammie… 🙂
The dialogue in this is very well crafted. Really enjoyed it K 🙂
heheheh.. thanks a bunch, Mark!! 🙂 The challenge was most interesting.. I thoroughly enjoyed writing this one… 😀
oxoxo
Lol loved that last line! 🙂 They both look rather sour-faced, don’t they? Your dialogue makes me think that he is the optimist of the two.
hahaha…you bet he looks sour-faced…which is probably why I wanted to make the poem sound like a conversation between a positive and a negative mind… else it would have been toooooo sad.. 🙂
Glad you enjoyed this fun one, D…
xoxoox
Ha ha, brilliant.
Your sentiments about this picture mirrors mine.
Bwahahaha!!! Glad you enjoyed this fun-dark piece, Richard… I can totally count on you for appreciation on this 🙂
Hugs to you, my friend!
And yes, great minds so think alike!! 😉
Charming, Kavita! And tons of fun to read and imagine. But I think they need a cup of my tea! 😀
hahahahha… your tea, eh??? Now THAT, I too would LOVE to have 😉
Thanks a bunch for your sweet words here, Paula.. you are a darling! I am so happy you enjoyed this piece… 😀
xoxoox
Love this! Very clever–I know the ghost of a (to all but me) “vicious” cat that would be happy to take care of the ghost of the vicious mouse…
LOLZ.. thanks, DS!!! You gonna a ghost cat here now?!?!? GOOD GOD!! This is one haunted house alright!! hahahah… we can have a ghost Tom-n-Jerry show then!! 😀
So glad you enjoyed this fun poem, my friend… (still giggling over your comment)…your sweet words really made my weekend perfect!!
Love ya!!!!
xoxoxo
brilliant! I’m amazed at your versatile compositions..They seem so effortless
Now now Dhaami… this was for fun.. SO GLAD you enjoyed it, girl!! Thank youuuuuu!! 😀
Pitch fork cum candle holder?
Ghost..?
Mouse..?
Vicious..?
I’m scared. All I thought ever thought that only “oldie” lives in there- I was preparing myself to handle him- but I guess it’s a huge company…
No wonder she talked about safety.. and when the oldie would stab the stalker with that pitch- fork, first the candles would patch burn and then the fork heads would do its job…
Loved it lady! Sunday feels much better reading you 🙂
Hugs xoxox
hahahahha… I knoooww!! They are all scary…no?! Whiny women, pitchforked men, ghosts AND mice!! 😉
Me is super duper happy that you started your Sunday reading this silly-scary one.. and actually felt good reading it!! HAHAHAHA You made my evening alright, girl… just by saying that!! THANK YOUUUUU!!!!
Mwaahhhzz!! 😀
Great poem Kavita, your site always makes me chuckle, which is quite something to do in a poem, without it being behind the hand titters at literary in-jokes
hahahah.. I take that as a serious compliment, Bill!! Thanks a bunch, my friend! Glad you enjoyed this one so much… 🙂
Well written and the back and forth between the he and she are profound. Great read. 🙂
Aww…thanks, Silvertongue!!! Glad you enjoyed this fun/dark read… 🙂
Yea.. that seems like a pretty serious conversation between a pessimist and a part-optimist 🙂
haha, brilliant 😀
hahaha…thanks a ton, Dag!!! 🙂
What a couple, eh? : )
LOLZ.. oh yea, Thingy!! Quite a duo they are!! :)I bet the mice will be scared of them 😉
Nice take on the classic piece of art. You did well with the presentation and wove a nice little tapestry. I like it. Thanks for sharing it with us!
Gee.. thanks, Leif. Their faces looked really serious to me, and that’s what made me add that little bit of humor to he my poem…
Glad you enjoyed it all.. thanks for the appreciation, my friend… it means a lot to me…
Good stuff, the last two stanza’s are hilarious!
tehehheh… thank you, kolembo!!! SO HAPPY you enjoyed this piece… lol…
I love the dialogue style and you have a lovely sense of humour 🙂
I wish this mouse ghost would light some crackers under them! Seriously, lighten up you two!
Cheers
Padmavani
I LOVE the idea of fire-crackers under them… hahahaha…you have quite a naughty ming, Padmavani.. tehehehe…
But really, those two could definitely do with some occasional laughs.. 😉
SO glad you enjoyed this ghostly piece… it kinda goes well with your sitename too … 🙂
And yes.. THANKS A TON for your super cute comments… totally got me imagining stuff and giggling!! (snigger snigger)
his was a lot of fun !!!!
hahahah.. they were gloomy, the mouse ghost, scary.. I wonder where was the fun 😉 LOL.. just kiddin’…
Yup, this was my intention, alright!! 🙂
Thanks, Nimu!! You made my day perfect!!!
You’re too funny. Love the poem and the haiku.
Congrats on the hard-won award. Hugs!
LOL… large house + gloomy faced couple = inspiration for a little bit of fun 🙂
I am sooooo happy you enjoyed this one, Jamie… I LOVED writing this one!! heheheh
And thanks a ton for the wishes on the award too…. I am honored!!
Hugs right back at ya, my dear friend…
xoxox
Seriously Funny!
LOL…glad you enjoyed this one, JP!! Thank you…
xoxo
Lovely thought..making me write one. The contradictory speech bet, them was nice
Thanks, Uma… It was fun writing this one 🙂 Yea, you should give it a shot yourself.. I am you will find it enjoyable yourself!!
I always wondered what their conversations were like. LOL
hahahha… Margaret, I hope my fiction is indeed the real thing!! 🙂 At least it would make me feel nice that my assumptions of people back then are not so wrong after all… 😉
He: Ghost of a mouse, don’t worry we’ll use it to browse
She: Hey, I Hope it is free with this so huge and big house..
Well done Kavita.. this is lovely ..enjoyed it.. as I said .. you inspire.
HAHAHAHAH… that was an awesome comment, Rameshji… let’s both hope that the mouse comes free with the house!!!
So glad you enjoyed this one, R… yaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhooo…seeing this comment from you really made my day even brighter!! Thankooo!! 😀
Nice nice! like all above comments found it clever and funny…:)
way to go….! 🙂
hehehe..thanks a heap, Shilpa! Good to see you here 🙂
He is from Mars and she from Venus…and the world turns 🙂
hahahahaha…you bet, Susan!! The pull from both ends is just too much for Earth to stay still…isn’t it!? 😉
The haunted house with a mouse. Love it;)
hahahaha… thanks a ton, tigerbite! 🙂 Glad you enjoyed this scary-fun piece 🙂
haha! This is awesome! She is so pessimistic. I love the ending, it is great! you’re a witty poet 😀
(giggles).. she sure is hyper pessimistic! Thank goodness he isn’t 🙂
Glad you enjoyed this fun piece, Sonam.. you are a real sweetheart! Thank you so much for your support here, girl…
xoxo
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weee…thankooooo!!!
Hi. I just wanted you to know that I have nominated you for the Versatile Blogger Award. There’s no pressure to accept, but I think your poetry and blog are pretty special, and thought you deserved an award for all your effort! If you’ve already received this award, then pay no heed to this kudos. 😉 Thanks and congratulations!
Thaaaaaaaaanks, my dear… gee, talk about laziness! I saw this comment TODAY, and jumped to approve it, after a considerable amount of self-admonition…whew!! Can’t thank you enough for this award, girl… (tight hugs!!!)
Funny, witty, and what a playful way of using words.
teeheehee… glad you enjoyed this fun piece, Olive.. 🙂 Thankoooo!!
Greetings:
Hope all is well.
Noting that you have been part of poets rally in the year of 2011,
what an achievement, thanks for your outstanding contribution to us
along the way, keep up the excellence. Best!
Come join our poetry rally today if you wish to mingle and get inspired!
A poem of your choice or a free verse is accepted.
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.
Looking forward to seeing you share.
Respect and hugs.
xoxox
Will certainly participate in the rally…soon enough…
Thanks a ton for the invite…
Hugs!