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Avenging, Black humor, Blasphemy, Boredom, Chill, Disappointment, Drama, Endurance, Fiction, Fighting back, Finally, Grande Finale, Horror, Lashing back, Lemon, Life of horror, Magpie Tales, Murder, Murderous act, Nightmarish, Revenge, Satire, Thrill, Torture
She’d wished for a guy,
the best under the sun
But what she got instead
was a diseased rotting lemon
She had yearned to live
with him in a seaside crib
But she soon found herself
within hollow walls of a fib
She’d once dreamt a dream
of being tended to with care
Instead, she saw herself
Living a dark nightmare
She had envisioned
For herself a life of peace
Somehow she ended up
Disjointed, in more than a piece
She’d truly hoped for
Her own heaven on this land
And yet here now she sits
with Hells’s bloodied fork in hand
**This piece of PURE FICTION has been written and submitted for Tess’s amazing picture prompt at Magpie Tales (week 55)… Go check it out, link in, AND ENJOY!!! **
How I write, is mine...How you read, is yours 
wow…. funny, good… loved it reading.
Aww..thanks a bunch, Ammu.. glad you saw the dark humor in this one..
Muder and mahem are everywhere this week!
OUCH!!! I just hope it’s all fiction though.. at least mine IS! 🙂
well written
but i am unable to write such things 😦
Aww…thank you so much for your appreciation here, Anum… (hugs)
As for writing such things, I am sure I can blame my TV for that! 🙂
Hell’s bloody fork! Disjointed indeed. Very passionate (and sad).
(sigh).. you bet, M… A sad life for that girl indeed…
Thanks for your thoughtfulness here, my friend… you are too kind..
Awesome poem, disillusion can turn the mind into lemon juice and lose trust in the process!
You can say that again, Paulo… Broken dreams can really be very disconcerting!! Whheeww!
Thanks for your insights here, my friend.. I really appreciate it!
What a cool take on the prompt!
Woohoo.. thanks a LOAD, MZ!! You really keep me motivated and enthused!!
Luv ya!!
Tragic!! Great write, Kavita.
Aahh… poor gal… what she had in mind..and what she got!! 😦
But I am glad you liked this piece, Tess… thanks for the kind words here and for the awesome prompt!
Poor soul… I hope in a later poem of yours, she’ll find her dream lover…. Loved the lemon reference and such a great image!
Aww.. you are you kind and thoughtful, HeartSpell… you know what? You are first one who noticed and appreciated that lemon reference!! Thank you so much for that, my dear….(hugs)
And yes, I WILL make sure that she finds her soul mate in one of my later poems.. and when I do that, I will definitely tell you about it…
Take care, H…
Love you loads!
A sad story but there is a lovely edge of black humour to relieve the gloom. Loved the vivid imagery
Oh wowwwww….Thank YOU, Marousia… for seeing the black humor in this piece.. that WAS my intention, you know… to make it sound at least a little creepy-funny, despite the sad background… and I SOOO LOVE it that you read it exactly the way I wanted it read 🙂
Many many hugs for making my day, M!!!
xoxoxox
And the title is a stroke of genius
Yaaaaaaaaaaaayyyy… okay, I am REALLY gloating, my dear!!
Thank youuuuuuuuuu SO MUCH for the appreciation!! I too kinda loved the title a lot!! And I must say, a considerable thought went into finally getting there! heheheh
Sounds like he had it coming!!! Dreams can be dangerous things!
You can say that again, L… he sure had it coming!! Everything has a limit after all… whew!!!
Glad you liked this, girl…thanks for your insights here… I really appreciate it..
Such an wonderful take on the prompt 🙂 well written.
Gee.. thank you so much, Dr. B…. you are too sweet!! Glad you liked this take, my friend…
xoxoxo
Great read !!
Gee.. thanks a bunch, JL…glad you liked it!!
That last line reads like an axe-murder! It’s a great read, dissappoint dispelled with gusto. Super title by the way!
Ooohh.. so glad you liked the title…that was my favorite too 🙂
And axe-murder?!??! hahaha… naaa… she could only lay her hands on a fork! Whheew!
Thanks for your appreciation here, my friend…. it means a great deal to me!!!
xoxoxo
Oh what a sad tale, but I guess rotten lemons help us appreciate the prince charming that’ll walk into our lives better. I sure hope she finds her prince and gets over feeling like she is in hell.
Oh yea, DP.. I hope she does too… And you are soooo right… we have to deal with many of ’em lemons before we get to the “right” one!! 🙂
Thaanks a bunch for your words here, my dear..
Hugs to you, girl… have a great weekend!
xoxox
what a story within a poem. i like very much getting a glimpse into what she had dreamed of before the bum created a nightmare… truly gripping. well done!
AWw.. thanks a bunch for your kind and compassionate words, Audrey.. they are most appreciated! Poor gal though… all her dreams were crushed.. ack!
Just right to the prompt…
I loved the way you told that “she envisioned herself peace but ended up disjointed in more than a piece…”
Aww… what a life she got..poor gal! No wonder she ended up doing what she did!! Whheewww
Glad you liked this little piece of fiction, Rashmi.. I really appreciate your kind words here..
xoxox
Enjoyed your take on the prompt…
Gee..thanks, Berowne…
xxxx
D-A-R-K!
I had started with a fool’s smile on my face n then was startled when I reached- “nightmare” My smile had cleared itself. I had sat up straight. I then hurriedly read it out looking for the murder to happen.
Oh Geez! Thrillers thrill me up- really. I wish It could be my story- the end. Really, I have always wanted to do this- every time I realized that the guy was a useless piece of crap. Not just with anger- but with calculation and some amount of pre- meditation.. Oh well! If only I had written those down then..!
Nevermind- it’s never too late to start! Will try to now.. 😉
Hugs for this brilliant Magpie xox
Now now, girl.. don’t get too ahead of yourself now.. you don’t wanna get caught..remember? 🙂
For now, just enjoy some ice-cold lemonade and forget about those useless pieces of crap… 😉
Loadsa hugs and fresh lime juice!!
Love makes fools of us all 😉
(sigh).. you can say that again, Jabblog!! Fiction for me…fact for too many! 😦
Wow !! what a brilliant take on the image ..
Gee…thanks, Nimue!! Your comments here are always so encouraging… YOU ROCK, lady!!
xoxox
Kavita, you really gave the prompt a great twist. Of course, the color red signifies different things to everyone. And most of us tend to associate it with hurt, torture etc.
A story within a prompt……
Oh..that is so true, Shail… that’s what I really like about Magpie Tales.. the picture inspires us all in SO MANY different ways.. and it’s so interesting to read those perceptions!! 🙂 I hope you enjoyed my take on it this time, my friend… thanks a ton for your kind words here…
I love the big bold warning that this is pure fiction. I must say with the amount of emotion and passion in the piece it was probably a good choice! Well done 🙂
hahahhaha… the poem was sooo dark that I thought I HAD to make that clarification 🙂
Glad you enjoyed the read, Mark… and thank you ever so much for your continued support and encouragement…
Have a great weekend!!
xoxo
Loved this, great humor… cleverly done.
🙂 Thanks a bunch, Petrina… YESSS!! You saw the dark humor too… yaaaayyy!!
That was another brilliant read. I just loved how the rhyme seemed totally unforced. Good imagery and a great end.
🙂
Awww…thanks a bunch, Fuzzy!! Glad you liked this one…
I gotta tell ya.. that picture was totally inspiring! 🙂 Glad I could come up with a fictional piece that you could enjoy…
Thanks again, my friend…
Strong storyline and powerful imagery….the ending was brilliant.
Woohoo!! Thanks a ton for your appreciative words, Rekha… glad you liked this story-poem…
Ah when dreams and reality meet…it can be quite an ugly sight….a dark tone to the poem.
You can say that again, C… dreams and expectations when unmet, can be sooooo disappointing… grrrr!!
Well, anyway, I am happy you liked this fictional piece 🙂 Thanks for your insights, slp…
Can you hear the sound of my hands clapping? This is great. Brava!
Awwww.. I am flattered, ds….I swear!! Thanks a heap, my dear friend…. (blushing AND GLOATING at the same time :D)
Am ecstatic that you liked this poem so much… mwaahhh!!!
xoxox
I delighted in this prompt ( the forensic nurse in me ) and loved your vesion of it! Mine is at:
http://rnsane.blogspot.com/2011/03/magpie-tales-55-its-not-nice-to-eat.html#links
hehehhe.. NOW I see why you enjoyed this prompt so much, Carmen! 😉 But even more so, I am happy that you enjoyed my take on it too… yaaaaayyy!!
I so loved this…so visceral and I could so identify. I just wish I had read it years ago! One of your best!
Oh my dear friend… you have NO IDEA how elated I am, seeing that you liked this poem so much!! Many hugs to you, girl!!!
Well, I can’t say I am happy that you could relate to this.. but I certainly am happy that you didn’t end up like her!! whheeww
You take care, my dear… and again, HUGGZZZZ!!! 😀
xoxox
Could be a reality of so many young lives!! Good one!! Sad ….. and you have weaved a good tale.
That’s so true, Nanka.. I believe it’s a sad reality for many.. (sigh)
But as long as it’s fiction, I guess it’s all okay.. I am glad you liked this piece, my dear.. thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful words here… I really appreciate it..
xoxo