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Absorbing, Breezy, Delicate, Love, One Shoot Sunday, Poetry Potluck, Relationships, Soft, Soothing, Sunday 160, Sweet, The Haiku Challenge, Warm
Captured by Sean McCormick
Image by SiS
like zephyrs that spill
moist kisses of sweet Spring
soaked by porous walls
like leaves that rustle
in the midst of amber Fall
tasted by blind eyes
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Posted for:
One Shoot Sunday (where pictures talk…)
Sunday 160 (for stories in 160 characters or less…hosted by Monkey Man )
Poetry Potluck (a melting pot of thematic goodies… hosted by Aleza and moi!)
& The Haiku Challenge (a Haiku a day, hosted by our Someone is Special)
Click, read…and enjoy!!!! 🙂
How I write, is mine...How you read, is yours 
Now that is impressive combining a 160 to also fit 2 other challenges, including haiku. As for the poem, nice mixing of senses and seasons within the two stanzas. Thanks for playing along today, Kavita 🙂
hahah.. I think I went overboard here, Adam… but in my warped mind, I saw how this poem fit in for Sean’s amazing picture and for the other memes.. So I just couldn’t stop myself from putting it up for the One Shoot Challenge 🙂
Glad you liked how I did it, AD… thanks for the encouragement, my friend…
xoxox
This is really good, Kavita. I love the pictures too, especially the one by Sean McCormick. Very nice image.
Happy Valentine’s Day to you!
Yaaayyyy.. thanks a ton, Cheryl!! SO happy to see that you liked the pix-poem combination!! It was kinda tough combining it all and still trying to make sense… so seeing you appreciate it all made me very very nice about it!
Thanks again…
And a lovely Valentine’s Day to you too!!!
Wow–what use of beautiful imagery.
Woohooooo …thank you, Angela!! How sweet of you to say that!!!
love swims,
wow, love this line.
rocking 160.
Cheers,
Thanks for linking to potluck,
A++
Aww…thanks, Jingle!! I liked that punch line too… heheh… made me feel very nice after writing it…
So happy you appreciate it, my friend…
Great Sunday 160. Thanks for playing along and mixing it in with your poetry.
Aww.. thanks, MM!! NOT playing your Sunday 160 somehow makes me feel as if my Sunday is kinda incomplete!
Thanks for having me there, my friend..
Im always suprised by your poems.
Good stuff!
Aww… thanks, Evelyn! Your saying this really means a great deal to me!
Nice offering, these images wouldn’t normally go together but the words between them weave the tapestry together so well. Thanks for sharing this, the power off these words are fantastic, Kav!
Yaaaaaaaaahhooo!! I am so happy you said what you just said, Leif!! Yes, it was quite a challenge “combining” the 2 images… but in the end, I was kinda happy with what I had come up with! And seeing your comment here made me feel even better!!
THANK YOU SO MUCH, my friend!!!!
Beautiful! So very lovely!
Gee.. thank you, my dear Nicole… SO GLAD you liked this teensy one 🙂
This floats like a dream..just lovely!
Aww.. Lyn.. now you are making me soar with your comments… on the 9th cloud already! 🙂 Thank youuuu!
“like leaves that rustle
in the midst of amber Fall
tasted by blind eye”
…so beautifully written.
Ooohhh.. thanks a heap, David!!
I had to read this out loud! It feels delectable on the tongue. thank you for your kind words about my recent submission. The best part of that poem is that my sister is alive and well many years later.
OH WOWW!! It’s SO GOOD to hear that, Lisa!! May your sister enjoy a beautiful and loooong life…. and may the two of you make and share many more memories together!
And thank you for your utterly sweet words for my poem… hehehe… seeing the good thing about your sister makes me DOUBLY happy about this comment, my dear….
Many hugs to you!!
Love the imagery. I know it ruins the haiku but if you take out the two “likes,” it becomes a much more powerful poem, I think. (Just a thought).
Yea… so true, CJ… and I really appreciate your feedback! Thanks a ton, my friend…
Will keep the two ‘likes’ for now… esp. cuz I am linking in this poem as part of a Haiku challenge too 🙂 But I will def. bear in mind your words about the effects, for the next time…
Thanks again, my friend…
I love it! It’s a great poem to read in a Hallmark Valentine’s Day card. Here’s mine http://thelunaticsdiary.blogspot.com/2011/02/amoracounterproducterine.html
I also have a twitter if you want to follow me, MsMatsui
Oh maaaaaaaaaannn!! Now that’s quite a compliment!! I am flattered!! Thank you so much for your kind words SM… geee… (blushing)
And thanks for the link to your poem!! Will be there in a jiffy! 🙂
Love swims that is hot. Nice xo
heheheh…. thanks, Louise… and HOT is good!! 😉
Interesting take on the visual prompt…always fun to see the different perspectives.
you bet, Charles!! So far, the few that I’ve read in response to this prompt, are each different from the other!! And it’s just amazing!! 🙂
Hope you liked this one..
This knocked me on my butt!
hahahaha.. and i really wonder why, Tim! 😉
(knock knock)
I love “love swims” though I get an image of a Spring with too much run-off.
hehehe… if Spring has too much of a run-off, then i’s Fall anyway 🙂
Glad you liked this swimming love, AA…
xoxox
Love swims and we all follow in the water with it … Lovely words Kavita!
And I am swimming in your comments, dearie 🙂 thankooo
Loved it! Love swims and in your poem, love also rocks! Thanks for sharing.
heheheh.. love DOES rock!! 😀 Thanks for your awesome comment, Dan.. I really appreciate it!
Stunning!!!!! This is beautiful.. love swims..and the true love that is.. keeps on swimming.. never bothers if it will reach the shores..
so true, Ramesh… I really like how you completed my sentence in the poem… thank you!!! Yes, true love doesn’t care about the shores.. it just swims on… happily…
thank you for your sweet words here, my friend..
The last lines of each haiku drew in the magic of its beginning! Nice!
OH wow, Paulo… what you just said here made me BEAM!! It made me feel like I have finally managed get some haiku right! To get it’s essence right is not always easy… and so today, as I was writing these, I was only hoping that I do justice to this beautiful form…
And your comment here really made my day!! Thank you ever so much, my friend!!!
Amber Fall… simply love it.
Woohoo! Thanks, Sam 🙂 The idea appealed to me too as I was writing it…
thank you for sharing kavi.. happy valentines.. here’s mine.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/05/11/happily-tied/
thank you, my dear friend!!!
xxx
Stunning jewels I would say! Although all has been already said.. 🙂
I like the romantic feel- the twist is actually dreamy.. 😀
Beautiful one- wishing you a very nice friendship day 😉
xoxox
Don’t you get all twisted into the complexity of love, Liv.. just swim along… and cry out for the lifesaver too 😉
love the image of the amber fall…love swims and makes us sweim too. HVD babe!
Aww…thankoo, darling!! Swim in that love, will ya… just don;t drown 🙂
this is so ethereally beautiful!
Oh wowwwwwwwww.. and your comment made me drool over it, Liliana.. thank youuuuuuu
awww…wow! Loved the way u crafted it…so gentle yet impacting words…crisp and beautiful!
Oh..thank you so much for the lovely words, Sarah..
so much said and pictures drawn in the mind, helped of course by the lovely illustrations you provided…Wonderful, just wonderful. Kavita.. Love Swims indeed…I try to float, 😉
xPenx
hehehhe.. me too,Pen.. and I’m still floating.. 😀
Glad you enjoyed this one, my dear friend…. thanks for the wonderfully sweet words…
Dear Kavita
I enjoyed it very much.. specially the first one… in all total, you could manage to satisfy every one I guess… with your very creative synthesizing..
Thanks for sharing…
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/01/whispers-emptiness-and-soul.html
Ohh… thanks, Shashi.. I am glad you enjoyed this piece so much….
NICE ONE HERE, I ADORE THIS
Gee.. thank you so much, my friend…
like like like..actually more much more than like. Just loved the first para and the last line of the second.
Wooohooo!! Thank you so much, budhaaah…this comment made me smile, and feel really good! 🙂
I especially love the closing line. Beautiful.
(sigh)..thanks a ton, Julie dear..
Kavita,
I love reading this poem out loud. It is delectable!
JP
http://tasithoughts.wordpress.com/2011/02/14/yet-there-can-still-be-love/
Awww…. and I LOVED “hearing” that, JP! Thank you soooooooooo much for this wonderful comment!
Softly rustling Haiku’s creating great imageries!!
🙂 Thank yu so much, Nandini…
You always come up was such pure, traditional haikus. A treat to read.
Aaah…now that’s quite a compliment, Mike.. thank you ever so much!
Love Swims… Lovely!
And you too swim on in it, my friend … 🙂 And Enjoyyyyyy
😀
Very cool–a mix of memes producing a surprisingly clear poem with a delicate, ethereal message–love the last lines.
hehehe…a surprise it was to me too! 🙂 And I too kinda liked the way it turned out… Glad you did too, Joy.. thank you so much!!
thats a beautiful write.
brilliant.
Woohooo!! Thanks a ton, Raji dear… 🙂
xoxoxoox
Hi Kavita, I love these Haikus and thank you for hosting Poetry Potluck… Happy Valentine’s Day with love and joy…
Thank you so much, dearest Heartspell…. you are one of the sweetest blogging friends I have!!
xoxoxoxo
This is a delicious grasp of love.
Slurrppp! 🙂 Thanks a ton, Melissa! 😀
Good use of imagery, solid work.
Oh…gee.. thanks a bunch, Steve!!
I like your imagery. Do you have any thing about love with summer and winter too? I could see 4 stanzas with all the seasons.
I wish I weren’t restricted by the character limit, Mary…else I would’ve written on Summer/Winter too 🙂
But then on second thought, Fall/Spring are much more subtle and gentle as compared to Summer/Winter.. hehhee
Glad you enjoyed this one, my dear… and thanks a bunch for your sweet comments 🙂
How clever you managed to include a 160 and haiku together, Kavita–so creative. Your poem made me think that love is all pervasive in all ways possible. Thank you!
hehe.. you know what! I think it’s my laziness and my desire to wanna participate in these 4 memes that got these words/lines out of me… and I am so glad you liked them, B… thank you for your kind words of appreciation and encouragement! It’s INVALUABLE to me!!
xoxox
That last line is great. And cleverly done all round.
Teehee.. thank you, AN! Yaaayyyyy!!! 😀
This is just a taste of creative genius, my friend. Combining the prompts, the perfect similes and metaphor. Just perfect.
Woohoo!! Such fine and appreciative words coming from you mean a great deal to me, Victoria… you are very kind.. thanks ever so much, my dear friend!!
a sweet and vivid piece Kavita. Bravo dear!
Aww..thankoo so much, sweetie!! You are too kind and encouraging!! Bless ya!
And a very happy V day to you!!
(hugs and ❤ ❤ <3)
Happy V-day Kavita.
A beautifully romantic piece.
Aww…thankoo, Pam!! So glad you liked this little piece..
a LOVELY V day to you toooo!!! ❤ ❤
brilliant! ♥
eee…thankoooo, Dani!!
Kavita, how well you combined three challenges. You have done – if I might say it – swimingly.
I love it. Happy Potluck!
Hugs!
teeheehee.. now that’s a new word there, Jamie!! And me loveys it!! Thankoooo! 🙂
Veeeerrryyyy happy you liked this teensy piece for V Day, my dear…
Many hugs!!!
Ah “swimingly” … I think you’ll find the British use it. Glad you like it.
Oohh.. thanks for that tidbit, Jamie… I didn’t know that the usage of the word is very British!! Made me smile wide… to think that I wrote in a particular “style”,, heheh 😀 [still beaming!!]
xoxox
lovely 🙂
Gee..thanks, Harshika..
Nice One … and Sure you can come to have tea anytime 🙂
Gaurang
hahaha…thanks a ton, Gaurang! 🙂
ah ! perfect potluck !! loved it immensly 🙂
Weee…thanks a ton, Nimue dear!!! 😀
very good work…i superlike 🙂
Wowwwiieezz!! Thanks you, Sumit!! 😀
hmmmm…moist kisses of sweet Spring
soaked by porous walls…. love it…
hahahaha… i knew it would appeal to the romantic in you, Claudia! And I was right too! 😀
This is very deep K. A lot of strong emotion welled up in such a short little piece.
I guess love is such! 🙂 What say, my friend?
Well done! Clever!
Gee.. thanks a ton, Anthony!
“divine”, I welcome you to the Challenge officially.. Have a great challenge..
Someone is Special
Aww.. thanks, SiS.. I am flattered…honestly!!!
The simplest poems are sometimes the best. Great job.
Aww… thank you so much, Fyodor… it was very sweet of you to say that..
That was beautiful, and I love the last line, ‘love swims’ sometimes it just floats by, and other times it’s a struggle to swim through the roaring waves…
You can say that again Gigi!!! Sometimes, it’s a walk in the park, and sometimes, a grim promenade indeed…
Glad you liked this teensy poem, my dear.. thanks for the kind words..
Hi Kavita,
This is a beautiful poem. It is my week to chose the poem of the week, and I am posting your poem. It rises to the top. Solid writing. I hope it is okay with you.
Bill
Oh… it’s more than okay with me, Bill… 🙂 Thank you so much for the kind words of appreciation and the honor you are giving me here… it really means a great deal to me…
Once again, my sincerest thanks…
Congratulations ! This was a good choice for Poem of the week. There were so many really really excellent poems but yours captures ones heart. xo
Whoaa!! Thank you SO MUCH, Louise… That’s really a HUGE compliment… gee… I just don’t know what to say!!!
Once again.. A BIG THANK YOU from me for this honor…
I am very happy this poem appealed so much to you…
xoxox
This is really beautiful write, Kavita… love it 🙂
thank you so much, dear friend..
Very good choice for poem of the week! Congratulations! Keep them coming!
Oooohhh.. thankooz, Blaga… I am feeling so proud and humbled at the same time…
Many hugs to you, dearie… this appreciation from you means a great deal to me!!!
xoxoxo