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Beautiful, Eyelashes, Love, Love affair, One Shot Wednesday, One Stop Poetry, Romantic, Snow crystals, Snowflake, Sudden, Winter
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T’was just another eve
A shadowy mesh grew on this sieve
The sun now eased its glow
And it soon began to snow
Then on a cobblestone street
As I walked my lazy feet…
With your platinum shine
Oh so crystalline
You drifted up to me
Just so I could see
You glided on my lash
Swung, then made a dash
And pecked me on my nose
I turned an icy rose
As if to say I love you
A soft kiss to me you blew
Very soon my heart you felt
In its warmth, you had to melt
And in the blink of an eye
I watched you dissolve and drip by
But your spirit still stays alive
And in it, I hope to dive
This evening that made me heave
Was certainly not just another eve
**Posted for One Shot Wednesday (Week 29)… For some phenomenal poetry, you’ve GOTTA visit them!! **
***I would also like to take this opportunity to announce that one of my short poems (Manic) has been featured in the January 2011 issue of Four and Twenty Poetry.. Yaaayyy!! I am very excited about this, and I would LOVE for you to visit the site (and open the pdf file and read my poem :))! Thanks for your love and support… I truly appreciate it!! ***
How I write, is mine...How you read, is yours 
this poem is not just another poem.
Liking how you play with my head by the way you use your imagery.
Great!
Aww.. how kind of you to say that, gracefulglider… thankoooooo!!! 😀
xoxox
Love the flirtatious tone of the poem…and how you create the scene.
heheh.. the walk in the snow was so inspiring that I simply HAD TO write this one, Charles… thanks for your sweet words here….really appreciate it! 🙂
congrats for “manic” and this was as lovely as your words are always are ! Totally impressive !
Aww..thank you so much for the kind wishes and words of appreciation, Nimue!!! I am so glad you liked this snowy piece…
xoxox
Strong emotion in this. Beautifully crafted.
Gee.. thanks a ton, Anthony.. I really appreciate your kind words here..
no not another eve at all…dive in deep that spirit…nice one shot kavita
Absolutely, Bri! 🙂 Swimming in that spirit now.. heheh
Love the relationship between the warmth and ice 🙂 and the lingering memory;-
“And in the blink of an eye
I watched you dissolve and drip by
But your spirit still stays alive
And in it, I hope to dive…….”
lovely!
You bet, Lynda… the mingling of snow and warmth is quite magical, and so very inspiring too!
I’m very glad you enjoyed this piece, my friend… yaaaaaaayy!!
The playfulness of the lines really come across in the flow. Excellent as always, my friend. Walks in the snow are inspiring. So glad you acted on your inclination to write this one! cheers 🙂
Hehehe…thank you for the appreciation, Adam… Really, that walk was so awesome, that I simply HAD to write something about it! I almost had a love affair with a snowflake, with my hubby walking RIGHT BESIDE me.. 🙂
Enticing and seductive 😉
Ooohh… and I take that as a compliment, Shan…thankooooooooo 🙂
Congratulations!
Yaayyy..thanks a bunch, Kelli!!!
Nice snow job! Okay, it’s a good use of metaphor as well, with some pretty neat lines, liked “a shadowy mesh grew on this sieve” in particular.
hahaha…that comment was corny and cool, joy!! 🙂 LOVED it!!!! Thanks for the kind words of appreciation though… means a great deal to me!!!
Lovely winter poem full of kick and spirit and playfulness..like having a snowball fight or sledding down a hill. Good fun. Thanks, Gay @beachanny. (We shared a word this week..made me smile…”crystalline”.
hehe… thanks, Gay! As for sharing ‘crystalline’, well…guess what?! Great minds think alike.. 😉
So glad you liked and enjoyed this one, my dear.. thank you once again….
xoxox
There’s a romantic quality to this poem that I really love!
Awww.. thanks a bunch, Nicole… me loves romance in the air too… 🙂
Congrats on the poem over at Four and Twenty. Perhaps I will go take a peek now… Happy One Shot!
Wooohooo.. Thanks, girl!!! 😀
I love a good rhythmic poem and you’ve got me smiling…love it.
Awww…thanks a heap, Reggie!!
xoxoox
Kavita,
this is the second snowflake poem in a row I’ve read. I love this. Your whimsical description made me feel like I was riding on the snowflake like a magic carpet, I could picture the whole scene perfectly in my mind and it was a joyous ride!
Sheila
That’s LOVELY, Sheila… I am so happy you enjoyed this poem soooo much…yaaaayyy!!! Thanks for the sweetest words, girlie…
xxxx
A kiss from snow, what a lovely image. Your poem is so soothing.
gee.. thanks, Myrna… very sweet of you to say that..
oh my gosh, I almost forgot – Congratulations on your recent publication!!! Awesome! 🙂
Aww…than you so much, Sheila!! 😀 xoxoxo
great job done here, a lovely poem
Gee.. thanks, Kodjo.. very sweet of you to say that..
Hm, a playful farewell to a lover, or to our often less-than-favorite season, Winter. I’ll admit, for some reason I had a flashback to “Frosty the Snowman” while reading it, but I know my mind’s a strange place, so pay no heed to that. Great one for this time of year at any rate. And congratulations on the feature! That’s terrific. You certainly deserve it.
Thanks for all the wonderfully encouraging words, Chris! You are simply awesome, my friend!
As for your mind being a “strange” place, trust me, mine’s kinda like that too… heehee… so I totally get what you’re sayin’.. 🙂
(hugs)
Enjoyed the poem a lot, like a little sweet love affair! 😀 The imagery you’ve used is superb girl!
Those snow flakes work wonders for my imagination I suppose… no wonder I love winter! teehee…
Glad you liked this one, DP… 🙂
Oh and congratulations for having your poem published! Yay! 😀
Woohooo.. Thanks a ton!!! 😀
such a passionate portrait of a snow. Love the image too!
Yaaaayyyy… glad you enjoyed ti, Laura.. thank you!!! 🙂
Words to swoon by! How could a man resist? Wonderful write, Kavita!
Now now Eric… I am flattered!! (blushing) 🙂
Wonderful, as always!
Gee…thank you so much, my dear friend.. it’s so nice to see you here !
I am wordless Kavita.. Certainly nto just another eve for sure..
Congrats for getting featured.. Enjoy..
Someone is Special
Ohhh…thank you for EVERYTHING, my dear friend SiS!!!
Ode to a snowman only timeless. Wistful, playful and still very serious. Lovely.
Aww…. I LOVE snow! 🙂 Glad you liked this poem, Raven.. thanks!!!
And in the blink of an eye
I watched you dissolve and drip by
But your spirit still stays alive
And in it, I hope to dive
The entire poem is beautiful, but I’m most drawn to the lines above. Was it really the snow you wanted to dive into? I’m thinking that the snow walk was so inspirational you couldn’t wait to get home and dive into writing about it! :o)
Congrats on getting published! I’m heading over to check out your pdf next. :o)
Gurrrrrrrrllll… you just made me giggle and go pink! 🙂
You are soo right! I enjoyed so much in the snow… and then I just couldn’t wait to get home to write about how I felt during that walk… you read me right, Rache! LOVIEEEZZ!!! And Thankooozzzz
I like the way this can be a snowflake and someone you are passionate about.
hheheh.. you thought right, Ness!! I had a snowflake in mind when I wrote this 🙂 … and it seemed to inspire me a lot!! 🙂
Lovely the rhyme and flow leaves one with the feeling of a beautiful tomorrow…bkm
thank you, bkm.. really appreciate your kind words here…
It’s always a treat to read your beautiful work!!! You are truly talented! This was beyond amazing!
Oooohhh.. I am thoroughly flattered, girl! REALLY!!! And honored too!! THANK YOUUUUU!!! Mwaahhhzz!
That long verse in the middle.
Brilliant.
I like how you used cold words and came out with a very warm message.
Awww… the poet is YOU, Richard! You read so beautifully into this simple poem.. and I cannot thank you enough for that, my friend…
xxx
Love all the sense information you give here. Highly detailed but with a lovely flow. Congrats on getting in Four and Twenty!!
Thank you thank you thank you soooo much for everything that you just said, Mark!!
xoxox
It seems llike everything I read of yours I have the same comment: wow, that was beautiful. Well, this one is the same – I loved the romance of each snowflake that rested on her 🙂
hahahhaha…as long as you like what you read here, I am fine, Janna! 🙂 Thank youuuuuuu
xoxoxoox
I can actually “see” you in my mind saying these words to Srini!!! Knowing how passionate you are about him…this one makes me smile!! One day I’ll find someone and feel exactly the same!! Just so enjoyed it girlfriend. Big hugs xoxoxoxo
hehehehe…you are such a darling romantic, Mandie!! And I totally love you for that!! 🙂
Thank you everything, dearie friend….
Oh~! I love winter poetry~ I see you do, too. It’s addictive for some reason. This was a lovely romp in the snow…something we don’t have a lot of here in the Deep South…but when we do, it’s enchanting…as was your poem.
Lady Nyo
Yaaaaaaaahhooo!! At long last, I found someone that enjoys winter poetry like me!! I can kiss you just for saying that, Lady Nyo… THANK YOUUUUU!!!
I am terribly happy that you liked this one so much!! 😀
This is beautiful Kavita. Romantic and very well written. 🙂
*sigh*… so glad you enjoyed the read/ride, River… thank youu!!!
In this heart it had to melt….. Bravo… its like a scene stealer….. Good one
journey of a thousand loves.
cheers!!!
Aww… thanks, buddy! Glad you enjoyed it!
Dear Kavita
Beautiful and soft… some times I wonder how do you find words to rhyme to most of your emotions.. I enjoyed it.
Thanks for sharing..
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
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Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
I guess they just come to me, Shashi.. but I am glad you enjoy them too.. thank you so much, my friend.. 🙂
Nicely crafted and flirty, I like that Kavita.
teeheehee.. thank you so much, Pamela!! 🙂
i’ve been meaning to spend some time catching up on your blog, and i’m glad to be back 🙂 as usual, you always get it right! loved the imagery and, especially, the last two lines,
‘This evening that made me heave
Was certainly not just another eve’
well done 🙂
Gee.. no worries at all, Amz…
I am glad you found time to stop by here.. thankooooo so much!!
xoxoxo
Congratulation, Kavita, on Four & Twenty. Popped by. Lovely edition. Read the works incuding again your Manic, which I enjoyed.
Thanks for snowing us so beautifully … appreciated the metaphor, the juxtaposition of warmth and cold. A rather coquettish poem, eh? Well done…
Eeeeeeee…thank you so much, Jamie… It’s always a joy to read your comments, my dear… they REALLY complete my day!!
Lots of snowy hugs coming your way, dear… 🙂
‘Tis rare to find a true poet’s blog. Also nice to find one with a poet not afraid of traditional rhyme, and still exploratory in its use. Welcome to my bookmark.
Mike Patrick
http://thepoetsquill.wordpress.com/
Whoooaa!! Thank YOU, Mike!! 😀