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2 worlds too different, 2 worlds too similar, Disparity between life and dreams, Dreamland, Dreams, Jingle Poetry, Monday Poetry Potluck, One Shot Wednesday, One Stop Poetry, Similarity between life and dreams, Visions
Where minds escape
Into a picturesque scape
Of waterfalls and butterflies
Touching rivers and skies
And ripples of reflection
Stream into a collection
Of clouds of reality
Or vast oceans of duality
Where hearts descend
Into a treacherous bend
Unfolding into an abyss
Emitting a cry and a hiss
While constantly falling
Deaf to the voices calling
Crashing into bare trees
Succumbing to the numb freeze
Where faces change
Into forms too strange
And bodies divide
Like petals untied
And souls are fused
From flames confused
And scenes are replaced
With memories displaced
This is where I drift
When sleep gives me a lift
This is where I head
When my eyes feel like lead
**Posted for One Shot Wednesday, and for Poetry Potluck… You will find some AWESOME poetic treasures here… Please PUHHLEEZE check ’em out!**
Also, a word of thanks to Chris G. for nominating me as a Perfect Poet at Jingle’s Thursday Poets Rally… Thanks a ton, Chris!! And thank you, Jingle, for letting me be part of this superb community! Here’s my award acceptance Haiku..
words of gratitude
never quite reflect the thoughts
even so, I try…
I would like to nominate Pinklady-Bing for next week’s Perfect Poet!
amyjosprague said:
This is wonderful. On one hand it feels very classic and dreamy–Emerson-like, and then it feels very new and contemporary. Whimsically smart!
Kavita said:
Wooohoooo… Emerson-like! Now THAT is quite a compliment!!! And contemporary and smart…now those too, I like a lot!!! 🙂 Thank you so much for your kind words, Amy.. I am glad you enjoyed this poem…
Have a wonderful week ahead!
xoxox
slpmartin said:
Such an array of surrealistic images flowing in this poem to confront the senses….wow!
Kavita said:
and with those words, you just defined a dream all too perfectly, my dear Charles!!! 🙂
Thank youuuu for your kind words of appreciation… they are invaluable to me!
Diane T said:
Kavita, I like the lines when bodies divide then petals
divide…
I just love those lines!
Kavita said:
Yaaayyy.. I too loved the outcome when I wrote these lines, Diane.. thank you so much for the appreciation… I am excited you liked this one!!!
mstevensson said:
I really enjoyed the duality of your words. Everything was in contrast, made for a very vivid read 🙂
Kavita said:
hahaha… glad you saw it that way, Mark… the 1st stanza was a happy dream, the 2nd, a nightmare, and the 3rd, just another meaning stream of floating pictures… such is the variation a dream can give us… sometimes here, sometimes there, and sometimes neither here nor there 🙂
Thanks for your invaluable comments, my friend.. YOU ROCK!!!!
Jingle said:
Kavita,
you are the coolest fairy poet in the whole planet, it is a honor to have you be part of the community, it is a pleasure to read you and have you read us…
perfect acceptance post.
thanks for the honorable mention of our shared community.
you rock, girl!
Happy Tuesday!
Kavita said:
Awww… Jingle, now you are really making me blush, my dear..
I should be the one saying thanks to you.. FOR EVERYTHING!!! And I do too… 🙂
Love you loads, dear friend.. and best wishes and a lovely Tuesday to you as well…
xoxoxox
Jingle said:
super magnificent dream poem. love the beautiful imagery….keep writing, keep sharing…
🙂
😉
😉
skillfully done…
Happy Potluck!
A++
Kavita said:
heheheh.. thank you thank you thank you soooo much, Jingle!! I feel like a little child, getting good grades in school.. and boyyy!! That’s an awesome feeling!!
LeiffyV said:
Now this is a nice piece! I can totally see where you are coming from on this, nothing like the between worlds of dream and reality to make things interesting! Thanks for sharing and as always, you kind words and support!
Kavita said:
You said it, Leiffy! You are transported into a world which is not quite like anything you have ever lived in! I suppose that’s the beauty of a dream… I am really glad you read this poem the way I wrote it.. cuz when that happens, I feel most happy!
Have a superb week ahead, L.. xoxox
dustus said:
There’s a fierce flow to the tone that I absolutely love. “Crashing into bare trees / Succumbing to the numb freeze” Powerful short lines with images and feeling. Many lines like those throughout the poem that make me think this may be one of your best ones stylistically. Deep lines and title too. Cheers
Kavita said:
Yaaayyy!! With this comment, you have given my wings the ability to soar up to cloud 9, Adam!! Thank you so much for your generous praise and appreciation for this poem… Oh gosh.. you have no idea how much I am BEAMING right now!! As for those 2 lines that you have mentioned here, they actually spurred from one of those dreams I keep getting .. of falling from the sky, and into trees, and thudding down at last! Ofcourse, the thud wakes me up in reality!! 🙂 Thankfully!!!
Glad you liked this piece (and the title) so much, Mr. Dustus!! I usually put a lot of thought into the title.. and I did for this one too! 🙂
Such comments from someone like you, are an honor to receive!!! Thanks once again..
Life: Between the lines said:
AWESOME 🙂
I really enjoyed this flow right there
“Stream into a collection
Of clouds of reality
Or vast oceans of duality”
sweet 🙂
Thanks for the visit as well
Kavita said:
Ohh.. thank you so much, Lynnaima.. huraaayyyy!! I am so happy you enjoyed this poem..
Yup, those lines were super dreamy.. but then, that’s EXACTLY how dreams are (or at least that’s how I perceive them to be :))!
Luv ya loads, my friend.. Take care..
xoxo
moondustwriter said:
Mind, hearts, faces this fantasy is too hard to look at clearly
Nice One Shot Kavita
you know how to craft a poem my dear
Moonie Smiles
Kavita said:
Oh.. thank you, my dear Moon… you are too kind…
Glad you liked this dreamy one…
Have a lovely weekend! xoxoxo 🙂
poemblaze said:
I love the sound of this poem, all the assonance and consonance going on.
Kavita said:
That was my idea, Poemblaze… contrasting images all over the place! Well..that’s how dreams are anyway 🙂 Don’t you think?!
Glad you enjoyed the read, my friend.. thanks a bunch for your appreciation and encouragement… it means a great deal to me!!
xoxo
Patti said:
I really like this, Kavita. There is such a surreal feel to this place is your dream world. I espcially like the images in the first stanza in contrast to those in the second.
Kavita said:
hehehe… oh yea, Patti… happy images always seem to strike a chord..don’t they?! 🙂 Glad you enjoyed this one, dear..
Thanks for your kind words of appreciation and encouragement, my friend… I really value it a lot!!
Have a beautiful (dreamy) weekend, Patti!! (love and hugs)
Teresa said:
What a great poem describing your dreamland! Mine is here. http://razzamadazzle.wordpress.com/2010/12/07/december/
Kavita said:
Aww…thanks a bunch, Teresa… I suppose dreams have always, and will always continue to intrigue me… Glad you enjoyed it, my friend… xoxox
Chris G. said:
You’ve really captured the essence of the dreamscape in this one – surreal and ethereal and so very vivid in image and in tone. Strong flow that heightens the delivery of both the images and the descriptions. A real beauty you’ve got here, Kavita!
Kavita said:
Aww…now now Chris.. you are really making me blush with all that praise… gee… thank you so much! I am flattered… really!
I suppose, dreamscapes inspire us to a level even WE didn’t know we were capable of! Don’t you think so ?
Anyway, I am glad you enjoyed this wordy picture, my friend…
Keep smiling… and dream on..
Happy Weekend! 🙂
buttercup600 said:
Wow, what a great poem girlfriend!. You don’t run into good ones like this very often….in my mind one of your better ones (well…all your poem’s outstanding imho) Loved the word play and can see you have placed a lot of thought into this!! Good to read you again Kavz…I am so rusted…been sooooo long!!! Biggest hugs always!!! Mwahzzzz xx
Kavita said:
Gee… Mandy, I am going pink! First of all, it’s so good to see you are getting back to your poetic self… yaaaaaaaaaayyyy
And secondly, your comments here mean a GREAT DEAL to me! Cuz I soo look up to your awesome writing, my dear… the richness in your words is quite a treasure! So all these words of appreciation coming from you is like WOW to me!!
Thanks a ton, lady… I am glad you enjoyed this dreamy world here… LOVE YAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!
xxxxxx
June_Butterfly said:
Now this one truly captivates.Agree with Adam,this one’s truly one of your best.
The picture mesmerized me.As your words did.
Brilliant one shot!
Kavita said:
Yaaayyy!! Thank you so much, June dear… you are very kind, and super generous with your words of appreciation for my work… And it really means a great deal to me!!
I am soooo happy you liked this dreamy world of mine so much!! Thanks once again….
🙂 Have a fabulous weekend!
xoxooxoxox
River said:
A great job! I really liked the way you showed us the world between dream and reality. 🙂
Kavita said:
Aww… thanks a bunch, River dear… you are too sweet!
Glad you you enjoyed this dreamy ride… 🙂
Have a fun and carefree weekend! xoxoxox
A.B. Thomas said:
The only thing I can say is that this write kicks major butt! Kudos!
Kavita said:
WOOHOOOOO!!! Thank you so much, Anthony!! And that comment jostled the hell outta me!! Loved it!!!! 😀
budhaaah said:
You just manage to pull one out and say;;umm what was that..something just topuched me 🙂
Kavita said:
Gee.. thank you so much, Budhaaah.. you are very sweet….
I am so glad you liked this one so much…
Much love to you, my friend..
budhaaah said:
Uhh..I meant ‘touched me’ 🙂
Kavita said:
heheh.. gotcha! 🙂
gospelwriter said:
Serenity, treachery, mystery, a mishmash of scenes and emotions – must be the world of dreams. Well done, Kav, well done. BTW, awesome image too!
Kavita said:
Aww… you guessed right, sweetie!! This HAS to be the world of dreams 🙂
Glad you enjoyed this ride, sweetie!
Love ya!
wiserskydiver said:
fast paced rhymes… it was like a rollercoaster ride reading this… amzing
Cheers!!!
Kavita said:
Thanks a bunch, buddy! Ride on!! 🙂
theonlycin said:
Nice contrasts, Kavita 🙂
Kavita said:
Thank, my dear 🙂 That’s how dreams are too.. no?!
Sayandeep Kundu said:
Transcending the barrier of senses…otherworldly stuff….It appears to be a fruit of the super-conscious beyond the subconscious and the conscious….Terrific sublime piece of work..
Regards~ Sayandeep
Kavita said:
Gee..thanks for the shower of gracious comments here, Sayan.. it was very sweet of you!
Glad you enjoyed this dreamy ride, buddy.. 🙂
Sayandeep Kundu said:
and probably one of your best till date..
Kavita said:
Awww…THANKSSSS!!! A TON!!
xoxo
Sumit Sarkar said:
Fantastic, fabulous poem…
and the picture goes with your poem so well… 🙂
Congratz for the award…nice haiku too 🙂
Kavita said:
Ohhh… thank you for everything, Sumit… Glad you enjoyed the poem-picture combo 🙂 I kinda search and search for pix till I find the “right” one.. I wish I could do them myself! wheeewww
🙂
Have a great weekend, my friend!
Sayandeep Kundu said:
And I see that piercing observations on the universal conflicts here..
“Where faces change
Into forms too strange
And bodies divide
Like petals untied
And souls are fused”
Fascinating work…and probably a vivid reflection of soul, intelligently stylized in poetic conundrum…
I really love this piece..Kudos..
Kavita said:
Glad you noticed, Sayan… I was actually hoping you did! And am really happy you liked this piece so much!! Thanks again, my friend..
Sayandeep Kundu said:
err observation*
Kavita said:
gotcha! 🙂
gautami tripathy said:
Whimsical, dreamy and….magical….
destined wanderings
Kavita said:
🙂 Thanks, G… glad you liked this one..
Belinda said:
Love your style! Every word fits so well. Excellent rhythm and rhyme and wholly relatable sentiments make this a pleasure to read and reflect upon.
Kavita said:
Geee.. I feel flattered, Belinda!! Thanks a ton for your kind words and insights here.. I really appreciate it…
Laura Hegfield said:
slipping in between….sometimes peace and sometimes adventure…like life with eyes open, and about the same amount of control!
Beautifully woven words.
Kavita said:
Gee.. thanks for your kind words of appreciation and insights, Laura…
SenderUpWords said:
Nice write here Kavita. Great one shot. Love and Light, Sender
Kavita said:
Thank you so much, Sender.. I really appreciate your kind words here…
kaykuala said:
the flow is smooth and easy. I like it.
Kavita said:
Thanks a ton, Kaykuala!!! Am so glad you enjoyed this one..
Emmanuel Ibok said:
Wonderful write, Kavita…wonderful! Sleep giving you a lift is a thought out of this world…nice.
Cheers!
Kavita said:
Aww..thanks, LordE!! 🙂 Sleep is so blissful…but even better are good dreams! 🙂
Glad you enjoyed this dreamy ride, my friend…
xoxo
Emmanuel Ibok said:
…and the Haiku was superb…I think one of the best Haiku I’ve come across..simple but sweet.
Cheers!
Kavita said:
yaaaayy… thankoo, Em!! Simplicity is the name of the game! 🙂
Myrna said:
This was beautifully dreamy. I love the picture too. Your words have much depth and the poem was like a lullaby.
Kavita said:
Gee.. thank you so much for the kind and appreciate words here, Myrna.. it was most sweet of you!
Am very happy you enjoyed this poem so much…
xoxoxo
liv2write2day said:
Beautiful flow and rhyme…very other-worldly. Enjoyed it.
Kavita said:
Aw.. that’s quite a compliment, Victoria.. thanks a bunch, my friend!!
xoxox
Eric said:
Boy, I sure can relate to eyes that feel like lead – that’s me every morning! (LOL!) Nice One Shot, Kavita!
Kavita said:
hahahah…same pinch, Eric! Leaden eyes in the morning, and Kavita – they go hand in hand 😉
Thanks for liking this shot, my friend.. xoxo
Claudia said:
a nice place to drift to on the wings of sleep…loved it…very dreamy
Kavita said:
hehehe.. dreams are such an awesome getaway..aren’t they, Claudia?! 🙂
Glad you enjoyed this one, sweetie… thanks fro your kind words here..
xoxox
~L said:
Beautiful! Such talent…. I keep reading thinking and wondering whats bhind the words:) …. I really like this one a lot:)
Kavita said:
oooohhh… that’s quite a compliment, sweetie! Thanks a bunch!! You are too kind…
I guess I live in my dreams so much that I write about them all over the place… sometimes, its’s tough to differentiate between reality and surreality 🙂
fiveloaf said:
great write kavita- you are a wonderful rhymer.. mine’s here- http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/01/15/head/
Kavita said:
hehehe…thank you so much, FL!! You are too kind…
deadpoet88 said:
Super WOW! What a poem girl, it made me feel like I was taken to another world! Simply amazing!
Loved these lines especially:
“Where hearts descend
Into a treacherous bend
Unfolding into an abyss
Emitting a cry and a hiss
While constantly falling
Deaf to the voices calling
Crashing into bare trees
Succumbing to the numb freeze”
Too good Kavs!
Kavita said:
Wowwiieess… seeing such a “felt” comment from you made me feel SUPER special, DP! I swear I am beaming right now!
Thanks a ton, sweet friend…. by the way, we need to do a poem in 2011 now! 🙂 Cannot wait!!!
xoxox
Tina said:
Oh beautiful. Amazing that you could get all that imagery AND rhyme. Quite the write! And is it just me, or is it snowing?
Kavita said:
snow snow everywhere, Tina… snow is in the air… and in poems too.. 🙂 glad you enjoyed this one…
Rhyme Me a Smile said:
You deserve that perfect poet award for sure!! The dream state you describe has mystical allure. :o)
Rhyme Me a Smile
Kavita said:
Aww..thanks a bunch, my friend… I really appreciate your kind words and support!! xoxoxo
Caribbean Fool said:
“And souls are fused
From flames confused
And scenes are replaced
With memories displaced”
That is a great stanza. I liked the imagery of the poem in general, but that was by far the standout. I’m very much enjoying reading through random poems on your site. It is a good night for poetry.
crb.
Kavita said:
Oh woww!! Thanks, CRB… The fact that you are reading thru’ my poems on a lovely (I am assuming it is lovely) evening is by itself a huge compliment! 🙂
I too had really liked the way the lines had turned out… well, that’s how dreams are anyway… a mangled melange of faces, places, times, and thoughts…
Glad you enjoyed the read, my friend..
Have a GREAT evening! 🙂
Caribbean Fool said:
Anytime, I am an insomnia always looking for good poetry. I am always glad to find poets to explore. Hope your evening went well also! And thank you for the compliment, you are far too kind. We’re all poets and we all want to know somebody is reading our words and thinking about the same things we are writing about. Later gater,
crb.
Kavita said:
Aww… we poets are here to write/read and while it’s all going on, enjoy too…
Hope you are having a great year thus far, CRB…
Luke Prater said:
very nice, Kavita. I know the feeling…
Warmest Salad
Luke x
Kavita said:
Aww..thanks, Lukey…
Much appreciated!!