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Groping about in dungeons dark
Crowded by tears, I found no spark
Tornadoes swept across my face
From muck and dirt, I had to race
I wish I had my lantern here
The tunnel’s end would then seem near
I knew it hung against the air
While I just sank in deep despair
Hands clasped together, wet and cold
I felt a jut within some fold
My eyes shone at what I had found
This match had made my world go round
A tiny flame then cleared my view
The breeze now smelt so fresh and new
This tide had ebbed, my fears had gone
And Earth now faced a glowing dawn
Reflective thoughts then flowed like blood
Fire may burn, water may flood
Gravel may slide, and air may whine
Despite it all, we rise and shine
** I wrote this for Magpie Tales and Poetry Potluck… Please do check out the other amazing creative writes at both these places… There is abundant talent here!!! **
How I write, is mine...How you read, is yours 
Oh I was glad to find that shine at the end 🙂
Thanks Cin.. that shine at the end can be very helpful indeed!!! 🙂
Better to light a single candle than curse the darkness.
May your little light always burn bright.
Ohhh….thank you so much, Eric… Amen to that! 🙂 May yours too!!
And yes, it’s better to one teensy lit candle than to be engulfed in darkness and curse it! 🙂 Optimism rocks!!!
Happy weekend, my dear friend…
(hugs)
You had me drawn right into this poem…I could feel the darkness and the desperate relief of finding that match and how that made such a difference to your perception of everything. :))
Glad you liked the poem, Eaton…AND the end to it especially! Sometimes, one little match can mean the WORLD to a guy sitting in the dark for a while!
Thanks for the kind words here, my friend…. I really appreciate it..
A very Happy Weekend to you dear… .
xoxox 🙂
Reflective thoughts then flowed like blood
Fire may burn, water may flood
Gravel may slide, and air may whine
Despite it all, we rise and shine…
love the optimism in the end…
perfect rhythms and rhymes…
beautiful magpie!
Aww..thank you Jin… life’s about hope and optimism I suppose… we need to always keep that candle lit in our minds! Then everything else will seem alright…
Glad you liked the read, my friend…thanks a bunch for the sweet and encouraging words …
A very happy weekend to you, dear friend.. xoxoxoxo
lovely learning elements,
Glad to see you shine with a cool piece…
Happy Tuesday,
Happy Writing,
Happy monday Potluck!
Thanks Ji!!! Glad you liked this one…
Keep writing, and keep enjoying!!
Love and Peace… xoxoxo
Beautiful words…. but for us to ‘rise and shine’.
Nice magpie.
Oh..thank you, my friend… I am glad you liked this poem…
We could all use some light (at the end of the tunnel)… can’t we? 🙂
Thanks again..
Have a lovely week ahead!
You are one talented poet who is also a freelance commentator (made it up). Brilliant and sophisticated.
Commentator???? Now I wonder why you would call me that! 🙂
Glad you liked the poem, K… when I wrote it, the mining incident hadn’t happened yet…
Thanks for the kind words though… really appreciate it!
Have a great week ahead!
Despite it all, we rise and shine. Yes, we do–especially you with this. Great magpie–thank you!
Awww… thank you DS.. that was awfully sweet of you to say that! Glad you liked the poem so much…
Yes, we could all use some encouragement and light time and again… Thanks for giving me just that with this comment…
Much love to you…
Have a superb week ahead..
Redemption feels so good … nice Magpie.
Gee.. thanks Helen.. glad you liked it…
Redemption feels peaceful… does it not?! 🙂
Have a happy week ahead..
The resiliance of man…i love this! 🙂
Thanks Carrie… it is this resilience that takes us places… no?
Glad you liked the spirit of the poem, my friend.. thanks again..
Much love..
What a difference one tiny light can make. Lovely piece.
That one tiny light is the difference between darkness and day… don’t you think? And in more way than one..
Glad you liked this poem, Willow.. I really value your comments a lot!
Take care…
Nice Magpie! Looking forward to peeking around your site a bit.
Ohh…that’s very kind of you, Catherine.. thank you so much.. and I am glad you liked this piece..
I too hope to visit you very VERY soon!!
Take care, my friend.. . have a lovely week ..
Hi Kavita. Dream-like feel to the beginning, full of many stark images…. “and despite it all, we rise and shine” appreciate the tone of persistence at the end. cheers 🙂
Ahaa…just the word I too was looking for, Adam… persistence!
Glad you liked the poem, my friend… thank you so much for your ever so kind and encouraging words here.. I really appreciate it all…
I know I havent been visiting in a while.. ut that’s phase will end soon.. 🙂
Will see you very very soon, my friend
Take care, and have a great week ahead!
Cheers to you as well.. 🙂
Earth now faced a glowing dawn
Amazing how the tiniest flicker of light will uplift the spirit every time.
Lovely poem!
Thank you Ruth.. you are too kind…
Right now, your comment seems like that tiny flicker of hope to me…. soooo needed that! Thanks again, my sweet friend.. (many hugs) 🙂
The lines ‘I wish I had my lantern here / The tunnel’s end would then seem near’ are BRILLIANT!! I think these are some of the most beautiful lines I have ever read in a poem! Keep up the great work Kavita 🙂
Aww Mark.. you are absolutely sweet!! Thank you so much for appreciating my work, my dear dear buddy… Glad you liked these lines so much!!
Your super encouraging comments mean a great deal to me!!! Seriously!
Thanks again… (many hugs)
Excellent. Loved the lines:
My eyes shone at what I had found
This match had made my world go round
They really catch the emotion you feel when you find that one thing you need more than anything else at that moment.
You caught that emotion right on, Jhannet! Thanks a ton for the kind words!!!
I am so very happy you liked this poem and those lines so much, my dear friend…
Take care and have a wonderful week ahead.. I wl be visiting you sooon.. I promise!
xoxoxoxo
Intense, and well-wrought. The last three lines are especially lovely!
Oh..thanks a ton, Lawrence.. glad you liked the poem so much!!
I will be visiting you very soon, my friend.. please pardon my zero-visit phase :(.. had been kinda busy entertaining my inlaws 🙂
Take care, L… and see you soon! (hugs)
Rise and shine we must.
I really enjoyed reading this one!
Peace,
Gee… thank you so much, Clayton!!! Glad you liked this poem this much…
You are too kind…
And yes, I will be visiting you VERY soon, my good friend…
Have a fantastic week ahead!
just fabulous! simply superb kavita.
Oh my!! Thank you so much, Trisha!!! Glad you liked the poem so much!! Yaaaayyyy
Many hugs to you, my dear sweet friend… 😀
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Thanks Ji!! For linking me in! 🙂
Yes indeed. In spite of it all we rise and shine.
Kavita, you have certainly risen to the occasion with this poem for Magpie Tales and Poetry Potluck.
Thank you for yet another good read.
Gee..thank you Jamie.. I see you like this poem… and I am very happy you do!
Sometimes, just a little light can really work wonders to our confidence…can it not?! 🙂
Thanks for the encouragement, my dear friend.. it’s like the light we are talking about…. keeps me going!
Take care, and have a wonderful week ahead! (hugs)
This feel fresh and vivid.. good write my friend
Warmest Salad
Luke xx
Thanks Lukey!!! Your warm comments really keep me cheery in this cold foggy weather here… thank you so much! Glad you liked the poem, my friend..
This is such an impressive poem kavita
Thank you Richard… I am glad you liked it..
And I really appreciate your visits and comments… thanks a ton!!
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welcome to Rally week 30,
a most 3 poems are accepted within 7 days…
Happy Thursday!
Thanks for linking me in, Jingle… you are too kind!
your poem pours emotions!!
Great one!!
🙂
Thank you Gaby.. I am very pleased to see that you liked this poem….
I hope to visit you soon too…
Have a beautiful week ahead… 🙂
Despite all we shine.. perfect ending.. thanks for lovely verse..
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
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Gee.. thank you Shashi.. it’s very nice to know that you liked this poem so much… really, once again, thanks for the kind words here..
Have a great weekend..
killer one… totally rocks 😀
Cheers!!!
Aww..thanks you Wiser… 🙂
I loved the rhymes…and the positivity of the poem!!
The last stanza was just awesome…
Hope you’ve been doing well kavita…haven’t seen you around for quite sometime
i have been extremely busy myself but now that I’m free for the weekend, i hope to read as many poems as I can..
happy weekend 🙂
Hi Asmita.. how are you doing? I too haven’t been around in a while now… my inlaws were here.. they just left last week, and I am only trying to get back to my blogging self 🙂 Yet to get around to visiting all my favorite poets, like yourself
Anyway, thanks for coming here and for your sweet words, girl.. and I’m so glad you liked this poem so much…
You are very kind… thanks again..
Much love to you… (hugs)
Despite all, we rise and shine…love the last line…so full of hope! Sorry I’ve been so remiss in commenting… I’ve missed you and your sweet treats…Happy Weekend, Kavita! heartspell
Oh.. please don’t apologize, my dear.. I too have been missing a lot of this blogging action for the past month or so now… have had my hands full myself… pheeww 🙂
But I hope to be back very soon… and I promise to visit you at the earliest!!!
I am very happy you liked this poem so much, Heartspell… your comments sure are my fuel!! Thank you for everything…
A lovely weekend to you as well, my dear friend… (many hugs)
Hey cool! Wanna see my poems and drawings? They’re at http://thelunaticsdiary.blogspot.com
That’s awesome! I would love to, Shigune..
Thanks for stopping by my blog… I will absolutely get to yours very soon..
Have a great weekend.. 🙂
I read this piece several times, each time finding a new layer that made the final stanza, which jumped out at me on the first read, all that much stronger. Thanks for sharing!
Ohh woww… that’s quite a compliment, Julie.. Your kind comment, and your varied interpretations on this poem really make me feel very proud to have written it.. I hope you liked what you read, my dear friend..
Take care, and have a wonderful weekend..
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I posted some awards there,
feel free to claim them.
Cheers!
claim and share with 1 to 10 if you wish.
Thanks Jingle.. I really appreciation your thoughtfulness… I really do!
Shine on, Ji…
Such a great poem, thank you for sharing.
lad you liked it, Kimberly… Thank you for your kindest words here..
Have a pleasant weekend… xooxox
LOVE IT. As always Kavita, you are my refuge for wonderfully deep poetry. Makes me smile. Don’t we all feel like this at time right? And dont we all feel great when we find that little spark, that somehow can destroy all that darkness. You keep writing poetry my friend, never stop. 🙂
Ollin…. that was one of the best compliments ever!! THANK YOU, my friend!! It’s EXACTLY like that little spark you have mentioned.. I am very happy you liked this poem so much!!!
Will visit you very soon, O… And heartfelt thanks once again!!!
(many hugs)
Well done, Kavita…the elements are well represented here in a very lovely poem. Nice!
Gee..thanks for the kind words, Tracy.. Glad you liked the poem…
Your comments are much appreciated!!
Have a lovely weekend..
after we have gone through dark, the only thing left to do, it run to the light. A wonderful poem and loved how it ended- “despite it all, we rise and shine” a great line indeed! Bravo friend! XX
Thank you Tekia.. Am so happy you liked this poem so much! Yes, that little light in a dark tunnel, can indeed prove very very inspiring! 🙂
Once again, thanks for your kind words, girl..
Take care, and have a beautiful weekend!!
great piece!!! yay for poetry potlucks! thanks for sharing!
Gee…thank you, Ms. Peaches… I am super happy that you liked this poem!!
Potluck rocks indeed! 🙂 See you around soon…
(hugs)
Some awards for you..
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Happy Fall
xoxoxoxox
I already lost count of the awards you have been SHOWERING upon me, Liv….yipppeeeee …. LOVE YA for all that you do and stand for!!
many many many hugs!!!
Where are you, Kavita? I am missing your sweet joyful smile on the page….Heartspell
Ohh.. I have been away for a while now, H.. in-laws and all 🙂
But now, I am slowly trying to catch up with all the missed action…
Please bear with me, dear friend… 🙂
Take good care…
Thanks Kavita for writing a poem about breaking odds.. !! Very inspiring and doesnt everything start with one tiny flame, flicker of hope..? Looks like you are still super busy missy 🙂
Thanks for hosting us all on the Potluck platform!!
Glad you liked the poem, Rachana… It all begins with that li’l flame indeed 🙂
Yea, I have been kinda busy lately… But I hope to be back to regular blogging soon…VERY SOON!!!
Thanks for the kind words here, girlie.. and for the concern 😉
Luv ya!! Have a super awesome weekend!
Beautiful words, I came across you at grey words, thought I would have a read think this will be a nice blog to add to my roll 🙂 nice to meet you – great work 😀
Gee…that sounds great, Leah.. and it’s great to meet you as well!! Thank you so much for adding me to your blog roll… I am thrilled!
I am very pleased to see that you liked my work.. thanks once again, my friend..
Take care.. I will be visiting you very soon..
excellent as always
Gee..thank you Richard!! You are always so encouraging… How sweet of you!!
Will see you very soon, my friend.. take care..
Love this, Kavita. The pacing of this along with the tense subject matter had me speed reading it through to the end! May we all rise and shine, despite whatever rails against us! 😀
Just what I expected to read from you, Tony!! You are AWESOME!! I am so very happy you liked this piece, my good pal..
Ans thank for you for being there… you are so kind to me!! Many hugs for that!!!
And with that, may we all rise.. and SHINE! 🙂
Take care, friend.. will be seeing you soon ..
A really great an interesting poem Kavita. In some ways, it reminds me of the Chilean miners groping about in the dark…and then their fears disappearing gradually as each one was rescued…and then, despite it all, it’s finally their chance to “rise and shine”
Love you loads Kavita…miss you xx
It’s understandable that you mention the Chilean miners in reference to this poem, Chloe… but oddly enough, I had written this a few days before the incident…
Am so happy that they are all okay now… Yes, they rose and shone…
Glad you made the association, C… love you for liking this one!!
Hugs and kisses… 🙂
I enjoyed this one Kavita 🙂
Thank you,
Peace,
Laz
Whooa.. thanks Laz.. Glad you liked the poem so much..
Have a superb weekend, my friend…
Love and Peace.. 🙂
Shubho bijoyadashami (Happy Vijayadashami)! May the blessings of the Goddess shower down on you and your loved ones forever.
Oh wowwwww…thank you so much Trisha.. that was really sweet of you!
May Ma shower her choicest blessings on you as well…
Take care, and have a beautiful weekend.. xoxoox
Kavita, you leave me speechless once again! This is wonderful, there is always a light in darkness, always light at the end of a tunnel.
Also I must say, your words flow so beautifully in this piece, you really have talent with words girl! Great work!
Please post another poem soon!
Apologies again for not visiting in a while. Internet connection at home is so poor that I can never get blogs to open. At office I’m just too bogged down with work to really visit blogs.
Yo girl!! I have been a slacker myself!! So please don’t apologize for anything 🙂
As for the poem, I am really happy you like it.. Sometimes, one gets inspired by the oddest of things I suppose… and sometimes, one just writes as it comes! I guess it was the latter for me in this case.. 🙂 And so, you saying all that you did towards this poem, really means a GREAT DEAL to me!! Thanks a ton, girl…
I hope to catch you soon, sweetie.. ON YOUR BLOG! 🙂
And yes, I will write soon too… just lazing about these days.. a break I guess (after my inlaws left)… 🙂
I like that. 🙂
Nice writing!
Woohoo.. thank you Isha.. Glad you enjoyed this piece..
Happy Weekend!! 🙂
Where you at? Despite it all we rise and shine… that’s the spirit… really enjoy yr PotLuck, Kavita. Thanks for everything, my friend
Warmest salad
Luke xx
Well, I am kinda recovering from in-laws leaving.. meaning, I am just lazing away to glory these days, Lukey!! But cannot stay away from blogging for much longer… will be back in no time! 🙂
Glad you enjoyed this piece, my dear friend.. thanks for the kind words here… you are just too good!!
Staying warm as ever, L..
🙂
Optimism rules! I love the image of air whining.
There you go, Giovanni!! 🙂 Thanks for the fine words here… Glad you enjoyed the read!!
Take care, my friend..
Have a great weekend!
Beautiful writing as always Kavita. Does this relate to the miners?
I have an award for you:
http://frayedges.wordpress.com/2010/10/18/jingle-awards/
Oh..thank you Lisa… Actually, I had written this before the Chilean mining incident… It’s weird how it kinda fit well with the subject though…
I am so happy they are safe now…
Thanks for the kind words and the award, Lisa.. it’s really sweet of you… 😀
welcome back, my friend– you have been missed. a fabulous write!
Whoa!! Thanks a ton, M!! That was very sweet of you…
I am so very glad to be back myself! Just trying to catch up these days.. 🙂
Happy Weekend, my friend..
many hugs..
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Three awards for you,
Wooohooo…thanks Jin!!!
Hi Kavita,
You have a lovely blog. Loved everything about it. Keep it going.
I am still new to the blogging world of poetry. Just entered Magpie Tales. Maybe, your blog will be an inspiration to participate in other poetry forums too, like you.
All the best,
Shail
Oh wowww…that’s quite a compliment, Shail..thank you so much for your kind words of appreciation! I am really delighted that you enjoyed what you read here!
I wish you too the very best of luck with your poetry writing, my dear friend.. I will visit you REAL soon!! I am on a huge catch up mode these days cuz I was away from Blogosphere for a while… So, do give me some time to get to your blog.. I have a note of it, so I will definitely be visiting it very very soon!
Take care, and have a great weekend, S…
And once again, thanks for being so kind to me..