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Hourglass, Magpie Tales, Sand, Sandglass, Sands of time, Shape, Slipping, Story of life, Time, Trickling, Wishes
Time had slid right by
Like sand slipping through fingers
She did not know how.
Harder she tried to hold tight
Faster did it seem to slide
Now sitting, wishing
She were shaped as the hourglass
But knowing better.
It is blood that flows through her
Not fine and pure as that sand
But time is relived
Like this sandglass turned over
Up to down it flows
Deeds not undone, but redone
These grains trickling once again
** I wrote this (rhymefree – rare for me) Tanka triplet(my first ever!) for Magpie Tales, hosted by Willow… Please do check out the other amazing creative takes on the prompt here… **
***Please accept my humble apologies for not visiting/commenting on your blogs very frequently in the past few days. I have my in-laws visiting us, and time seems to be in a real hurry to catch some elusive train! And this will go on till October 19th!! Till then, please bear with me and my scanty comments :(… I do and will make it a point to hop on to your blogs whenever I can [am too blogaddicted to stop that :)]. And of course, along with my dear friend and ever helpful partner Amanda, I will continue to host the Monday Poetry Potluck at Jingle Poetry).. Thank you all so much for understanding! I love you, my dear friends!! Hugs and kisses..***
Here is my acceptance poem for The Perfect Poet Award – week 28…
Thank you for everything, my sweet Jingle… and a HUGE Thank you to all my blogging friends….
My joys know no bounds
Overflowing like rivers
Dancing all the way
I would like to nominate our truly amazing Riika for the next week’s perfect poet award! She rocks! 🙂
How I write, is mine...How you read, is yours 
Yay!!!! When you remove the constriction of rhyming words, your language flows, beautiful and pure like the sand in the photo – when you give yourself the freedom of freeverse, you find another kind of music and rythym and your work jumps into a whole new level of sophistication. This is really good – I especially like the way you brought the timer around again, and especially the line, “Up to down it flows”
Yaaaayyy…thanks a ton for the kind words of appreciation and encouragement, Cindy!! I am very glad you enjoyed this no-rhyme product of mine as well!
Your comments are invaluable to me, my friend…Thanks once again!!
Sorry about the delayed reply though.. guests at home are keeping me kinda busy.. 😦
I hope you are having a great week, Cin!! xoxo
so thats where you have been. have lots of fun. fabulous poem.
hehehe…yup, that’s where I am, even now, Trisha! Having fun too… but really miss my regular blogging! Grrrr
Glad you enjoyed this poem, T… Mwah!!! Thanks for the wishes.. 🙂
Beautiful magpie sweet doll and there’s only so much we can change or redo within the time frame we have but always we wish we were like the hour glass, however the reality is we’re not like it. Only hope for the best in the coming future. Enjoy your week my dearest~
J / Wild Rose~
You can say that again, Wild Rose… there’s only so much we can change or redo… for the rest, we have to make do! 🙂
Glad you enjoyed the poem, my love… I hope you are having a FABULOUS week, J… mine is teeming with stuff! 🙂
Ever yours,
~Poem..
Harder she tried to hold tight
Faster did it seem to slide….. time … nice
Aww…thanks a bunch, Wiser… but isn’t that true??? Those lines you’ve commented on, I mean..
Take care, buddy…
perfect of everything…
what an able and cute post.
Ooohhh…thank you so much Jingle! Your comments ALWAYS warm my heart.. love you loads, my sweet friend!! Glad you enjoyed this piece…
http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/awards-from-the-blogging-universe/the-outstanding-poet-award-4-rally-week-29/
award for week 29.
support by visiting half a dozen participants from my list, or linking in more old poems to our poetry potluck…
Thanks for the beautiful participation,
Happy Monday!
Sorry for not being able to participate as I would have liked to, Ji… But now that I am back, I will try to make up for all that I missed in the past few weeks 🙂
Luv ya!!!
take your time,
thanks for the upbeat attitude.
cheers.
hehehehhe… I was all beat a coupla weeks ago, Ji… Glad to be back now though!!
Thanks for being there….
have fun with your in laws…
beautiful magpie,
lovely spirits…
Thanks for sharing and linking up….
heheheh…doing just that, Jingle! Having fun! But I really miss the regular blogging too…grrr 🙂
Glad you enjoyed this “timed” piece, Ji 🙂 Take care…
http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.wordpress.com/2010/10/27/the-celebrate-poet-of-september-award-nomination-announcement/
please vote for fellow posts,
you are nominated, you win one vote, if you vote for other poets, you win another vote.
upon join the voting, you win at least a runner up award .
Thanks for the attention.
Sure thing, Ji… will cast my votes at the earliest!!
Thanks a ton for linking me in too.. I really appreciate your efforts…
xoxoox
the deadline to vote is today,
hope you make it.
BEST!
xxx
I couldn’t make it Jinle 😦 So sorry about that… had too many things to cope up with.. But I promise to make up for this some time soon!
Thanks for understanding, sweetie…
u r the best daughter in law.
keep smiling.
Awwww… I hope my in-laws feel the same too… 😀
Thank you so much for saying these lovely words for me, Ji…. that really was super kind of you!!!
You cannot hold time, but can enjoy the moment and recall. Kavita, also read this in reverse line order—pretty cool that way too. cheers, my friend 🙂
So true, Adam.. we cannot hold time…but we sure can relive those moments and enjoy!
Oh .. you read my poem in reverse line order! Gee.. Now I gotta try that myself! I hadn’t realized that it made sense that way … phheeww 🙂
Thanks for letting me know, my friend…
I am happy you enjoyed the read… Your comments mean a great deal to me!
Sorry about the delayed reply though.. guests at home are keeping me kinda busy.. 😦
I hope you are having a great week, my friend!! xoxo
Looks like you had as much fun with Time and writing as I did! You did very well first Tanka Triplet or not “Deeds not undone but redone” wonderful!!!
hehhe.. I had fun writing alright!! 🙂
Thanks for the compliment, Amanda.. these words from you mean a great deal to me!! I will take all the encouragement as I can get! 🙂
I am glad you enjoyed this one… now I am off to read your Mag on Time 🙂
Sorry about the delayed reply though.. guests at home are keeping me kinda busy.. 😦
I hope you are having a great week, my friend!! xoxo
Kavita! Lovely to see your poetry again… and you know what? I think you’ve outdone even yourself this time. I LOVE this – the exploration of time in relation to self. Love your interpretation of the hourglass’s function, why it’s turned over, and over again… to allow us to relive, redo, since we can’t undo. Brilliant! (did I say?) :o) You really are the perfect poet!
Oh my my my!! Ruth, you have outdone yourself in praising and compliment my work! Thank you so much, me dear sweet friend! Me beaming!! 😀 See that smile? 🙂
I am very happy you liked the analogy and the way I attempted at bringing it out… yaaaaaaaaayyyy!! Thanks a TON!!!!
Sorry about the delayed reply though.. guests at home are keeping me kinda busy.. 😦
I hope you are having a great week, my friend!! xoxo Many hugs to you…
hope that time slows down for you and you can enjoy it kavita…have a wonderful day.
I hope so too, Brian..thank you so much for the sweet wishes … 🙂
You are very kind..
Sorry about the delayed reply though.. guests at home are keeping me kinda busy.. 😦
I hope you are having a great week, Bri!! xoxo
Beautiful!!
Oooohh…thanks a ton, Willow!
Sorry about the delayed reply though.. guests at home are keeping me kinda busy.. 😦
I hope you are having a great week, W!! xoxo
Amazing poem Kavita! Lovely imagery. Once again your ending surprised me and I must say was a very clever one.
Sometimes we try too hard to hold on, don’t you think? Sometimes we don’t try hard enough…
Hurraaayyy!! Thank you DP… Am very glad you enjoy the twists and ends I give to my poems!!!
And yes, you are so right about the holding on business.. time and trying to hold on work kinda in opposite directions…no?! Phheeeww
Sorry about the super delay in my reply though.. in-laws visiting are keeping me busy.. 😦
Happy Friday to you, sweetie!! xoxoxoox hugs!!
Loved your tankas! Not a form I have tried yet, tho’ I have written many haikus and and one or two of Bashos ‘Haiku stanzas’ of 5-7-5-7-5 (or is that a tanka?). You seem to be using 5-7-5-7-7. Whatever, good job!
Warmest Salad
Luke x
Yaaayyy! Thanks a bunch, Luke!! I looked up the definition for Tanka on Wiki (thank God for that thing! :)).. and it gave me a 5-7-5-7-7.. I am usually a rhyming kinda gal.. but this time,I decided to stray away from my usual thing.. 🙂 So, I am VERY glad you enjoyed these!
Now I HAVE to read your Haiku and Bashos… I have written very few Haikus… and the latter looks very interesting indeed!
Quitte a fine poem Kavita….enjoyed how well the last lines worked.
Gee.. Thanks a ton, Charles.. And glad you enjoyed the read!!!
Sorry about the super delay in my reply though.. in-laws visiting are keeping me busy.. 😦
Happy Friday to you, my friend!!
Blog comments or no, you ROCK Kavita! It’s a privilege to be here reading your creative outpourings and marvelling at how good they truly are.
Oh, and I’ve never heard of tankas before. Are you sure you’ve got it right though? I thought they great big things that hold oil and the like? 😉
I know, I know. Truly lame. You have my permission to smack me upside the head. Silly Tony! 😛
Gee.. thanks Tony! You make feel very proud! 🙂 Glad you enjoyed my poem..
And, by the way, I said Tankas – with TWO “A”s 😉 But I choose to NOT smack you upside down… Cuz you are a very sweet guy.. hehhe
Alrighties.. you have a great weekend, buddy.. take care…
three tankas, and the third was the best 😀 nice description for the hourglass K..! 🙂
Thank you Leo… Glad you enjoyed the Tanka set! History needn’t always repeat itself now.. need it?! 😉
Have a fabulous week ahead!
Ah, I like this!
Yaaayy…thanks a bunch Tumble! 🙂 I really appreciate your visit and comments..
I’m not up on the types of poetry, but I know what I like….and I really liked this one 🙂
I loved the “Deeds not undone, but redone” line.
hehehe.. neither am I, Janna.. I am just getting to know of the different poetry types from some of awesome poets out here! 🙂 And though I am not a rules person per-se, I kinda had all of 5 minutes to write this poem before stepping out.. so a rhymeless Tanka seemed the best option! 🙂 I am very glad you liked the poem, J.. your appreciation for this one means a great deal to me! Thanks again!!
Have a lovely Sunday! xoxox
Lacking your usual rhyme, Kavita, but the rhythms there, and it’s still got a lovely flow, just as time. Beautifully written. Time is always a fun topic to write about, philosophize on, and generally work up images for ;).
Congrats on the award, Kavita – and as for the in-laws, yikes! Hope you get along well with them at least :P.
OOhhh… Thank you so much for appreciating this poem, Chris.. now THAT’s what I call reassurance! Time sure inspires many a poet/writer/artist 🙂
I am so very happy that you enjoyed this piece… your comments here are absolutely invaluable!
Thank you for your kind wishes as well… you are too sweet!
As for the in-laws, I do indeed get along with them.. hehhe.. but I am REALLY missing blogging regularly 😦
I hope I can soon get back to my groove!
Have a fun Sunday, my friend.. and a great week ahead as well! Sorry for not visiting often.. I will, very soon.. I promise! xoxox
wonderful perception of time beautifully captured in a poem. =]
also congrats on the award!
Aww..thank you so much Luisy.. I am happy to see that you enjoyed this poem..
Thanks for the kind wishes as well… It was so sweet of you! 🙂
Have a superb week ahead!! xooxox
u wrote lovely poem
n there is a msg hiiden behind those poem
grt effort
Gee…thanks a bunch, sweetie.. it was so sweet of you to say such kind words for me here… I really appreciate it, and I am very happy you liked the poem…
A very happy Monday to you!! xoxooxoxo
kavita, this is beautiful.
“Deeds not undone, but redone
These grains trickling once again”
i wish life is as easy as that.. but then, time has a life of its own.
Aww.. you bet, Bing! I wish life were as easy as that! But then, yes.. it does give us chances to make it better for ourselves by not repeating mistakes and so on.. besides, like you said, Time indeed has a life of its own… phheeeww
I am sooooo happy you liked this piece, Bing… yaaayyy!! And thank you (a 1000 times over) for your kind words of appreciation.. it really means a lot to me!
Have a lovely week ahead!!! 🙂 xoxoxox
You should do rhyme free more often.
This is great
heheheh… will definitely heed to your words, Richard…thanks for the encouragement! I am very glad you enjoyed this rhyme-free piece 🙂
Have a great Monday, my friend! xoxo
Nice, In enjoyed reading this.
Gee..thank you, Anton.. I am glad you liked this one…
Have a great week ahead!! xoxo
This poem is so me right now. I also have a lot of catching up to do in the Blogosphere, after a two week vacation break. Congrats on the well deserved award. Hopefully you have a great time with your family and a wonderful week 🙂
Aww.. I hope you had a fantastic vacation, Rosidah… 🙂 Howz the catching up coming along? I am really really lagging faaaaaaaaaaaaaaar behind.. 😦
After my in-laws leave, I hope to get BACK to my usual self.. hehehe
Glad you enjoyed this poem, my friend… and thank you so much for the lovely wishes..
Have a super great week ahead yourself! Much love to you.. xoxoxo
Days are usually entwined.
But life is that
Which is really enjoyed
Day vanishes from the total
A reminder that
Days are not for throttle.
Pleasant read indeed.
Well said, doctor!! Each day is lived separately, but never remembered separately…
Glad you enjoyed this read… and thanks for the insights and appreciation…
Have a great week ahead!!
Clever, clever Kavita!
Just started a book on Basho. 5-7-5-7-7 is correct.
No apologies necessary. We do have to attend to life with all its particulars. Thought you were traveling. Company is even harder in a way. Hope you are having some fun.
Congrates on the well-deserved award and fine acceptance poem.
Yiipppeee…thanks for the cross verifying the technicality, Jamie.. you rock!!!! Glad you enjoyed this piece..
And yes, life and its “other” particular do have their place as well.. 🙂 and you are right.. AGAIN! Company is sometimes harder than travel.. hehehhe
But it’s fun too… mother in law is making all kinds of goodies at home, which we are all relishing 🙂
Thank you on the wishes, J…
I hope you are having a great tie yourself… have a superb week ahead! Take care, my dear friend… much love to you… xooxox
So you got good “yums” out of the deal. Nice! 🙂
Happy days, dear one. Poem on …
🙂 Goos yums indeed!
Very happy days to you too, sweetie..
See you soooooonnn!
xoxoxoox
Nothing wrong with a bit of prose, Kavita. Come back and visit when you can.
Gee..thanks a ton for understanding, Eric.. you are very kind…
I hope you enjoyed this poem…
Have a fabulous week ahead, my friend… xoxoox
This is absolutely amazing! Very deep and can be read at so many levels. Your style and structure really add to the flow of your work. Keep it up!
Aww… coming from the prince of rhymes and profound stuff, this means a lot to me, Mark… thank you so much!! I am very happy you liked this piece…
Thanks once again, my sweet M… yaaayyy!!
Have a wonderful week ahead!! xoxoox
Once again, I commented on this poem, and today I find my comment wasn’t registered. Hmmm. I wonder what’s happening – somebody is sitting out there in cyberspace stealing my comments. It was a longish comment, so I won’t try to re-write, but basic message was: when you give up trying to rhyme, you produce work at a much higher level. Loved this, especially the ending, where you reversed the hourglass, and the line, “up to down it flows” Well Done!
Oh… no worries, Cindy…nobody’s stealing your comments.. I have them with me… only, I haven’t moderated mannnnny comments… Am kinda running short on time… with in-laws at home and all, things are getting delayed.. 😦 Sorry about that.. Will reply to the comments as soon as I can…
Thanks for once again taking the time to appreciate my poem, Cindy…it’s really very kind and sweet of you…
I am glad you liked this rhyme-free free flow attempt of mine… I really value your comments and feedback, so this means a lot to me!
Hope you are having a great day, my friend…
Take care..
oh – there it is. Woops. Okay, so you got two comments for the price of one. 🙂
hehehhe…yes.. but that’s perfectly okay by me! And now, here I am, approving and replying to the newer comments, while the older comments are still waiting in queue.. GOT TO go back to those right away!! 🙂
I am really taken with the line: “deeds not undone but redone.” Some of us, like me, take a long time to learn certain lessons… and in relation to the hourglass turning over again this piece really hammers home the theme of time passing, with a new and VERY effective twist.
Great job.
You totally nailed it, Jen!! Glad you liked this piece so much!! Thanks for the kind words, my friend…
Yes, time may not let us undo things.. but it sure gives us a chance to learn, and do those things in different ways (if need be)
Once again, thanks for the insights here, J… Will visit your blog real soon!!!
Take care and have a beautiful weekend, dear… xoxoxoox
Ok, good that you told us! I was wondering what the heck was wrong with you.. He he, now I know exactly.. 😉 Take care.
hehehehe… thanks Rachana! 🙂
I hope you are having a great time…
Happy Weekend, lady! 🙂
simply lovely. Nice Magpie.
Yaaayyyyy …thanks a ton, Kathe! So glad you liked this one!!
Sorry about the extremely delayed reply though… I was kinda caught up at home (with stuff and people).. 😦
Have a great weekend, my friend…
yes, submit an old poem is okay, no problem!
cheers!
10q for the support.
Thanks Ji!! You are so very understanding…
Kavita this was so lovely and bittersweet….
I think you gave me EXACTLY what I was looking for, in the comments for this poem.. “bittersweet”!!!
Thank you soooo much, Rene!!! I am so happy you liked the read…
Sorry about the extremely delayed reply though… I was kinda caught up at home (with stuff and people).. 😦
Have a great weekend, my friend…
I enjoyed this one so much, Kavita
Peace to you, 🙂
Laz
Awww…thanks a ton, Laz!!! So glad you enjoyed this one…
Sorry about the extremely delayed reply (and reduced visits)… I was kinda caught up at home (with stuff and people).. 😦
Have a great weekend, my friend…
Wonderful first.. no less impactful than any of your rhyming poems… Works absoultely perfect for me 🙂
I loved the other one too, One shot wedenesady entry… Out of this world…
Woohoo…thanks a TON, Abhilasha! I really need all the encouragement I can get!! 😀 I am so so so happy that you liked both my efforts.. (one shot, and this tanka set)…thankooo once again, my dear..
Sorry about the extremely delayed reply (and reduced blog visits) though… I was/am kinda caught up at home (in-laws visiting).. heheh
Have a great weekend, my friend…
Kavita !!! 😀 I am so impressed that you have even found ANY time to write, let alone write such great words about something that escapes all of us at times….yup…TIME!!
Don’t apologise for not being around as much…we all know you’re busy…and we all love ya and miss ya 😀 In this poem, I could relate all too well…and I especially loved the line “Harder she tried to hold tight…Faster did it seem to slide” – so true honey 😀
Have a GREAT time with your family my friend xx
PS – you ROCK – my favourite expression at the moment – lol 😀
yipppeee!!!
Chloe, it’s always so much fun to read your comments… and yes, I know I am replying after a century…. yet, I feel so refreshed reading your messages here… (ear to ear grin!!)
Well, time did slide indeed… now I am back!! and glllaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaadddd 🙂
Thanks for your thoughts here, sweetie… still WAITING for that mail from u 😉 Now that I am kinda free, I would looooooove to read it 🙂
LOVIEZ!!!!! Missing u…
Hey Kavita – so good to be back in touch 🙂 I can’t believe you already replied to that little email I sent you – wow! You’re good girl!!! lol
Hope you have a fantastic week…I’ll be visiting your blog to read more of your awesome writing soon – I promise 😀
Love ya loads xx
My quick reply to your email is just my way of telling you that I AM BACK too!! hehehh
Looking forward to reading your poems now, Chloe…. Woohoo!!!!
See ya around…. xoxoxooxox
Nice, Kavita…this is thoughtfully written. Life goes on, and we get to learn from our mistakes…we can’t un-ring a bell, but the next time we ring it, we can make a sweeter peal. Very nicely done 🙂
I like the way your described it, Tracy.. I think it was perfect…
Thanks for the appreciation towards my work, pal… I am genuinely happy you liked this TIMED piece 🙂
(hugs and cheers)
Really beautiful poem
Thanks a ton, Muskadel.. glad you liked it…
Have a great weekend..
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Time molds us to fit our needs and deeds. Excellent poem.
Indeed it does, Dan… and we help time with the molding too! 🙂
Glad you liked this poem, my friend.. thanks for the kind words.. I really appreciate it…
See you around soon, my friend..
“Now sitting, wishing
She were shaped as the hourglass
But knowing better.”
I love this line, It made me giggle.
hehehhe .. glad it did, Lola.. I am happy you enjoyed what you read! Thanks for the kind words here, my dear… I really appreciate it!
Have a beautiful weekend.. I’ll be visiting your blog real soon… xoxooxo
Kavita, I love this piece, Every Minute or So and I voted for it. Poetry does not always need rhyme. Sometimes rhyme interferes with the flow and feeling. This is perfect as is. Peace, Sharie
Woohoo….thank you so much, Sharie!! I am delighted that you voted for this poem! And am SUPER delighted that you enjoyed reading it!
I’ll be visiting your blog real soon, my friend…
Once again, thanks for everything.. I really appreciate it…
Take care, and have a lovely weekend..
Hi:
My name is Evan and I work at a digital advertising agency called Night Agency (nightagency.com). We recently launched a new community called HAIKYU (haikyu.com) where people can submit their own work as well as voting for their favorite Haiku. It’s a great way to discover new work, get recognized, and even win prizes. After seeing your Blog, we thought you and your followers might be interested to join our new and upcoming Haiku community. To celebrate the launch of this new community we are running a contest until October 31st where the Haiku with the most votes will win $250! It would be great if you could share the site with your followers/readers/fans and send us any and all feedback you may have (info@haikyu.com).
Thank you for your time, and please let us know if you have any questions.
Thanks,
Evan
Thanks for providing me this info, Evan.. I will pass it around to my friends as well…
Have a great weekend..
Really, a pleasure to read your work. I thoroughly enjoyed this one… the undone/redone bit was particularly tasty to my grey matter.
WOOOHHOOOOO!! Thank you so much Hikkii-chan… I am super excited that you enjoyed this piece so much! Time sure may not allow us to undo things of thepast, but it gives us chances to do things differently.. don’t you think?
Thanks for the kind words, my friend…. See you around pretty soon…
xoxox
I love it!!!
Aww..thank you Shigune… you rock!!! 🙂 Glad you liked this one so much…