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Confession, Impure on the inside, Killer, Magpie Tales, Murderess, Never quite clean, Only on the outside, The last cleanse
She slit throats just for fun
For paltry sums, she would stun
She called handsome men her hun
Then threatened them with a gun
She was known as the Betrayer
The Nabber, the hired Slayer
Of sin, she had on a thick layer
But now, she was getting grayer
She knew, however hard she’d try
The blood and tears would never dry
A wife’s despair, a child’s cry
Haunted her mind thru’ low and high
She finally stepped into the tub
To give herself a gentle scrub
Gore on her hands, she tried to rub
Aware she’s no more than a burnt stub
The water flowed beyond the brim
Fading lights, it all looked dim
Last breath gone, she now seemed grim
Her painted nails floating on the rim
**Written in response to the prompt this week at Magpie Tales, hosted by Willow Manor… Please make time to read and enjoy the creative takes by the other amazing writers and poets here… **
***Credits for this breathtaking image go to the lovely Willow :)***
Dr. Dark said:
Now where did you find the inspiration for such a dramatic end!?! Very well written indeed. See ya on the other side.
Kavita said:
Hmm… tough question, that… I suppose it was the drama queen in me that demanded some notoriety here :)… Glad you liked the read, hubby… And thank you for the appreciation! Glad you were the FIRST to comment this time.. yaaayyy
See you on ANY side, love!! mwah!
Enjoy a super fantabulous week! (with me ofcourse ;))
Kristal said:
I really enjoyed this. Pardon my lame way of speaking.
Kavita said:
Haha.. there was nothing lame about about it… it was Kristal clear to me! 🙂
I am happy you enjoyed this one… and thanks for stopping by, and commenting… I really appreciate it…
Hope you have a great week…
Stafford said:
A fitting end to a nasty piece of work! You did it the hard way, rhyming four lines in each stanza!
Nice to see for an old timer rhymer!
Kavita said:
Ohh…glad you enjoyed the rhyme scheme, Stafford… and thank you for the kind words… Luckily, I found the rhymes without a great deal of difficulty .. 🙂 So it was okay..
And you say you are a rhymer too… yaaaayyy.. Cheers to us then!!! Am off to read your work…
Have a fantastic week ahead, my friend…
Jingle said:
a wife’s despair, a child’s cry….
lovely done tale…
your words are always divine!
Kavita said:
Ohhhh.. thank you for such lovely words for this poem, Jingle… you made my day!!!!
I am happy you liked it… A nice word from you always brings a wide smile on my face…
Take care, and have a Terrific Tuesday! 🙂 (hugs)
Jingle said:
thanks for the kind words…
I feel like a loser,
I don’t really feel good.
thanks for love shining through..
u rock!
Kavita said:
Aww.. my sweet dear Jingle… you have NO REASON WHATSOEVER to feel like a loser…
You are the biggest winner among us all… And it’s not just me who is telling you this, I am VERY SURE we all feel the same!!!
YOU ARE THE BRIGHTEST STAR in this sky of poets, Ji…. If we are the planets and moons, you are the Sun!!! We just revolve around you…
LOVE YOU LOADS! (many hugs and kisses, sweetie.. ) 😀
Doraz said:
I can see that you really had some deep thoughts on this great writing. Thank you for always being creative and making your posts very interesting to read. 🙂
Kavita said:
Aww.. thank you so much for your kind and encouraging words, Doraz… They are cherished here!
I felt like I needed some quiet in order to write this poem…so I actually took my book and poem and pencil to my sanctuary (aka my bathroom), and sat on the rim of my bathtub… I do this quite often for other poems too… but for this one, it seems like the MOST appropriate place to get ideas 😉
Glad you enjoyed the result 🙂
Happy Tuesday, lovely lady… Hope you are havin’ fun!!! (hugs and love)
Doraz said:
😀 I think your hiding place is great…like you. Have fun.
Kavita said:
hehehe… oh yea.. I adore my sanctuary (aka my bathroom – that spot in my tub :)) Hussshhhh…that’s a secret 🙂
Glad you liked the poem, Doraz… Thank you!!!
Hope you are having an awesome time!!!
Happy Wednesday!! 🙂 (love and hugs)
mstevensson said:
Excellent dark read!! Very vivid imagery, great ending!! You have done it once again my friend!
Kavita said:
Whoa!!! Thank a TON, Mark!! Your appreciation and liking for my work really keep me going!!! I really value your comments… And I am very happy that you enjoyed the (dark) read…
Hope you are having a fantastic week, my friend… Happy Tuesday! 🙂
chrisd said:
The first thing I thought of was Lady Macbeth. Couldn’t wash the spot out. This poem reminded me a little of film noir.
Well done.
Kavita said:
Whoooaa… I take that as a compliment, Chris… Thank you so much!!! I am very glad you liked the read, and I hope it didn’t gross you out!
Have a splendid week, my friend.. 🙂
buttercup600 said:
What an end….and the way you rhyme right from start to end, in every stanza!! Now that is talented!! As I started reading, I wondered where this would take me…and then the BRILLIANT end!! I wish I was a fly on the wall to see you when you start writing every new poem!! I loved it girlfriend…as I do all of your work. You never seize to amaze me. CONGRATULATIONS ON THE WIN!!!!!!!!!!!!! So so well deserved!! Yahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh….chin chin on that babes xxxxxx Mwah xxxx
Kavita said:
Oh booyyy!!! You are so generous with kind words for me, Amanda… Thanks a ton!!! Okay, a ton tons!!! 🙂
Actually, once I had the idea for the poem in my head, somehow the rhymes came pretty easily… I too am wondering how that happened!! Phhheeewww… But I am glad it did! Oh… and remind me to NEVER swat flies again!! 😉 heheheheh
Glad you liked the poem, sweetie… sometimes, a few dark ones make for a platform for the next light one … don’t you think? Who knows what my next is gonna be!!! 🙂
Ooooohhh.. and thankooooooooo on the wishes for the award!!! Wowww.. that felt great…honestly!!!! And my heartiest congratulations to you toooo!!! 😀 🙂 We poets at Ji’s Rally totally rock!!
Cheers to us!!
And Happy Tuesday, my love (hugzzzzzzzzz and kissesssss) 😀
cindy said:
Oooh, gruesome Kavita, just wicked 🙂
Kavita said:
I knooowww… a tad too wicked maybe 😦
But this is how I wanted it to be! 🙂 Glad you enjoyed it, Cin… thank you!!!!!
Have a super fab week!! (hugs)
gospelwriter said:
Well, I’m glad she’s gone – not someone I’d want to meet on the street… Girl, you have the most amazing imagination! How do you do it? (not to mention the rhyming)
Kavita said:
Yea.. I too am glad she is gone… Else I’d be petrified! Besides, I don’t want her playing ‘Psycho’ in my tub!! As it is, I am a later sleeper…. brrrr…
Gee… thanks a bunch for your lovely words for me, Gospelwriter!! You got me totally grinned out! 🙂 As for the rhymes, once I had the idea in my head, the words and rhymes seemed to flow in.. Maybe sitting in the bathroom on the rim of my bathtub to write, really helped! 🙂 But this is something I do for many of my poems… And I am very very glad you liked the read! Thank you once again!! Your comments and appreciation mean a great deal to me!!!
Have a superb week ahead, G.. (hugs) 🙂
stilekke said:
….stunning!!!….for sure…..sjeesh….nuts and bolts put together wonderfully…
Kavita said:
Woohooo.. that’s a “complete” compliment, Stilekke… thank you so much!!!
I’m absolutely thrilled that you liked this one….
Have a super fab week ahead!!! 🙂
ziibi1 said:
Wow! You are amazing, your imagination is amazing. I can see her a character in an action movie. lol I do like her better on paper though.
Kavita said:
My oh my!!! Thanks a million, Ziibi!!!! Glad you enjoyed the read… and that you preferred this character here than on the TV screen… yaaaayyy… that statement made my day!!! Thank you once again, sweetheart!!!
Have a gorgeous week !! !:D (hugs)
navdib said:
Wow… simply awesome 🙂 You know the best part of having someone read and appreciate is when they find it hard to comment as they’re left quite speechless… and boy, am I speechless at the moment and this is the only way I can put it across as to how much I loved it 🙂
Kavita said:
Ohhh!! What can I say now!!! I am left speechless with your comment, Nav… thank you so much!! This comment of yours really meant a lot to me, and I am extremely glad that you liked this poem so much!!!
Have a wonderful “Stella”r week ahead, my friend 😉 (hugs)
anummunaf said:
wow……… nyc way of expressing
Kavita said:
Thanks a ton, Anum… Glad you liked it…
Hope you are having a lovely week… Enjoy!! (love and hugs :))
EKSwitaj said:
It’s really impressive that you’ve managed to create such a sinister character whil writing with so many end-rhymes.
Kavita said:
heheh… thanks for the appreciation and kind words, Liz.. Glad you enjoyed the read, and didn’t mind the rhymes… Thankfully, getting them right, and keeping the feel of the poem intact, didn’t feel too tough this time… I suppose sitting in the bathroom and writing helped! 🙂 No kidding!! I usually do that… sit on the edge of the tub and write…
Have a very pleasant week ahead, girlie… (hugs and love to you)
thysleroux said:
An interesting post, your blog has a very very distinct look… love it!
Kavita said:
Oh wowww… thanks a ton for the kind words!! I am very glad you liked this read, and the look of my blog… credit for the latter goes to WordPress ofcourse! Their themes rock!!!
Have a great week ahead!! 🙂
Eric Alder said:
I’m sensing a common theme with your last few posts, but I can’t put my finger (toe) on it.
Kavita said:
heheheh … you sensed right, Eric… And now that you mention it, I too am noticing it… grrr.. time to think away form “dark” I guess !! 🙂
Thanks for the visit and the astute observation… I take that as a compliment by itself! 🙂
Have a pleasant week ahead, E…
brian said:
a most excellent write kavita….a burnt stub…vivid…great rhyme scheme as well…i too am wondering a bit about the inspiration….hmm…
Kavita said:
Yaaaaay… Thank you for the generous praise and kindness, Brian… And I’m REALLY glad you liked the ‘burnt stub’ bit!! I had particularly liked it a lot myself as I was writing it…
As for the inspiration.. hmmm… I have this habit of taking my book and pencil into the bathroom when I really wanna think of a poem and cannot do it outside in the rest of the house (TV noise thanks to hubby :))… So maybe sitting on the tub and writing helped with the inspiration, particularly this one.. 🙂
Have a super fabulous week, B… see you soon at One Shot! 😀 (hugs)
suzicate said:
Your creative juices were flowing…surprised me with the ending.
Kavita said:
hehe… Hope you enjoyed the read, Suz… and thanks for the kind words…
Cheers to our creative juices… I hope they keep flowing 🙂
Have a beautiful week ahead (much love)
willow said:
Ooo…dark, very dark. Like chocolate.
Kavita said:
Ooohhh… and me hopes you like dark chocolate! 🙂
Thanks for stopping by, and for slurrppyyy comments, Willow!!!
Your Magpies ROCK!!!!
Have a gorgeous week ahead! (hugs)
Diamonds & Dogs said:
You are incredible! This was chilling, poignant, repugnant and sad all rolled up together. Bravissima!
Kavita said:
Woohooo!!! Thank you thank you thank you Jhannet!!! That was like a shower!!! 🙂
Am glad you found the poem exactly the way you did… that was the idea! I know… gruesome, right?! But we do need some reads at times.. don’t we? 🙂 Thanks again, J…
Hope you are having a superb week.. (much love!!)
Krunal said:
what a fantastic poem, i especially loved the lines ‘Gore on her hands, she tried to rub
Aware she’s no more than a burnt stub’
Great Stuff Kavita, keep it coming.
Kavita said:
Aww.. thanks a bunch, Krunal!!! I too had kinda liked the ‘burnt stub’ bit.. so I am especially glad that you liked it too!! 🙂
Thanks for stopping by and for the comments… I really appreciate it…
Have a fantastic week ahead, my friend… (no more screaming tubs I hope ;-))
(hugs)
siubhan said:
vivid and dark, the rhyme gives a bit of levity to what otherwise might be a bit too gruesome! verrry nice.
oh, and congrats on the Poet of July! 🙂
Kavita said:
You nailed it, Siubhan… I kept the rhymes there just so my readers don’t puke at the gore in the poem! Glad you liked this dark read, my friend…
Thank you for the lovely wishes!! Heartiest congratulations to you tooo!!!! Ji’s poet rally rocks! And so do we… 🙂
Cheers, and have a fantastic week ahead!! (hugs)
lazfreedman said:
Morbid and thrilling…!
I dig, Kavita
Peace to you,
Laz
Kavita said:
Wowww!!! That was just the word I was looking for, in the comments.. “Morbid”!!!
Thanks a ton, Laz… Am really glad you liked this dark piece…
Have a splendid week ahead, my friend..
Peace to you too… (hugs)
Lua said:
The ending made me shiver! Very deep, emotional poem Kavita, beautiful words…
Kavita said:
Oooohhh… thanks for the kind words, Lua… Glad you liked the end of this one.. I hope I didn’t scare you though…
Have a lovely week ahead sweetie.. (much love to you.. :))
Carrie Burtt said:
Great rhyming….great Magpie! 🙂
Thanks for the kind words over at mine. 🙂
Kavita said:
Thanks a ton, Carrie… glad you liked this one!! 🙂 Luckily, the rhymes came quite easily…
Btw, visiting your blog was entirely my pleasure!
Have a lovely week!!! 🙂
claudia said:
huuu – i just wonder why you call it peaceful descent – it doesn’t sound too peaceful for the lady….excellent write Kavita!
Kavita said:
Hi Claudia… finally, someone asked! 🙂 Well, she spent her life in strife and anguish and tension. And finally, after she stepping into her last bath, she eventually slipped onto the “other” side – and this time, in peace… and hence the title 🙂
Glad you liked the poem, C… thank you so much for your comments.. really appreciate it!
Have a great week ahead! (hugs)
700miles said:
Super Dee Duper Kav….this one had me anticipating the ending….super awesome picture with the poem too….this was really a great read….take care kav….
Kavita said:
My my my!! This comment was awesome to read, 700!! 😀
Credits for the amazing picture go to Willow, host of Magpie Tales…
Very happy you enjoyed the read… thank you so much…
Have a pleasant and awesome week ahead, friend.. 🙂 (many hugs)
Nessa said:
That was a fun deadly rhyme and sort of ominous, too.
Kavita said:
heheh.. glad you enjoyed this dark read, Vanessa… thank you for the super combo compliment!! Really appreciate it…
Have a lovely week… (hugs)
Chris G. said:
Go rhymes, go! you’re certainly showing the rest of us shmucks how it’s done. Emotional piece, both dark and beautiful–a very distinct and wicked little thing, Kavita. Well done. Never relinquish this hold you have on this rather wonderful imagination of yours!
Kavita said:
oh come on now Chris… one doesn’t always need rhymes to make poems! I just seem to have a thing for them most of the time 🙂 And in this poem, it was almost hyper… hehhe .. but I enjoyed writing it!! 🙂
Glad you too liked this dark piece, Chris… thank you so much for all the encouragement and kindness… these will keep me going for sure!!! 😀
Hope you are having a fantastic week ahead… (many hugs)
ninotaziz said:
Dark. Delicious. Great rhyming that seemed effortless – but we know better. Thanks for making this soooo enjoyable to read.
Kavita said:
Whooaaa…. Thanks for reading it AND enjoying it, AND saying so too!! Am very glad you liked this darkly delicious piece… heheheh..
Luckily, the rhymes came quite easily this time… phheewww.. thank God for small favors! 🙂
Have a gorgeous week ahead, my friend… (hugs and love)
ninotaziz said:
Dear Kavita,
Not sure whether you got my earlier comment. Great post.
Kavita said:
I sure got it!!! Thank you…. 😀 You are too sweet! (smiles)
Elise said:
guess it all got to her!
excellent magpie!
Kavita said:
You bet it did, Elise… But at least it all ended! Phheew
Glad you liked the poem… Thank you so much for the visit and kind comment..
Hope you are having a fabulous week, Elise.. (hugs) 🙂
forpuck said:
I really like the start of this “she slit throats just for fun”, lovely…
Kavita said:
Eoww… the goriest part of the poem! 😉 But yea, that’s the start I wanted … heheh
Glad you liked it, Anton.. thank you soooo much..
Have a fantastic week ahead, my friend … 🙂
tasithoughts said:
Excellent writing! Exuding darkness with the right use of words, tempo and imagery.
JP
http://tasithoughts.wordpress.com/2010/08/24/say-it/
Kavita said:
Woohooo.. Am very happy to learn that you enjoyed the read, JP… thanks a ton for the fine words !!!!
Have a great week ahead…
Am off to read your post 🙂
Chloe said:
Kavita, my friend, I honestly believe that you and Dean Koontz would get on VERY well…the character you’ve created here just shouts out to be in one of his novels!
Great dark read…you are AWESOME!!!!! 😀
Kavita said:
hahahaha… that’s a TREMENDOUS compliment, Chloe.. Thank you so much!!! Hurrraaaayyyy … Only you could say such a thing! I am dancing about… Time to give Mr. Koontz a phone call… ? 😉
Sooooo glad you enjoyed this dark piece!! Yipppeeeee…
Howz the week coming along, babes??? Not too hectic, I hope? Howz Mickey?? 🙂
Lovvvieeezz to you!!!!
Chloe said:
Well, it’s a deserved compliment…and definately genuine. I’ll see if I can make time to call Mr Koontz later on today on your behalf…I’ll just check my busy schedule….YES, I’ll call him within the hour 😀
My weeks going a-okay…me and Mickey are learning how to get along! I’ve not visited any blogs yet today, so it’s gonna be a busy evening. Got some trashy tv on in the background and my dog Stormy is keeping me company too so a FUN evening in store 😀 haha
Kavita said:
Heheheh… thanks for Koontzing me, Chloe… I am much obliged 🙂
Have oodles of fun with Stormy… how is managing the Mickey infestation, by the way? Enjoy a great evening, lovely girl.. 🙂 Read on… write on!!!
Mwahz to you… and hugs too!!!
Amity said:
My first time here I guess…but I enjoyed your poems Kavita! Very, very intriguing and powerful!
So happens I am on a vacation hence my blog is not updated recently, but after this week’s long R & R with my hubby whose on work vacation, I’ll be glad to make my blog again kicking and alive!
I will sure come back here every now and then… 🙂 Be bookmarking you! 🙂
Have a nice day Kavita! And congrats for winning in the Thursday Poets Rally!!
Kavita said:
Aww.. thank you so much, Amity, for the lovely wishes, and for visiting my blog.. I am very happy to know that you liked what you read here…
Oh, and thanks a ton for bookmarking me!! That’s really very kind of you…
Hope you are having a splendid vacation with your hubby… 🙂
I will be heading to your site right away, and am already looking forward to reading more by you…
Have a GREAT time!! And Happy writing when you get back… 🙂 (much love)
Tony Single said:
Ooh… I see I’m not the only one to dabble in a dark poem or two. Deliciously black, Kavita, like my sense of humour. It was tweaked on the nose good and proper by this one! 😀
Kavita said:
I knooowww.. funny how we timed it kinda together.. no?! Good to see you enjoyed it… I sense you enjoy gore (well, to some extent ;))
Thanks, Tony!!! Your comments keep me motivated enough to try out stuff!!
Verse on, my friend on the dark side… And have a great Thursday! 😀
Abhilasha said:
This was a very fantastic piece, kavita. You laid out the character so well, I could almost picturise her. A very smart, shrewd and perfectly cut piece like a beautiful and artful murder 🙂
Enjoyed reading every line
Kavita said:
Gee, I am so happy to see you enjoyed this poem so much, Abhilasha… this lovely comment of your means a great deal to me!!! Thank you so much for your kind words… you are very kind…
As for the murderess, well, she finally got her chance…her peace…good for her I guess..
Hope you are having a gorgeous week, my friend (many hugs to you..) 🙂
Cindy said:
Woah, spine chilling or what? Wonderful scene setting, character revealing and tempo all in one scary, creepy bathtub. My morning ablutions will never be the same….
Kavita said:
Creepy it was, Cindy!! Glad you liked it though! 🙂
I hope I didn’t scare you too much… besides, what’ve you to worry about?!?!?! She was a wicked sinner…but you are too kind and sweet…
Thank you for your kind words of appreciation, Cindy… they are invaluable to me!!
I hope you are having a splendid week, my sweet friend… (hugs and love) 🙂
Jamie Dedes said:
Wonderfully gruesome … Love the rhythm and the rhyme, which you do to perfection, Kavita. Most impressive …
Do you have nightmares, my girl? 🙂
Kavita said:
Oh no no no.. no nightmares for me, thank you very much! 🙂 [Well, sometimes… but not anything close to this poem!]
I am very very happy to see that you liked this dark piece, J… thank you so much for your kindest comments.. I think I really love rhymes… I only hope I don’t overdo them.. heheh
Have a fab week, my friend… 😀 (many hugs)
wiserskydiver said:
killer one i should say 😀
reading this made me write one too …cheers!!!
Kavita said:
Wooohooo.. that’s a superb compliment!! Thank you so much, Wiserskydiver!!! I am more than eager to read your now! Off to your blog 🙂
Enjoy a rocking week ahead…
Gally Lines ~ LestISmiteThee.wordpress.com said:
Woah, badass! I was hooked from the first line ;3
Kavita said:
heheheh… this is soooo your type, isn’t it!??!?! 😉 I meant the poem, NOT the character! 🙂 Glad you enjoyed it, gal… Thankooz!!! 😀
Hope you are having a fabulous week!
Happy Novel Writing!!! 🙂
Raven said:
I see why you felt the connection, though I wish she’d found a more palpable redemption.
Very well written as everyone else said.
Kavita said:
After all those murders and sins, a palpable redemption would’ve been too easy on her 🙂
Glad you liked the read, Raven… I really appreciate your feedback… thank you so much for the kind words…
Have a great weekend!
Dr. Madan Goyal said:
Iit was difficult for me to have an insight in your fantasies & imaginations.
You fly too high and wild.
Definitely inspired me in to a new one
http://drmadangoyal.wordpress.com/2010/08/16/poem/
Kavita said:
hahah.. I am a dreamer alright! I am glad this poem inspired you to write… Will read it at the earliest! 🙂
Hope you had a great weekend, doctor..
Alethea said:
dark with a hint of humour…great piece kavita. You always come up with something creative. Loved it 🙂
Kavita said:
Woohoo!!! Thanks a ton for your lovely words, Asmi… Glad you enjoyed this dark one… I hope I haven’t gotten you worrying over bathtubs! 😉
Have an AWESOME week!!!