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A tragedy, Couple, Fiction, Magpie Tales, Ms. Molly, Sad story, Watering Can
He has the finest friend, a lovely Ms. Molly
She’s as old as he, always coughing and bending
But caring for her garden, her family they are
Her love for him and them has been never-ending
Each day she would quench his thirst with water
Carried him sweetly like he were her only child
Then together they went to greet the pretty greens
Wind whistling to this couple, and birds cooing wild
Plants welcomed them, with their spirited dance
Rewarded Ms. Molly with a sweet tomato and peach
The tallest of trees bowed graciously to say hi
Weeds tickled them proud, so deep was their reach
But today he sat there, in wait of Ms. Molly
A feeling in him, that the wait was in vain
Cuz he’d heard a thud inside, and then a whimper
And he knew that Ms. Molly was no more in pain
The breeze is not blowing, the birds are quiet
While he broods over the times he’d spent with her
What’s he to do, how’s he to go on
And as he ponders over, the greens weep and wither
**This is my contribution towards this week’s Magpie Tales hosted by Willow. The credit for this lovely image here goes to Willow ofcourse…. Please do check out the amazing works by the other writers/poets as well ***
Excellent imagery, very vivid story told by this poem. Enjoyed reading it:)
Gee…thank you so much, Mark… I saw the image, and sad story flashed into my head..just dunno how! Glad you liked the poem…
Have a lovely week ahead! 🙂
Wow. How sad. I was completely there for this entire poem. On the porch, waiting. Miss Molly? Miss Molly. Oh, Miss Molly.
Watering Can questions
Awww…so sweet of you Julie… Alas Ms. Molly is gone, to a better place hopefully!
Thank you so much for your kind words of appreciation and compassion .. I am very pleased that you liked this one…
Have a bright and gorgeous week ahead! (much love)
the greens weep and wither,
sad ending,
but it is beautifully written…
the characters have come alive with your wording….
🙂
amazing magpie!
Thank you so much for you kind words, Jingle…
Am very glad you liked this poem… it was sad, but it was the first thing that flashe to my mind when I saw the image prompt… and then there was Ms. Molly ofcourse…the poor thing..
Have a beautiful week, girlie!! 😀 [many hugs]
What a sweet — and sad — Magpie! Poor watering can…
Oh yea…I hope he finds new company …soon..before he rusts away… but he will miss Ms. Molly alright.. 😦
Thanks for your kind words… and am very glad you liked this read…
Have a great week!
Wonderful
I love the happy/sad ending.
Awww…thanks a bunch!! It was happy/sad indeed….good times/not-so-good times… don’t we all have them?!
I am glad you liked it…. your comments are most appreciated!
Have a brilliant and cheery week ahead 🙂
Today was my first attempt at a Magpie Tale. I personified the watering can too. I love your Tale.
PG
I read yours! It was a FASCINATING piece!!!! A great first attempt!!!
Glad you liked mine as well.. and thank you so much for yout encouraging words… they are most appreciated, girl!
Take care, and have a lovely week!
(much love)
Hi Kavita, first time at ur blog, coming in via Ruth’s blog..! 🙂
this was a really nice read, you’ve used the image there very nicely.. i for a moment thought it was your own photography too 😀 lovely thoughts of the plant..!
Well, I see you write for a lot of memes 🙂 Do join in at Haiku Heights and/or Thursday Tales when you can too 🙂
Cheers,
Leo.
Oooohh… thanks for stopping by, Leo!! And thank you so much for your kind words of appreciation towards this piece… Glad you liked it! Oh ye…the credit for the image goes to the lovely Willow 🙂
I would LOVE to participate in Haiku Heights AND Thursday Tales… will check them out right away!! 🙂 Thanks a bunch for inviting me… it was really sweet of you!!
Have a beautiful week ahead!!! (much love)
Terrific piece – layered and lovely!
Awww..thanks a ton for your kind words…glad you liked this one…
Have a gorgeous week ahead!!
~love~
Ohhhh, Miss Molly and the watering can had such a special bond…so sad to see them part like that.
Yea, it was quite sad to see the tragic end… but well, life takes absurd turns! 😦
Thank you so much for your lovely words and comments… they are most appreciated! I am glad you liked this piece…
Take care and have a great week ahead!
-much love-
So touching.
(sigh)…thanks Cindy..glad you liked it !
Have a fabulous week, girl… (many hugs)
Ohhh this was so sweet yet sad
nicely done my creative friend
Gee…thank you so much for your lovely words, Leslie… you are too kind!!!!
I treasure your comments, and am very glad you liked this piece…
Poor Ms. Molly though…hope she finds peace wherever she is, and I wish the watering can finds a new companion too…
Have a gorgeous week ahead, friend…
~loadsa poetic love~
You have done such a wonderful job expressing the devotion we hold in our hearts for others we have the chance to share our life with. 🙂
I am so glad you saw it that way, Doraz… If you have kindness in your heart, you will value everything and everybody you care for and have around you… just like YOU do!
Thank you so much for your sweet and compassionate words, girlie… They just go on to show how HUUUUGE a heart you have.. you rock, lady!!! 🙂
Glad you liked this poem…your words are invaluable!!!
Have a FANTABULOUS week ahead (I am sure you will) ;)!!
~much love~
The last line of this poem is so sad…but I enjoyed the image it conjured of the greenery wilting. That poor little can…*sniff*
Wow Pretty tale. and lovely take. Good going Kavita 🙂
Gee….thanks a bunch for your sweet comments, BlueMist (love that screen name!!!)… I am very glad you liked this poem…
Have a gorgeous week ahead…:) (much love coming your way..)
Awww Thanks 🙂 *blush blush *
🙂
Powerful 🙂
Aww…thanks a bunch, buddy!! Glad you liked it…
Hope you are having a fantastic week!!! (hugs)
Aww…thanks a bunch for your kind words, Amber… I am very glad you liked the poem…
Poor little can indeed! Hope he finds a new friend…soon!
Have a beautiful week ahead, my friend… 🙂
Aww.. how touching and sad..!! Poor.. poor can.. I hope he moves on..!! Very neatly written Kavita 🙂 me likes 😀 hugss!
Gee..thank you so much, Ilakya… I too hope he finds a new friend… poor chap! Glad you liked this one, girl…
Have a lovely week!!!
(hugziez and kicchieez to you toooo) 😀
one thing that cut through the sadness was that she was in no more pain…and having been there with Ts mom a few years back…that is a relief….playing the emotional strings kavita….
Yea… I didn’t want to make it super sad and gruesome to read! And hence the ‘no more in pain’ bit.. I wish that when our time comes, we all go that way too… painlessly…
I am sorry to hear about T’s mom, Brian…
Glad you liked this one… and thank you so much for your kind and understanding words…
Have a fantastic week ahead! (smiles and hugs)
Lovely and poignant story in a poem!
Aww..thanks a bunch, Jennifer… so kind of you! Glad you liked this piece…
Have a lovely week!
A sad story that made me go emotional 😦
Your wonderful words made me feel the emotions that must have touched the Willow’s heart on not finding Ms. Molly around 🙂
Awesome take on the prompt.
It’s my first visit to your blog and I absolutely loved it 🙂
Cheers!!
Gee…thank you so much for the visit, “chatterbox” … can I really call you that!? 🙂
I really appreciate your visit and kind words… I am very glad you liked this poem, AND my blog! Thanks a bunch!!! 🙂
AND I am very happy to see you’ve moved to WordPress… You will love it here! 🙂
Have a gorgeous week ahead!!!
(much love)
A very sad but excellent post filled with much vivid imagery! Great work!
-Weasel =)
Gee.. thank you so much for the kind words, Weasel.. means a lot to me, coming from you!
Glad you liked the poem…
Have a wonderful week ahead!
Thank you for stopping by Write in Amazement and commenting. Such a haunting poem, sad, but filled the beauty of a garden.
Aww…am so glad you liked the read, Teresa… thank you so much for your words of appreciation…
I loved your Magpie…it was a real treat to read!!!
Have a colorful and bright week ahead!! 🙂
(lots of love)
What a great, sad poem. Hopefully, it’s a healing garden. 🙂
That’s a lovely thought, Teresa!! A healing garden!!! I so hope so too!!!! 😀
I am very happy you liked this poem, and thanks a ton for your sweet comment… it really made me smile…
Have a BEAUTIFUL week ahead!!! (much love)
Oh, this was so lovely, and so sad. Well done, Kavita.
Gee.. thanks a bunch, Patti!!! Coming from you, this means a lot to me!! I am very glad you liked this poem…
It is sad…and I hope the watering can finds a new good friend, soon!
Have a gorgeous week ahead, friend.. take care..
This was heartbreakingly beautiful Kavita…
“What’s he to do, how’s he to go on
And as he ponders over, the greens weep and wither”
Oh this really made me want to cry with him… Very powerful poem!
Aww…thank you for your kindest words, and for your compassion towards the poor watering can… I really hope he finds a good new friend, and soon too!
You are too sweet, Lua… And I am very happy to see that you liked this poem…
Have a BEAUUUUTIFUL week ahead, girlie…. (lotsa love and hugs flying your way) 🙂
lovely piece, Kavita. great imagery…poor Molly, plants and watering can….hopefully someone will kindly happen along. 🙂 Heartspell
That’s exactly what I hope for too, Heartspell… that the plants and the can find a new friend soon… and that Ms. Molly finds peace wherever she is…
I am so happy you liked this poem, girl.. and thank you for your compassionate and sweet words…
Have a gorgeous day, my Texan friend (?) Having been a Dallas resident for 5 years, TX has a special place in my heart!!!!
Much love coming your way…
I’m actually from Florida, but my son is in basic training for the Air Force in Texas right now. I also have extended family in Texas on my husband’s side. Heartspell
Ahaa… Florida!! The Sunshine State…. makes me think fresh!! I have only visited Miami – and that was last year, for our wedding anniversary 🙂 Such an AMAZING PLACE!!!!
Please convey my BEST WISHES to your son on his Air Force Training!! You must be a very proud mom…. 🙂
Take care, and have a lovely week ahead!!! (much love to you and your family…)
Nicely written … with melancholy and feeling.
I am very happy you liked the poem, Helen…and thank you so much for your kind words.. your comments are much valued!!!
Have a great week ahead!!! 🙂
this is really, really beautiful kavita. what a vivid imagination. wonderfully captured too. lovely.
Gee…thank you so much for your kind comments, Sharmishtha… I am very happy to see you liked the poem… Your visits and comments are much appreciated!!!
Have a lovely week ahead! (much love)
aww… poignancy… well-written quartrains Kavita. Enjoyed your blog as always
Warmest Salad
Luke
Woohoo…thanks a bunch for enlightening me, Luke.. I had no idea these were called quartrains!!! The tidbits of information you provide are most welcome and very much appreciated too!!! Your comments mean a lot to me!
I am glad you liked this poem… and I really hope that the can finds a new friend soon… 🙂
Have a fabulous week ahead, friend…
Love your fresh salads!! 🙂
Take care… (much love)
So sad and felt so sorry for the can!!! It is so touching but very emotional too..you rock Kavita….I’ll make it up when I have more time girlfriend…have to be outa here very very early today and raining cats and dogs:( Miss you and am sending you love!! Keep writing your magic girlfriend! Mwha and lots of hugs oxoxoxox
Aww… you are too kind, Amanda… Thank you so much for your compassionate and kind words… I am very happy to see that you liked the poem…
And don’t worry, girlie…my posts won’t go anywhere (unless WordPress takes them off! :))…so take your time… get done with your work, and then when are free and relaxing, read thru’ the posts and blogs… In fact, you taking the time to read them even during your busy days shows how affectionate and thoughtful you are…I SO LOVE YOU FOR THAT!!! You are such a darling…
Fret not, sweetie… deadlines really suck! So, concentrate on those for now 🙂 All the VERY BEST of luck for your project…
And be careful with the rain… 🙂 It can get tricky… Sip it, and enjoy though! 🙂
Take care… LOADS OF HUGS AND KISSES coming your way!!! mwah mwah mwah 😀
vivid ;)…. and ‘HE”….
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for you… pick one or two…
viva la vida!!! 🙂 🙂
Yea…it was a “he”… 🙂 Glad you liked the poem, Anky…
And awwwww…thank you so much for the LOVELY awards, girlie… ME LOOOOVES!!!!!
Have a gorgeous week ahead!!! (many hugs)
I wondered if “he” was supposed to be a real man or the watering can. I guess it doesn’t really matter, but if he is supposed to be the watering can, you might want to consider changing the title to The Watering Can. Otherwise, without the photograph, your reader will assume “he” is a man.
No matter who he is, however, this is so poignant, sad, tender and couched in a distinct voice of country people; it’s absolutely beautiful. I think this is your best work I’ve read so far. Well Done! I just want to keep reading it over and over.
Aww…thank you so much for your kind words, Cindy.. I am flattered actually!!! And am extremely glad you liked this poem…
As for “he”, it was totally intentional…I wanted the reader to think of a man, and also of the watering can… Cuz the story could have happened to either of them!! Of course, from my perspective, I meant the watering can.. but I wanted the reader to associate the story with a man as well… I am actually quite pleased that you noticed this, and brought it up… 🙂 That was very sweet of you…
Hope you are having a beautiful week… and I hope it gets even better!! (much love flying your way, Cindy)..
Take care…and once again, my humblest thanks for your insightful and warm comments… They mean a lot to me!!
Having read your response and others’ comments, I realise that what you did, and the way you did it, was perfect. I wouldn’t change a thing now (In fact my suggestion looks a bit pathetic, but then…).
This poem is so much more interesting because of that wondering – man or can? And when you think about it, there’s alot of symbolism in that watering can that can be plumbed.
This would make a really good poem for a group discussion or a workshop for writers. Taking an object and writing in such a way, that the reader doesn’t know if the object or the person is the subject of the poem.
You’re good, Kavita! Keep writing.
Oh my my my… you really toooo kind to me!! And please, no suggestion from my readers (and definitely not one from you) can ever be pathetic. I most appreciate your comments, Cindy… and right now, I am very thankful to you for your appreciative comments and your encouragement.. It’s really something that keeps me going!!
This poem worthy to be considered as a piece for group discussion!! OH WOW!!! I am really flattered and honored! And glad you see it that way… Gee… I am quite speechless really!! All I can is, thanks for thinking so!! I hope I can continue to keep you interested in my work…
Have a lovely week ahead, Cindy!! 🙂
Gutted. 😦
Still, beautifully tragic and humane. I love this. 🙂
Awww… don’t you cry, my dear Tony… I hope the watering can finds a good friend, and soon too!
Glad you liked the read, friend… thank you for your ever so sweet and full-of-feeling comments… they are most appreciated!
Hope you are having a fantabulous week! 🙂 [many hugs]
Aww…that was sad. But so sweetly written…
I felt like I was reading a short story. Very vivid…..I could actually “see” the images as I read the poem.
Lots of love to ya 🙂
Ooohh…I knoww… sad as it was, I wish the watering can finds a new friend soon!
I am very happy to see that you really liked this poem, Asmita… thank you so much for your kind and compassionate words…
Have a gorgeous week ahead, girl… MWAH!!! 🙂
Oh so sad, no more Ms. Molly!
Very well written, I loved the last verse especially. Really beautifully written.
Aww…thank you so much, DP… am so happy to see you liked this story-poem… and knowing your poem preferences, I am not surprised you liked the last stanza the most 😉
Yea..it was a sad poem… and I hope the watering can finds a new friend soon!
Thank you so much for your kind and compassionate words, girlie… You are too sweet…
Have a lovely week ahead!! 🙂 [loadsa love]
Very nicely done, though so very sad.
Thank you for your kind words, Linda… I am glad you liked the poem…
It is a sad poem… and I hope the watering can finds a new good friend…and SOON!
Have a beautiful week ahead! 🙂
So well written kavita. Boy you go for all the subjects of this world.
heheheh… well, I was totally inspired by the picture prompt, Keshav… that did it for me! 🙂
Glad you liked this one… and thank you so much for your encouraging words… means a ton to me!
Take care… (many hugs)
Sad & lovely. I find your words staying with me– nicely done.
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Aww…thank you so much for your kindness, Marilynn… I am happy to see you liked this one, albeit sad…
Hope you have a lovely weekend!!! (well, it’s Thursday evening here :))
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enjoy a lively day!
Yippppeee… enjoying already, Ji!! Thank you for the kind wishes!
Read your 55!! Hehehehe… it was LOVELY! Commented too… You rock!!!
Happy Family Weekend!!! 🙂