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Analogy, Autobiography of a candle, Burning out, Candle, Melting to nothingness, Metaphor, Mistress, One Shot Wednesday, One Stop Poetry, Slave
I build it up and hold a fire
And burn all night long
I acquiesce with grace, to your desire
And dance to a tuneless song
I drench this frail body in tears
And melt my flesh for you
I strip myself of all my fears
And do as you ask me to
I hiss and gently watch your eyes
As you are bending over me
I don’t attempt to hush my sighs
And tease you as you tease me
I lie awake and keep you warm
When you decide to sleep
I faint and fade in my calm
My strength isn’t to keep
I stay by you when morning dawns
And refuse to let go
I just am one among your pawns
Which you eventually throw…
**Written and posted for this week’s One Shot Wednesday hosted by Pete, at One Stop Poetry… I request you to also check out the amazing works by the other poets here… **
Wonderful Kavita! I am in awe…I wonder what the candle were if it was a male! 🙂
wishes,
devika
Wooohooo.. Thanks a bunch, Devika !! I am glad you enjoyed this one…
Have a superb week ahead! 🙂
Cool 🙂 The candle and the mistress are so well connected in your words… loved it 🙂
Gee.. thanks a million!!! Am very glad you enjoyed this piece…
It was fun writing this one actually… putting myself in the “shoes” of a candle… hmm… not so comfortable 🙂
Have a fantastic week ahead!!! 🙂
I wonder what the candle would say if it was a male…or rather your version of it as a mister! 🙂
wishes,
devika
Hmmmm… That was very witty, Devika! I am already thinking 😉
Maybe I would’ve then titled it “A love hate affair”, and would’ve changed a few lines in the poem to suit a guy 🙂 No more dainty and coy then eh? It would be all rough n tough, and strong and tall, fair(he’s a CANDLE after all), handsome.. and … I had better stop here! 🙂
A wonderful poem Kavita, I especially like the ‘faint and fade’.
Thank you for your kind words of appreciation towards my work, Cindy… I am very happy you liked it..
And yes, the ‘faint and fade’ bit was one of those lines over which I struggled… But I’m glad it turned out the way it did.. 🙂
Have a gorgeous week with your lovely family!!!
Yeah, You are wise to stop there…atleast to me. Even a woman candle can be rough and tough, if it needs to be 🙂
wishes,
devika
Teehee.. And oh! She definitely can be rough and tough if need be… only mine was portrayed as a much calmer/softer one 😉
Yeah, what you write are often you…whatsoever you write about…I’ve felt so. Thats why I write only about myself, or people I know very much about…I can’t write about thiings, like ; sometimes I am in awe when people do that…but the in school we have done that a bit…now lost touch 🙂
wishes,
devika
One hint if you want to try writing about things: put yourself in its place, and think on its behalf.. the rest will just flow I suppose 🙂
I once wrote on a coffee table, just because I didn’t know what to write about, and my friend challenged me with this one! hehe…it was real fun though!
Try it.. you might enjoy it too..
Happy Wednesday!!!
divine…..breath is union with cosmic intelligence and even we inhale cold breath ..but outcome is warm…..always there till last as companion….a faithful mistress….
candle….lights the night as mistress but in the morning turns into mi stress…eventually throw……
love all….
Faithful indeed! And so giving too.. I wish we too had some of those qualities… but we’ll try..
Thank you, Ram, for your kind visits, and insightful comments… I really appreciate you taking the time….
Love and Peace..
That putting yourself in place is exactly what i said Kavita 🙂
and NO I don’t enjoy writing such pieces..I am a professional freelance/ghost writer, who writes for money most of the time…blogging is too secondary, though i enjoy what i do there 🙂
best wishes Kavita…in your writing 🙂
wishes,
devika
To each, his(her) own.. 🙂
Thanks for the wishes, and for taking the time to visit my blog..
And good luck with your endeavors as well!!! Can I get a chance to read some of your works ?
No…Ghostwriting goes with a copyright. I am not supposed to violate that, or use it in my name
And I am reporter for a Dow Jones Magazine…again not supposed to give out newsitems elsewhere…You can read my blogs, though I don’t care about quality writing there…rather I don’t have that time needed to refine writings…those are just first drafts,
thanks for the wishes, Kavitha, 🙂
devika
Ahh.. I just meant your blog anyway! 🙂 Unfortunately, I don’t see any link to it anywhere here…
Besides, I didn’t really expect to be able to read a freelance writer’s works… heheh
And the Dow… phheewww!! NO WAY ! 🙂
Take care..
Wow…you’re just getting better and better Kavita! I love how your poem totally compliments the image…mistress and candle!!! LOL…sends my mind into 1st gear!! As always wonderful. Thanks for sharing your talent with all of us! Middle of the night writer 🙂 🙂 🙂
hahahah.. I love that title you just “bestowed” upon me!!! Middle of the night writer!!! LOVE LOVE LOVE IT!! 🙂
Glad you enjoyed this poem, Amanda… Don’t get ideas from it now… 😉
And a beeeeg big thank you for your kind words, you warm wishes, and your ever-so-appreciated hugs!!!
Luv ya, girl !!! A comment from you before I can go to bed, will help keep nightmares away! 🙂
Mwahs and Hugs!
You can see the blogs here: http://www.blogger.com/profile/02349153846127145464
devika
Thanks D.. Will check it(them) out…
Ooooo she really leads the life of a mistress doesn’t she??? hmm beautiful and overlooked
I love poetry – where words unveil a whole new world
thanks my dear so glad you are here at One Shot Wednesday – wouldn’t be a party without you
Smiles from the Moon
Awww…. that was really REALLY very sweet of you, Leslie… I am totally flattered !!! 🙂
Submitting for One Shot is entirely my pleasure! The returns are quite amazing actually :).. I get to read such brilliant works of other writers…
And yes, poetry has this tremendous ability to create new worlds, to breathe life into the inanimate, to honor the unsung heroes!!! I love poetry too!
Oh… here’s some trivia for you: My name (Kavita) is a word in Hindi (an Indian language). And Kavita actually means “poem” in English! Since you brought up the word “poetry”, I just thought of mentioned this little tidbit 🙂
Anyhooo… thank you once again for your kinds words of encouragement… It means a lot to me!!!
Have a beautiful and bright week ahead!
(hugs)
Wow, the crazy things one will do for love and acceptance, if only temporary. A moving piece!
You’re such a kind person with tons of writing talent! I would be honored to add you to my blog roll. I hope you will add me, too!
Gee.. thanks for all those sweet words for me, Gally!!! I am thrilled about being blogrolled by you!! And you, I have blogrolled a loooong long time back! 🙂
It’s nice to know that enjoy my writing.. your feedback and encouragement are totally appreciated!!
In this poem, it was only a candle. But we humans are not very different ourselves… (sigh)
Have a brilliant work ahead! Looking forward to reading/seeing more from you soon..
Oh my gosh, I’m sorry, I didn’t know you already added me to your blogroll! I actually don’t know where your blogroll is, lol. Is it under “Noteworthy Reads?”
You don’t have to be sorry… It’s my bad! Noteworthy Reads is something I keep updating manually, depending on my not-so-brilliant memory! Grrr..
I hadn’t added the BlogRoll widget to my theme, thinking that it would be redundant… But now, I guess it makes sense adding this widget 😉
Will do that in a bit..
reading that i need to find a mistress to understand it more……another great poem from a great writer..cheers for sharing at One Shot..Pete
Aha… I hear you, Pete!! 😉 But a candle’ll help too…
Glad you enjoyed this read!!! Thank you for your insightful comments .. 🙂 They are most appreciated!
One Shot Ws ROCK !!!
Oh this is a treasure indeed elegant and crafted wth great dexterity
Aww.. thank you so much for your kind and encouraging words, Gwei! I am thrilled that you liked this poem!! 🙂
Have a gorgeous week ahead!
Unbelievable…a poem about a candle from her(?) point of view. Brilliant. You actually made us empathize with an object.
Hehehe… Glad you enjoyed this one, Keshav… It’s nice to know that this poem could get someone to empathize with that candle 🙂
Thank you so much for the appreciation.. you are too sweet!
Have a lovely week ahead!
really a marvelous piece…you paint her so sensually then reveal perhaps her inner fear and truth that she knows she will be thrown away…what a horrid life to be condemned to…
Indeed a horrible life, hers! And yet she keeps giving… is it unconditional love, or just lost hope? I wonder…
But thank you for your appreciation and thoughtful comments, Brian.. I am very happy you liked this poem!
Have a marvelous week ahead!
It’s beautiful 🙂
Thank you, beautiful girl! 🙂 Glad you liked it…
Happy Wednesday! 🙂
The things we will do for even fleeting moments of love and affection. Great image with the candle–burning bright, only to fade with the night. To know your relations will inevitably snuffed out, as so many before…tragic.
Another great work, Kavita!
Aww!! Thanks a bunch Chris!! Comments and thoughts from you are a treasure! I am glad you enjoyed this piece…
And yes, her life is quite tragic.. isn’t it? And yet, she gives, and only gives.. how kind of her!
This was a wonderful read! I added you to my blogroll as well, both my wordpress(Fiction) blog and my blogger(poetry). Thanks for adding me too! Great post!
-Weasel
Oooohhh… I’m glad you enjoyed this poem!! And thank you so much for your kind words, and for adding me to your blogroll!! That’s very kind of you..
I suppose I’ve only read your fiction till now(and it’s brilliant!!).. Now I am very excited about reading your verses as well!! 🙂
Thanks once again, and have a lovely week ahead!
You’re writing is outstanding, Kavita. So much subtlety between the lines, yet the flow and rhyme enhance your poetic storytelling. As mentioned in a previous comment, you do seem to get better with every post. Cheers 🙂
Oh..thank you soooo much, Adam! I am totally flattered by your words!! Floating floating on the 9th cloud 🙂
Appreciation, encouragement and thoughts from you are invaluable to me!
I am very happy to know that you liked this poem, and and my style as well.. I hope to continue writing for as long as I can, as I find it immensely relaxing!
Hope you have a fantastic week ahead.. and once again, thank you for your kind comments…
Wow! That was elegantly done. Bravo!
Regards…
Gee… Thanks a bunch, lady!!! Words from your are much much appreciated! Am happy you enjoyed this one..
Many many hugs…
another lovely poem wowwwwwwwwwww
Yaaayyy …glad you enjoyed it, girl!!! 🙂 Seeing your “wowwws” make me so happy!!!
Have a lovely week!
This is a good read, the mistress never wins – and if she does, she probably will not want him after she gets him….but there is always that want…Nice piece…bkm
Thank you for your thoughtful comments, bkm… I really appreciate you taking the time, am glad you enjoyed this poem …
Have a great week ahead!!!
mistress n candle…amazing imagination…ur just awesome kavita:)
Glad you enjoyed the read, girl!!! It was an interesting muse, wasn’t it? A candle 🙂 Loved writing this one!!
Thank you for all your words… they are much appreciated!
Happy Approaching Weekend!!! 🙂
I feel so sad for her… and I think he is so selfish not to recognize the beauty in her. Beautifully portrayed portrait of a mistress’ trials.. .well done, as always Kavita. Heartspell
He is quite selfish.. but he could just be an ignorant fool too.. I wonder which is worse.. phew!
But she only knows to give… very sweet of her, isn’t it? Well.. sad too ..
Thank you for your thoughtful comments, Heartspell… they are very much appreciated and treasured! And I’m glad you enjoyed this read…
Have a gorgeous week ahead! 🙂
Such a lovely poem with so much in between the lines – and my favorite verse is…And melt my flesh for you…
Great writing!
Thank you Claudia.. glad you enjoyed the read.
The idea was to get the reader thinking over the -in-between-the-lines 🙂 The picture was a give-away though !!
Have a beautiful week ahead!
That was beautiful! I can understand her pain, her longing and the pure devotion she feels through your words…
Oh.. thank you Lua.. Am very glad you enjoyed this poem…
you’ve used the perfect word in your comment – devotion. That’s exactly how she does it..doesn’t she? And expects nothing in return too… how very giving!
Have a lovely week ahead! 🙂
The ambiguity of subject makes this interesting and keeps the reader guessing. Nicely done!
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Gee.. Thank you so much for your kind words of appreciation… I am happy to learn that you enjoyed this read! 🙂
Have a gorgeous week ahead!
Nicely done, Kavita. Love the look of your blog too. Cheers for the visit, hope to catch you round my friend
Warmest Salad
Luke
Thanks a bunch, Luke! Glad you liked it. As for the look of my blog, all credit to WordPress 🙂
Have blogrolled you so I can stay updated… Hope you don’t mind..
Love the warm salad 🙂
Happy Wednesday! Cheers..
I would have to say that if you are not appreciated in life for what you do and who you are….move on. 🙂 Nice one. I felt it. 🙂
Well said, Luisa!!! Move on it is!! 🙂 But this dainty little candle cannot really move on her own now..can she? 😉
As for us humans, YES YES and YES! Love all you can.. but keep the coat of self-respect on as well! Can’t afford to lose it.. The world out there can be a little too cold 🙂
Thank you so much for your kind words and thoughtful comments, lady! They are invaluable and much appreciated!
Have a HAPPY WEEK! 🙂 (mwahs and hugs)
You have only to open a window and let in the breeze. 🙂
Ah.. ofcourse!! The window! 🙂 Yes indeed… But what about the candle???? 😉
Hehehe…you are so sweet!
Melt it down. lol 🙂
hehehe… okies, done and melted!!! 😉
Great poem. I am with heartspell in how I felt about the mistress and the man. You did a good job at making me feel the story.
Aww.. thank you so much Ziibi.. Am glad that my poem made you connect with the poor candle(mistress).. And I really appreciate your kind comments…
Have a gorgeous week ahead!
Aaawww man… I really feel for that candle, y’know? After all her devotion what does she get? Nothin’. 😦
Beautifully articulated, Kavita. Just beautiful. 🙂
Ooohh.. you can say that again, Tony! She keeps giving, and asks and get nothing in return indeed… 😦
Thank you so much for your kind words of appreciations.. I am very happy to learn that you liked this read..
Have a great week ahead!
there’s two things about this poem that I love: candles and mistresses.
btw, i love that tag: “Autobiography of a Candle”
Just those 3 things eh? 😉 Just kidding..
Glad you enjoyed the read… and thank you for the visit and for your kind words… they are much appreciated!
Have a great week ahead!
Hi there – I’ve passed along the “Your comments are my Sunshine Award!” Ciao!
Woohoo.. thanks a ton, lady!!! You are too kind… 🙂
Have a fun week !!!
Amazing, this has to be one of your best! It is so sad, and so ironic in a way. It is sad when you love someone enough to do things like that, but land up just becoming a pawn to discard. Lovely and sad sentiment. The picture you chose goes very well with the poem too.
Aww.. thank you for your kind comments, girl.. Am glad you liked this poem…
We, as humans sure go to great lengths just for some love… so does this little candle…
The picture I’ve used here..well, I owuld say the poem goes with the picture 🙂 I actually thought of the candle while writing this entire.. ofcourse, I had the human desperation in mind as well..
I really value your thoughtful comments, deadpoet… they are much MUCH appreciated..
Have a beautiful week ahead!
a pillar of sucess here! loved every line! I’ve spent quite of few nights back in the day when I attempted to just light myself up and encourage others to watch me burn..just think there’s probably a thousand other candles flickering in a thousand other windows that are jealous of her flame!
What a rare thought!! Other candles envying this one !! I never thought about it that way… phheeww! I wonder whose life is better though… the one burning, or the others that are just lying there, not knowing the purpose of their existence! Only they are to feel it though..
Glad you enjoyed this poem… I just saw a candle in the corner of my room, and and the lines just came to me in a flash !
Thank you for your kind words, and I really appreciate your invaluable feedback..
Have a fine week ahead!
Great poem – your writing is awesome!
Just to let you know, I’ve added your blog link to my blogroll/circle of friends!
Cheers, Chloe 😀 xx
Gee…thank you so much Chloe! I am happy you enjoyed my writing, and thrilled that you’ve blogrolled me as well!!! Will do the same in a bit!
Have a lovely week ahead!! 🙂
Thank you for stopping by my blog Kavita and for the sweet comment. Now this poem touched my soul…
“I drench this frail body in tears
And melt my flesh for you
I strip myself of all my fears
And do as you ask me to”
He doesn’t ask but you still melt for him so passionate, i loved it alot~
Wild Rose~
Ooh.. thank you Larvk.. I am glad you liked this read..
The giving mistress (candle), so taken for granted, and so forgotten indeed.. Those are the ways of human nature as well.. (sigh)
Anyway, once again, thanks for stopping by, and for your kind words.. they are much valued!
Have a great week ahead!
really nice kavita.. you have shared an aspect of humanity that many people shun and loathe to mention..
Gee… I’m glad you liked this read, Kris… and thank you for insightful comments and encouraging words.
Interestingly, we (humans) have a tendency of loathing to mention those things and actions we do or carry out most!
Have a great week ahead!
beautiful tag between the mistress and the candle,
vividly said.
a mistress is weak, just like the candle you show, admire your talent on portraying it
animatedly!
Wow… So many readers had so many wonderful and varied images of how they perceived this one… So it feels very “different and refreshingly nice” to come across a few readers who saw this poem in the exact same way as I did while writing it 🙂 Thank you so much for being one of them, Ji..
Your kind words, feedback and encouragement keep me going!!! I am very glad you enjoyed this one..
Happy Thursday!!!
in that case, throw him out before he does that to you. i have friends who are in the same position as depicted here. my heart goes out to them.
http://pinklady-bing.blogspot.com/2010/07/note-to-my-child.html
I guess it’s that glint of hope (albeit false) that keeps one from throwing him out.. else we would have seen it happen a lot 🙂
But yes, we sure feel for the oppressed and the forgotten… This little candle was one of them
Thank you for stopping by, and for valuable comments.. I really appreciate it!
Have a great week ahead!
beautiful. you’ve nailed this sentiment exactly. and i find it so impressive that while this piece has a similar tone to the poem which follows it, the take-away feeling is so completely different…
I am very glad you saw it that way… thank you so much…
This lovely candle, and her giving nature indeed.. 🙂
Hope you are thoroughly enjoying your weekend! 🙂
Very Interesting!
Thank You!
Thanks! 🙂
u light my fire types reaction ….. mystical 😀
hahaha…thanks Wiser! Poor candle… the ever giver! 🙂
This is good. She makes so many sacrifices, I feel badly for her by the end. It is powerful. Thanks for sharing this.
Thanks for your kind and compassionate words here, Carl.. I am really glad you liked this poem here..
So very wise said dear fleur de-lis. It’s true when you have only a night with someone, in the morning you feel like a candle burning all night and left alone with no was left to melt …
And that’s why I could immediately think of this poem in response to that post by you… you see the connection too, don’t ya?! (sigh)….
What a hopeless romantic I am!
very nice poem…..
gee…thanks a bunch, Divya… ❤