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She sat right there
Hiding behind the table
With tousled hair
Sniffling and pitiable
Open bloody palm
She looked at her cat
That lay dead and calm
On a fine Persian mat
Twas her only family
Now slain by a slug
She sighed wearily
There was no one to hug
She was trembling
I hoped she’d hear me
She didn’t reply
And why ever would she?
How was she to know
That I was not the devil
Ready with a blow
And raring to kill?
How was she to sense
That I too ached and pined
And wished for defence
Just like her tortured mind?
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well put,
I see her come to life, full of emotions and wonders.
Happy Monday!
Thanks Ji…
An image on TV was my muse… well, initially… then the story took a different turn in my poem 🙂
Glad you liked it..
A Very Happy Monday to you as well!!!
Excellent piece with lots of emotion. Conflict sometimes grays the line between what is right and what is wrong, and I feel you captured this well in this poem. Have an excellent monday
Thanks a ton, Mark! This was a fictional piece that spun out of a crime serial I was watching… the idea of a behind hiding behind the table was what I had seen on that serial… the rest was all made-up by yours truly !
I hope you liked the read… and didn’t find it too disturbing 😦
Have a bright and cheery Monday yourself..
why did a cat have to die? *snif!* (this is soooo not a reflection on your poetry. it is a response from my cat-loving self!)
HUGS!
Mel
Awwww Mel… I like cats too… And am sooo sorry if I caused you any pain with this poem… that was definitely not my intention 😦
But this was just fiction.. and no cat ever died anywhere for me to write this up…
I was watching a Law and Order episode on TV, and something on that gave me this (weird) idea… And then I just went on and on, added the cat scene to it…bla bla
I hope you still come back to my blog to read (inspite of the “cat” poem)..
Have a beautiful week ahead! (many hugs to you toooo..)
I totally will! That’s just me being a drama queen! 🙂
You are a great poet and I wouldn’t want to miss your work (even if you ‘killed’ a cat in the process! LOL)
BIG HUG!
Mel
Yaaaayyyy!! That was because you said you will continue reading my stuff, and for all the lovely compliments..
Now, EEEEEKKKKSSSS! That is for even “thinking” that I would kill a cat !!!! 🙂
Luv ya!! (many hugs… )
ack. that was heartbreaking….wonderful imagery….you pull at my emotions…
Aagghh… It was pure fiction though..
I hope I didn’t tear you apart 🙂
And thanks for the compliment too…
Have a beautiful week ahead!
Poor girl, poor cat…but such great imagery…I felt as though I were viewing the sad scene. Well done. Heartspell.
p.s. I hope you don’t mind that I’ve put you on my blogroll.
Thank you for your kind words, heartspell… Am happy you liked this read…
And yes, it was just pure imagination (thankfully!) 🙂
No sad girl and no dead cat witnessed in the course of writing this poem…
And OFCOURSE I DO NOT MIND being added on your blogroll!!! I am honored, and thrilled about it!!!! Thank you sooo much for adding me… As far as my memory serves me, you are already on my blogroll!!!! 🙂 And I never even asked you for your permission 😉 Hope you don’t mind that…
Have a beautiful July!!!! and take care..
I do not mind at all… I, too, am humbly honored. Heartspell
🙂 Have a fun week!!
Ahhh..poor cat but know it’s just fiction LOL…the way you create emotions with your poems, is wonderful. Keep them coming girlfriend and have a lovely week! x
You know me pretty well now, Amanda!!! Yes, this was fiction (aren’t we glad about that?!) 🙂 !
I hope you liked this read… and as usual, it’s a pleasure to see comments from you…
You have a super week yourself sweetheart… hugs !!!
Lovely…How much did I miss?
Good to read from you again.
Cheers!
Good to see you again… how was the flight?
Hope all’s well…
You’ve missed a bit I must say… cast your votes soon! For the celebrate poet and celebrate blogger awards 🙂
Here are the links:
http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.wordpress.com/2010/07/08/the-celebrate-poet-of-june-award-nomination-announcement/
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Thanks for visiting (as usual) … I love reading your blog AND your comments 🙂
Take care, and have fun! Looking forward to reading more of your stuff now 😉
This, to me, is a visually stunning poem…like a photograph in my mind. Well done.
Tracy H
And this, to me, is like music to my ears… Thank you so much for your kind words!!! You saying this, means a lot to me!
Glad you could stop by…
Have a great week ahead!
Woww!!!!!! Beautiful Fantastic Write Up!!!!!!!!
Oh..thank you so much for the kind compliments, Sahana… Glad you could stop by and read my stuff…
This gesture means a lot to me!!!
Take care, and have a beautiful week ahead!
hello! i must say that i always enjoy my reader’s comments. there are many which portray niceness, and kindness…
and then are some that, as with your comments on meadows waltz, which make writing a sheer joy.
thank you for the visit there…and for taking time to delve deeper than the surface….
to take, as you have done, a jumping point and add your own twist…can be a jaunt into the areas which we may not have lived…but as writers we can, evoke vivid emotion! your work is evidence that such mastery exists!
Awww… I am going to treasure those words !!!!! Thank you so much!!! That was way more than a compliment :)) I am humbled…. honestly!
Such wonderful words of encouragement from readers really does make writing a sheer joy!!!
As for the comment on your post, that was exactly how I had felt when I had read “meadow’s waltz”… I was on those meadows myself… carefree and alive!!!
Am already looking forward to reading more rejuvenating awesomeness from you…
Once again, thank you for your kind words…
And have a fabulous week ahead!!!
You made her come to life- I felt like I was reading a story about a character I knew very well! Poor kitty though… 🙂
Glad you felt that way… (should i be “glad” though??) .. What I’ trying to say is, I really hope you liked what you read… 🙂
And as for the kitty, well… that was imagination too!! So no harm done 😉
But seriously, thank you so much for stopping by, and for your kind words of appreciation… It means a great deal to me!!
Have a fantastic week ahead!
guess all the comments above echo the same 🙂 i can literally visualize it all… great piece Kavita… have a good week ahead
Gee…thanks a ton!!! 🙂
This was not something very pleasant to visualize, I’m afraid…
I hope I come up with a little brighter poem sometime soon 🙂
But I am very glad you liked it…
Have a fantastic week ahead!
its so sad… ;(
bu i cud bring the images to mind as u describe it…love d poem…but dint like the cat dead 😦
Ok, first, sorry about the dead cat… sick, but pure imagination! ;( Totally not my intention to bother cat and/or animal lovers …
Now.. THANKS a bunch for the compliments too!!
And inspite of the dead cat, you liked the poem…. phheewww…. thank you for THAT !!! 🙂
Have a super week ahead!
You have the gift to ‘give life’ to your characters … and again the intensity of the story is so well increased with each new verse. A simple, touching and captivating story, even if it’s so sad…well done
Thanks a million for your kind and encouraging words!!! They mean the world to me…
Am happy (although the poem is a sad one) that you enjoyed the read. Being appreciated for imagination coming to words, is REALLY SOMETHING!!! Thanks once again…
Take care, and have a terrific week ahead!
Curiosity…Anxiety..Confusion..what..where..how..why
Thanks for bringing these out in me.
Uh ohh…. why so confused ?
Besides, it’s your mind… you are entitled to think up the happiest of thoughts even after reading the saddest of poems 🙂
But I am glad I could invoke some of those questions in you… Hope you’ve found your answers already !
Thank you for stopping by…
Have a fabulous week ahead!
oh my!!! 😦 such sadness 😦 😦
Hey Harshika… relax…It’s only a poem !
Read a few happy ones, and poww!!! You will be back to smiles again 🙂
Thanks for stopping by though… your comments are much appreciated!
Have a great week ahead!
Harrowing scene that evokes emotion. Even though it’s fictitious and inspired from TV it still tugs at the heart strings. Well done and so clear.
Thank you, Adam! It was kinda clear in my head! And I’m glad (?!?!?) that the clarity has shown in the words as well…
It was a challenge writing this one.. I must admit!
Have a great week ahead!
And happy writing…
Yes, we cat lovers are sad!
Awwww…. be rest assured that no one and nothing was killed during the course of this poem 🙂
It was imagination and ONLY imagination… arrgghh … curse it!
But seriously, making you so sad was definitely not my intention… a “little” sad, maybe yes. But then, we do that to ourselves by watching summa those sob-sob movies too now, don’t we?! 😉
Anyway, I hope you are having lovely week!!!! 🙂
Enjoy..
wow another well written peice i really like it
Hey… thank you so much Rida!!! Am thrilled that you like it…
It was kinda sad… but well, it was just imagination! 🙂
Have a happyyyy week ahead!!!
thnks alot u r a grt poet u wrote nice poems
Awww… you are too kind, girl! Me is blushing…
thnksssss u 2 so dun be sad stay happy u r very sweet
Gee…thanks! Your comments sure make me happy.. 🙂
I wasn’t too sad even while writing this poem, dear..
ok what ever it was but now u happy so i m also happy see mesmiling:-)
yaayyy!!
yuppie;)
Another great poem Kavita… though it brought me tears. As I read the words, surging memory of my beloved Pudge came to mind on how he died in my arms after being hit by a car.
Emily, I am terribly sorry to read about Pudge… And I am practically cursing myself for having brought back unpleasant memories for you, with my poem! 😦
But that really wasn’t what I had intended… Once again, my sincerest apologies… An may Pudge’s sweet soul rest in peace…
Hope you find solace in your fantastic photography!!!
Inspite of feeling so sad, you have taken the time to write me a compliment… that means a LOT to me!! I am deeply touched, and humbled by your gesture!
Have a lovely week ahead, and thanks a million for your kind words!
Kavita, no need for appology. The fact your poem affected me only shows the profound success of your words. I know you didn’t write to make people sad… besides, it was sad how Pudge died but the joyful memories of how he had lived will always put smiles on my face…
Make a Great Day! Keep writing your beautiful words.
Thanks for being so understanding, Em…
Happy memories !!
And make another day great, with those lovely shoots… waiting to check them out already!
(many hugs..)
It’s funny the things that strike us for inspiration. Really unusual poem. I like that you write on unconventional topics.
Am really glad you liked this one.. Thanks for the kind words…
And you are absolutely right ! Sometimes, the oddest of situations/objects can turn out to be best of muses for a piece of writing… it really is amazing !
Thank you for stopping by… and enjoy a beautiful week ahead!
PS I subscribed by email 🙂
I rarely do that….
however there are certain blogs that although I may not be able to post comments each time…still feed my soul 🙂
Woww… thank you so much for subscribing to my blog!!!! I am honored!!!
I hope I continue to entertain you with my writing 🙂
There are indeed poets/writers whose works are thoroughly enjoyable and so worth reading!!! I am really glad you thought of mine that way..
Have a fantabulous week ahead !!!
because I love your blog
http://dragonfliesandgoosebumps.wordpress.com/2010/07/20/an-award-to-awesomeness/
Awww…that was very sweet of you!! Thank you soo much !!! 🙂
Yaaayyyy
Another great post…. you are really talented.
Thank you, my dear Heaven… And you are too kind…
(love n hugs)