Abyss, Black humor, Dark, Hell, Just for fun, Might, My entry to enter the UDPS, Pain, Suffering, Undead Poets Society
In this situation dire
I needed some fire
This pent up desire
I craved for satire
My moves slackened
And senses darkened
My thoughts blackened
As all hells beckoned
My heart was slit
And adorned with spit
I lost all grit
In this bottomless pit
I then rose from my bed
Voices cried in my head
I wailed as I fled
Hoping I’d be undead…
New to your blog Kavita and thanks to you visiting mine else would have probably not known… like your style of writing… carefully thought and measured… fast… very different from the way I write 🙂
Yes… very new ! 🙂
This was my entry for joining the Undead Poets Society… I think you should check them out too! The poets are amazing, and their styles are varied and awesome!
But I’m so glad you decided to stop by my blog, and comment as well.. that means a lot to me! Thank you so much….
Our styles may differ… but idea is kinda the same…poetry! 🙂
Have fun, and enjoy your July!
Baby baby…I loved this one…I love the part “I then rose from my bed
Voices cried in my head”…I always have a voice in my head!….So beautiful my friend. Lovies ~ x
Oooohhh… And I was beginning to think this was probably way too dark (although I liked the change myself) 🙂
Voices in your head huh??? Hmmm… they do have a way, don’t they?! Those voices, I mean…
On a slightly more saner note, I am truly glad (and relieved) that you liked this poem too!!! A good feeling to have after those dense thoughts 😉
Have a wonderful week, girl… mwaah!
I had to laugh when you asked about “voices in my head”…knew you’d remark on that (smiles!!!)..it’s the voices working overtime in the middle of the night about what to write the next day!!! (giggles)..there is a fine balance between writing happy thoughts and the more darker side…you have mastered it wonderfully! But then I did not expect it any other way…Special girl:) Mwah right back at yah x
Gee… I was just kidding when I questioned your voices 😉 And I totally understand what you mean (voices working overtime in the middle of the night about what to write the next day)!!! You bet!!! It’s fun though… don’t you think?!
Well.. I feel real good that you appreciate my work… That certainly makes me feel special alright!! 🙂
Hope you having some fun time (with those inner voices) 😀
Btw…was wondering about the time difference…its’ Thursday 5.15pm here….sometimes I feel I miss out on so much because of the time difference..x
It’s Thursday 3.15am here 🙂
Please don’t remind me that I am awake at such an odd hour… I knoooowww… will go to bed in a bit! 🙂
And NO, you are not missing out on anything, thanks to this amazing thing called Internet!! It makes one think everything is right by you, whenever you need it to be!
That voice in your head………hmmmm…telling you to go to bed girlfriend (smiles) sweet dreams Kavita Mwah xxxx
(smiles) You are just too sweet! I will I will … I promise… just 15 more minutes!!! 🙂
OMG!!! :O hope ur alright now…
the feelings are so strong 😦
Worry not, Harshika… It was was mostly imagination.. I have been and am alright 🙂
Thank you for the concern and the compliment (yes, strong feelings – I took it as a compliment!).. You are too sweet…
Gee.. thank you so much!! 🙂
So dark and haunting, I love it!
Thank you, deadpoet!!! I kinda enjoyed writing this one… felt very…well… different 🙂
Glad you liked it…
I love the rhythm of your poems. Each line compels you to read the next. This was a great poem, I think each of us have a heartbreak that we have to recover from.
I am so very glad you liked this read… While writing it, I had to sort of wear a different hat…
But this spurred from pure imagination, and mainly because I wanted to write something to be part of the “Undead Poets Society”… So, if it made you think that I was going thru’ a not-so-good phase, please be rest assured that I am not, and that this poem was a figment of my imagination …
But thank you for your compassion, encouragement and your kind words.. It was a very sweet gesture.. and I really appreciate it..
My best wishes and prayers are always with you!
I am glad to know that this particular experience is not yours currently. One thing I’m learning is that heartbreak comes in all forms, sometimes you can break your own heart.
The fact that this was pure imagination yet so real show you’re a true talent.
Aww… you know what I think?! I think we break our own heart MOST of the time! With our expectations, our over-giving natures, we don’t realize that not everyone is the same… and then we feel miserable about it! I hope I am being bold with my statements…
Having said all this, I hope you come out of your not-so-pleasant situation REAL SOON! You are definitely in my prayers… And then I would LOVE to read yet another beautiful poem from you… 🙂
So… 3 cheers to this bright and sweet future!! Go… cuz only YOU can make it happen!
🙂 And thanks a million for the appreciation you’ve shown towards my work… I am honored! It truly means a lot to me!
Take care, and have a lovely time..
really good and gripping kind of sinister in a way
Thanks a bunch, Stacey!!! I really appreciate your stopping by my site…
Am glad you enjoyed this dark read! 🙂 It was interesting writing it as well…
Thank you once again..
Hoping I’d be undead. I woke up that way this morning. Thanks for this one. Sue
Aww… I am not too sure whether to be glad or not that you were able to relate to this one…
I only hope you enjoyed the read… Thank you for stopping by, and for your appreciation towards my work…
Have a wonderful week ahead!
pravin nair said:
nice stuff there..I liked the lines the way you have penned them..dark and yet moving..
Thank you for stopping by, Pravin… Am glad you enjoyed this read… 🙂
Your kind words and encouragement are much appreciated!!!
Have a lovely week ahead…
this has got a wicked pace to it…for me the third stanza set the stage (with its vivid imagery) for your finale…
Thank you Brian… I wanted it to be wicked, and you called it so!!! Ahh.. music to my ears .. 😀
That 3rd stanza actually brought disgust to my mind… but then, that was exactly what I was looking for (in the poem ofcourse)
Glad you enjoyed this read though… and thanks for stopping by.. Your visits and comments are MUCH appreciated…
Dark sides run all around
The tables I have seen
are round with six chairs
You get six dumber people
to set in each of them there
You take a revolver
Add a bullet just one
You put on the table
A very large money sum
Put the revolver to your temple and
Pray to your God as your heart pounds
All you hear now is a very loud click
To the next person it goes, yes round and around
Now when there’s only one left
Be as happy as you can be
For all the blood covered money
Is now yours Tax free
Hah!!! Too good! Wicked, but neat!!!
Dark sides definitely running all around !!! 🙂
Thank you for stopping by, and for this fab comment..
Have an untaxed July ahead 🙂
teeheehee… and you are too sweet.. thanks again!!!!
I then rose from my bed
Voices cried in my head
I wailed as I fled
Hoping I’d be undead…
I hear you,
very profound and animated writing!
thanks a ton.
oh yea.. animated for sure!
Glad you enjoyed this one, Ji… thanks for visiting
Have a great July!! 🙂
Very nice! What’s more to say, keep up the good writing! I will stop anytime again.
Thanks, WW… Greatly appreciate the kind words of encouragement!!!
Have a great week..
Alice Audrey said:
Birthday of a vampire?
Everyday is a birthday, for a vampire…
But in this case, it was more like birth of one! 😉 Into the undead world ..
D.S. Lear said:
A red-eyed ashen-faced thank you… 😉
Can relate to those times waking and pinching myself, realizing thank goodness it’s just a dream. Great title you gave this one too. cheers, Kavita
You bet!!! It’s quite a relief to know it was just a dream.. or just some example of imagination running wild 🙂
Glad you enjoyed this one, Adam… Thank you so much..
Have an awesome weekend!
wailing as you fled…can almost see you running out of hells gates with your skirts smouldering
Whoa! Love your imagination, Carol ! 🙂
Thank you for stopping by… glad you enjoyed the poem..
Have a great weekend!
your writing is always fun to read. keep up the good work!
Woww.. that’s a sweet compliment! And thank you so much for the encouragement!!
I will surely keep writing for as long as I can… 🙂
I liked the bit about wishing to be undead. brought me back to a time a felt the same way… and now I am! it’s great to be in so attuned to our feelings… it’s what makes a poet great… such as you! I’m now a follower. keep it up!
Ooohh… that was a HUGE compliment!!! Thank you soooo much!!! I am thrilled!
And by the way, I just noticed we have similar gravatars as well… EYES! Oops.. an eye! 🙂 – I know I know… totally out of context…sorry about that 🙂
As for the poem, gee… there really are times when you start wondering that if THIS is life, what exactly is death ! But then, after you snap out of such a phase, everything suddenly starts appearing blissful 🙂 Strange thing, mood :).. isn’t it ?!
Anyway, thanks a ton for the encouragement, and have a fantabulous weekend!
please feel free to take any of them
ignore if you dislike them.
Thank you for these awards, Ji… They are sooo beautiful…and to think you made them yourself, is like WOW! you are super talented!!!
Of course i like them… uhhmmm …LOVE ‘EM !!! Can I take more than one ? 🙂
Oh, please tell me you don’t dream in rhyme!
Your poems are so sublime
I could reread your words all of the time.
Thank God you are not a mime!
haha, couldn’t resist.
very nice poem.
And I couldn’t stop smiling after reading this comment!!! It was adorable!!!! 😀
Thanks a zillion for these awesome words! They are much appreciated …
And as for dreaming in rhyme, I sometimes really do too :)) [thankfully, it’s only SOMEtimes though ;-)]
Oh..and by the way, I have been told by a few friends that my face is/eyes are hyper expressive… DANG!! I suppose that kinda makes me half a mime 🙂