I had recently clicked this in Key West... ofcourse I Gimp'd it a bit so it "suited" this poem 
Gestures flashed
like ominous streaks
of steely lightning
Words rolled
like metal beads
off a snapped nylon cord
Emotions flowed
like molten lava
from a furious volcano
Sparks flew
like limpid feathers
on a still Autumn eve
Silence pervaded
like an eerie calm
after a brutal raging storm
…. Then you were gone….
With the stars in my eyes
silently exploding
into a monotony
of nothingness
And all I could do
was stand there
looking at you
ashen faced
while you
blurred
into an
urn of
dots
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With my violin and piano muse today, your poem here is like a sad adagio, strings touching the chords of the heart … The image is stunning!
Aaahh… am glad this one touched the soft walls of your heart, summer gal..
And for once, the picture too has my name all over it! hehehhe… glad i clicked this one… i loved it fit in with today’s poem… maybe I knew I was gonna write this one some day…
Seems like a sad ending…like these fading dots:
while you
blurred
into an
urn of
dots
indeed, my dear Heaven.. a sad ending it was, for this person… hope they get their love back…
Amazing… as you read down the sound turns from ‘volcanic’ to down down down -n your head. beautiful poem, Kavita!
glad you liked the effects, Dulce…. thanks a ton for the words that sounded like music to my ears alright!
xxxx
Wonderful set up, loved how you played with it and ended it with actual dots, that just added more depth to the piece right there. Isn’t it a pain when you have the words then they just blur away?
You can say that again, Pat! Sometimes dots seem like the only answer to our terribly confusing questions… don’t you think? please don’t answer this one with dots..will ya now?
Glad you liked how this poem played out, my friend… your words here mean a great deal to me!
My goodness, I thought you’d made it like an arrow that went straight into your heart.
What an emotion filled piece of writing! Great picture that fits it so well too.
haah! Thanks, Daydreamer… Well, what happened in this fictional piece definitely seemed like an arrow.. didn’t it?! I am happy you liked the way the visuals turned out, my friend… thanks !
A sad yet beautiful piece. Great imagery, as always my dear
Enjoyed the read very much!
Thanks, my dear Tekia… Your continued support is a blessing to me…
MWAAHHZ for that!
heart breakingly achingly beautiful Kavita.
Oh my my !! Really, that’s THE PERFECT compliment, Laura.. thank youuuuuuuuuu!
xxxx
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‘Blurred into an urn of dots…” what a sinking sensation that gives, the ashes in the mouth from all the burning words…been there done that, never expressed it so poetically. Loved the whole thing, in all it’s pixelated glory.
Really Joy.. it’s sad how we say all those things we NEVER wanted to say.. and then later, regret we said it in the first place… well, I guess this poem was just a representation of all those would-have-been moments that we spoiled with our harsh words.. *sigh*
I am very happy to see that you liked how it turned out, my dearest poetic guru.. thank you ever so much for such a wonderful comment and for your patience in reading and understanding the meaning in what I wrote… THANK YOU!!! (many many hugs too)
nice kavita…well as nice as death can be…all left and urn full of dust and memory…the soul gone on ahead of us until maybe one day..the structure of this plays well with the words…
Aaahh.. the scary, the thrilling, the inevitable – DEATH! Well, lost moments are just as scary and suspenseful..aren’t they?
Glad you liked this dark and gloomy ride down this shadowy path, my friend…
‘into a monotony
of nothingness’
I also really responded to the dots at the end, everything good we try to build up will disintegrate, entropy always wins. Potent and that pixelated picture made my face twitch with discomfort, what an incredible package you’ve given us tonight!
OUCH! It made you twitch, eh? Well well.. maybe that’s what I had intended originally anyway..
Thanks for this superbly positive and encouraging comment, Anna… I really appreciate it!
Entropy wins indeed.. (if we allow it so) … *sigh*
A much more creative way than someone ‘fading into the sunset’…really enjoyed this one.
Aaahhh.. thank YOU, Charles, my friend… you say the exact things I WANT to hear/read! In your poems, and in your comments!
(hugs)
Fabulous vivid images
Really enjoyed this – the ending was so apt – love the four dots
The dots seemed MOST appropriate to me too, M… it was as if I ran short of words and expressions just then.. which is pretty much what happens (and how we feel) when we experience loss of any kind.. no? Glad you liked the effect it created, dearie.. and your comment made me gloat over the idea! Thank you ever so much!
Great words to a pixelated image of someone walking – leaving behind that empty place where a few moments before was everything. Well said. Thank you!
Thank you, Gay.. yes, the emptiness left behind is nothing but a blurry collection of pixelated memory indeed! Glad you liked the poem, my friend..
what a powerful dynamic of images!
You pulled me in and I stayed on the edge of my chair to the end.
Brava!
Lady Nyo
Oh wow!! Thanks, Lady Nyo… it’s really very generous of you to say such wonderful things about this poem… Glad you liked it and found it riveting enough…. (hugs)
sad…sigh…nice write.
Awww… thanks a bunch, Ayala dear…
(love and hugs)
“While you blurred into an urn of dots……..” LOVE it!
And:
Gestures, words, emotions, sparks…..silence. Oh, my!!!
This my final comment tonight–going to bed…and I’ll dream of dwindling down to…dots!
Oh my my my! You flatter me, Steve! Thank you soooooo much! I am flying up there right now… somewhere above cloud 9..
(many hugs to you, my friend)
why so sad ..
I pray and hope all the time that such incidents dont happen .. I would prefer to go away before all I care for and love … cant bear the pain
Aww… you are sweetest, Bikram dear… there is always so much compassion and care in your words…
Stay thus, my sweet friend!!
xoxooxo
Ahhh! I also used ‘pixelated’ in my post.
A fine yet mournful write that diminishes just like that moment of love… // Peter.
REALLY?!?!?? JEeezz.. I am so slow on reading these days.. but I GOTTA read yours..RIGHT NOW!!
Thanks for the empathetic and kind words here, Peter… you are a darling!
I really like the speed of this one K. It starts out with some great imagery, then picks up pace as the lines shrink and shrink until nothing remains. The style flows in perfect symmetry to the content. Amazingly well done.
Yaaayy…. thanks, Mark! Such detailed and technical appreciation coming from you means a great deal to me, my good friend… thanks again!
xx
your image is amazing and goes so well with this poem it is like a violin playing a song or dance on your heart
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/09/13/a-new-life-begins/
Wow!! That certainly IS the MOST musically stimulating comment I have ever received on any of my poems, Sarah! A HUGE THANK YOU!!!!
XOXOOXOXOOX
I love the ominous streaks of steely lightning. The ending wonderful too. I’m not sure that you need the actual shape as I think words stand for themselves, but still good end.
heheh.. At some point, I too thought the shape might be an overkill, but then eventually, I just let it be …
Glad you liked it all, my friend… your honest and positive feedback here is most appreciated! Thank you ever so much!
Gestures, words, emotions, sparks, but then silence…… The life cycle of a romance…… bitter ending, as they all seem to be. But each one beautiful in it’s own right. A thousand memories just flew through me… Thank you…….
A bitter ending for many indeed.. *sigh*
I can’t say I am happy that this one made so many memories fly through you.. and can only HOPE that they were all good memories…
But thank you so much, John, for such a heartfelt and beautiful comment… I really appreciate it, my dear friend…
(plenty of warm hugs coming your way)
blurred into an urn of dots. Quite the image Kavita. Inspiring and very well presented once again. U define sooth. Always a pleasure.
Smooth, eh?! Gosh, Henry… I am flattered! AND honored! Thanks, my friend… your continued support and encouragement are absolutely invaluable to me!!
xxxxx
The structure and flow so delicate and soft to paradox the cornered pixels, really well penned my friend. Much enjoyed ~ Rose
Gee.. thank you, Rose
For once, I found one of my own clicks suitable for the poem I wrote… and I am really glad you liked it all here!
Great closing with the “urn of dots”
Love the second stanza, the imagery
The feel of the words when I imagine it read.
Picture perfect too.
Aahh…thanks a bunch, Debbie!! Glad you enjoyed the pic and the poem… yaaaaaaaaayyy!!
Hugs!
Great job on the picture! I use GIMP too.
Such a great poem too. I loved these lines:
Emotions flowed
like molten lava
from a furious volcano
Sadly, I’ve had a few days that felt like that lately.
Yaaayyy!! Same pinch on the GIMPing bit!
I love it!
And thanks on the encouraging words, Rache…
Powerfully emotional!
Aww.. thanks, Madeleine! Very kind of you..
Brilliant! Absolutely brilliant! You’ve definitely gotten better and better since I last visited. Keep them poems coming!
Aww.. you are too sweet, girl.. thanks…
Trust me, words have been come very poorly to me these days… so you saying this means a LOT to me!
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